Luna's Form Poetry
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Comment from Dean Kuch
What's not to love about lovely Luna, the ancient Roman divine personification of the Moon? Luna's always held a great deal of allure for me. I do my best thinking when Luna is out and about, deciding to make a show.
Your Pantoum was very well composed and read wonderfully aloud.
Reviewers who do not read poetry aloud when reviewing do all poets, as well as themselves, a grave injustice, I feel.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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What's not to love about lovely Luna, the ancient Roman divine personification of the Moon? Luna's always held a great deal of allure for me. I do my best thinking when Luna is out and about, deciding to make a show.
Your Pantoum was very well composed and read wonderfully aloud.
Reviewers who do not read poetry aloud when reviewing do all poets, as well as themselves, a grave injustice, I feel.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Dear Dean,
Thanks for your remarks about Luna, I am fascinated by both Greek and Roman gods and goddesses and Luna has a piece of my heart.
I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.
Again, thank you for the review!
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You're very welcome, Luna.
Take care. :)
~Dean
Comment from Pantygynt
It is lovely to see this complex Malaysin form is back again. As with all poetry (chiefly French) the repeats can get in the way of the free flow of the poetry. the skill of the poet is demonstrated by how well this problem is dealt with.
You have taken this challenge head on and produced a lovely, ethereal poem that uses the repeats to best advantage. I think three or four stanzas is probably the best length as anything longer tends to cause the repeats to impinge too much.
I like this so I can see I shall have to keep an eye on you.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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It is lovely to see this complex Malaysin form is back again. As with all poetry (chiefly French) the repeats can get in the way of the free flow of the poetry. the skill of the poet is demonstrated by how well this problem is dealt with.
You have taken this challenge head on and produced a lovely, ethereal poem that uses the repeats to best advantage. I think three or four stanzas is probably the best length as anything longer tends to cause the repeats to impinge too much.
I like this so I can see I shall have to keep an eye on you.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.
Again, thank you for the review!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Pantoum poem. The lines flow well from the one to the other, your repeating lines are strong and create a visual image as well. Good rhyming words.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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A very well-written Pantoum poem. The lines flow well from the one to the other, your repeating lines are strong and create a visual image as well. Good rhyming words.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Sandra, as I am returning to the site after a very long absence, I look forward to meeting many of the new poets, including yourself. I'll make it a point to seek out and read some of your work soon.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is well written and reads very smoothly it works really well and does not appear forced as I imagine this form could do well- done I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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This is well written and reads very smoothly it works really well and does not appear forced as I imagine this form could do well- done I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Mrs. Happy Poet. I'm glad that you enjoyed this one. I'm happy to be back here on fanstory. I'll make it a point to seek out and read some of your work soon!
Comment from Kelly2
Jeni,
I'm not a poet, and it all seems so complicated, the format you must adhere to.
So I can only review based on my feelings and the words.
My favorite stanza:
"Spends most her time with Mother Moon,
a magic carpet takes her there.
The fairies say she'll be here soon,
such lovely fantasies she'll share. "
I like the magic carpet and the fairies and the "lovely fantasies she'll share".
Beautiful and ethereal, I really loved this poem.
Kelly
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Jeni,
I'm not a poet, and it all seems so complicated, the format you must adhere to.
So I can only review based on my feelings and the words.
My favorite stanza:
"Spends most her time with Mother Moon,
a magic carpet takes her there.
The fairies say she'll be here soon,
such lovely fantasies she'll share. "
I like the magic carpet and the fairies and the "lovely fantasies she'll share".
Beautiful and ethereal, I really loved this poem.
Kelly
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Dear Kelly, thanks so VERY much for your kind words. I'm really happy that you enjoyed this effort of mine. I'll make it a point to seek out and read some of your work soon. I also look forward to getting to know you.
Jeni
Comment from Ryn
Love your choice of artwork, it suits your poem. Good wording and topic.
Easy to follow. I like upbeat poems. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Love your choice of artwork, it suits your poem. Good wording and topic.
Easy to follow. I like upbeat poems. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Thanks so much Ryn. It fills my heart to know that this first effort on my behalf has been so well-received. I'll make it a point to seek out and read some of your work soon.
Comment from ElegantButler
It is always wonderful when our muses dance in our minds and hearts. Such wonderful works they help us to create. And it seems yours was dancing merrily for it shows in the joy that is present in your poem.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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It is always wonderful when our muses dance in our minds and hearts. Such wonderful works they help us to create. And it seems yours was dancing merrily for it shows in the joy that is present in your poem.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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What a lovely review! I'm very flattered that you could see my muse, Luna, reappearing in my life. I'm very happy thaat she is back. ElegantButler, I'll make it a point to seek out and review some of your work soon.
Comment from His Grayness
This is an exceptionally well packaged work in art and coloration. The overall work is extremely unique and very interesting. I have no suggestions to offer this author to improve this work and look forward to reading more! HIS GRAYNESS
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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This is an exceptionally well packaged work in art and coloration. The overall work is extremely unique and very interesting. I have no suggestions to offer this author to improve this work and look forward to reading more! HIS GRAYNESS
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Thank you so very, very much. HISGRAYNESS, I'm happy to meet you and appreciate your kind words. I'll make it a point to seek out and review some of your work soon!
Comment from sanejane
Welcome back, both Jeni and Luna. I hope it's acceptable to say I'm sure your son would be delighted with this poem, and pleased that you've reached a stage where you can write again.
This pantoum is beautiful. The repetitive form lends an air of enchantment and reassurance to the poem.
I hope you'll share lots of lovely fantasies on here.
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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Welcome back, both Jeni and Luna. I hope it's acceptable to say I'm sure your son would be delighted with this poem, and pleased that you've reached a stage where you can write again.
This pantoum is beautiful. The repetitive form lends an air of enchantment and reassurance to the poem.
I hope you'll share lots of lovely fantasies on here.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Dear Jane, your kind welcome back and lovely review are both appreciated. I do indeed hope to share many fantasies, as that's what Luna and I do.
Looking forward to reading your work.
Comment from Marykelly
The effect the form, the phantoum, has for me is the repetition. Repetition can remind the reader of something already said or can add emphasis to a thought by repeating it. Both of these results are evident in this poem that gives the speaker an expectation of her muse and a reassurance that her muse will come.
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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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The effect the form, the phantoum, has for me is the repetition. Repetition can remind the reader of something already said or can add emphasis to a thought by repeating it. Both of these results are evident in this poem that gives the speaker an expectation of her muse and a reassurance that her muse will come.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Thanks so very much! I'm happy that you enjoyed.
