Nashville Trashville
just say no...21 total reviews
Comment from barkingdog
What a fun write this was, Mary.
I sympathized with all of you, including your uncle, on the summer vacation. A single man should never be given three youngsters to watch, thinking they could perform adult tasks.
Now to read more about your trip with your adult children. Did he get a tat?
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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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What a fun write this was, Mary.
I sympathized with all of you, including your uncle, on the summer vacation. A single man should never be given three youngsters to watch, thinking they could perform adult tasks.
Now to read more about your trip with your adult children. Did he get a tat?
:) e
Comment Written 02-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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Hi Ellen, thank you so much for the wonderful review. I agree, I don't know what the parentals were even thinking!! I think my little brother cried for three weeks straight. He did not get a tat...but she did! Stay tuned and thank you for your RR&R!
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They DO get so homesick at that age.
I'm sure he'll never send his kids off for so long a stretch, having gone through the trauma himself.
Comment from MelB
Hi Mary, it sounds like quite an interesting trip and a very colorful mass. Your great sense of humor continues to shine through.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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Hi Mary, it sounds like quite an interesting trip and a very colorful mass. Your great sense of humor continues to shine through.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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Hi Melissa, thank you so much for your RR&R. I appreciate your continued follow and lovely review. Have a wonderful Wednesday, and thanks again for reading my work.
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You're welcome. Hope you have a great week!
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, you "should have listened to Bruni." These trips were disasters. At least you lived to tell the tale. This essay engaged me. I kept reading, wondering what could possibly go wrong. Your tone is humorous as well as cautionary. You told your story with one catastrophe after another occurring until you reach a crescendo of disaster.
The only spag is that you need a possessive in "Jenny's turds."
Thank you for sharing your inspiring although cautionary essay.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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Yes, you "should have listened to Bruni." These trips were disasters. At least you lived to tell the tale. This essay engaged me. I kept reading, wondering what could possibly go wrong. Your tone is humorous as well as cautionary. You told your story with one catastrophe after another occurring until you reach a crescendo of disaster.
The only spag is that you need a possessive in "Jenny's turds."
Thank you for sharing your inspiring although cautionary essay.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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Good evening, Andre, and thank you for the wonderful RR&R and for the catch on Jenny's. It has been corrected now. I always enjoy reading your reviews and appreciate your continued interest in my work. Have a wonderful Wednesday!
Comment from Jay Squires
You have such a marvelous sense of humor. Of course that should come as no surprise from just one more of your readers saying the same thing as the rest. This is good evening reading before going to bed (to sleep)--and at 77, what else do you go to bed to do? LOL, good job, Mary.
Just a few things to check over:
when in reality, the kid could barely hold a hammer [Need a comma before "in" to completely set off "in reality".]
. The canines added headache #4 and #5 to my uncles stress level. [... to my UNCLE'S stress level.]
my daughter, recently single following a five year relationship, [... following a FIVE-YEAR relationship, ]
about getting a tatoo, [about getting a TATTOO ]
found me on the eighth floor sipping wine [... on the EIGHTH-FLOOR sipping...]
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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You have such a marvelous sense of humor. Of course that should come as no surprise from just one more of your readers saying the same thing as the rest. This is good evening reading before going to bed (to sleep)--and at 77, what else do you go to bed to do? LOL, good job, Mary.
Just a few things to check over:
when in reality, the kid could barely hold a hammer [Need a comma before "in" to completely set off "in reality".]
. The canines added headache #4 and #5 to my uncles stress level. [... to my UNCLE'S stress level.]
my daughter, recently single following a five year relationship, [... following a FIVE-YEAR relationship, ]
about getting a tatoo, [about getting a TATTOO ]
found me on the eighth floor sipping wine [... on the EIGHTH-FLOOR sipping...]
Comment Written 01-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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Hi Jay! Thank you for your wonderful RR&R and for the catches. We are all going to party when I present a story error free. Don''t hold your breath! I appreciate your 'catches' very much, and they have all been corrected. I really enjoyed reading your review. Thank you so much! Age 77 beats the alternative, right?! Sleep is like nirvana these days for me!!
Comment from Dawn Munro
If I may, I'd like to suggest the following: after going to great (and humorous) lengths to tell us (your readers) why Bruni says it's lose-lose to go on a trip with your adult children, I wouldn't start the next paragraph with "so", just with "When my daughter..."
Why don't we have anymore shows like those ones? I loved Hazel! (*grin*) Thanks for the wonderful reminders you are so often bringing out.
You are killin' me - I am bellowing with laughter at the thought of you bringing a homeless mutt into the rectory - your uncle must have been SO impressed - NOT. HAHAHAHAHAHA!
And now a CAT? AAAAAAAAHAHAHAHA!!!
OMG, the middle finger, your brother, Jenny's added entertainment!!! Girl, you BETTER publish this one!
All kidding aside, Mary, you MUST put a book together of these stories! (And I MUST stop stopping to comment or I'll spoil the momentum you've got going - IF anything can! LOL)
AAAAAAHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAHHAHAAHAAAAAAAHHHAAAAA!!!
Did the trio get banned? (I swear my face is hurting, and my eyes are tearing up, I'm laughing so hard!)
Oh no - I just had a terrible thought - what if it's just because we both have 'sick' senses of what's funny? HAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHA!
"falls"? As in PLURAL? Yikes!
Okay, this is just too good. I have to stop again because MY DIY ear-piercing was successful. And the holes are still fine, thank you. Ice cubes, a NEEDLE, sterilized, NOT a bloody pin unless you want infection, and a heartless friend who ignores your tears and pleading. (LOL)
I want MORE!
(and no (*&%@#@!!) sixes for this hysterically funny wrote!) Fooook!
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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If I may, I'd like to suggest the following: after going to great (and humorous) lengths to tell us (your readers) why Bruni says it's lose-lose to go on a trip with your adult children, I wouldn't start the next paragraph with "so", just with "When my daughter..."
Why don't we have anymore shows like those ones? I loved Hazel! (*grin*) Thanks for the wonderful reminders you are so often bringing out.
You are killin' me - I am bellowing with laughter at the thought of you bringing a homeless mutt into the rectory - your uncle must have been SO impressed - NOT. HAHAHAHAHAHA!
And now a CAT? AAAAAAAAHAHAHAHA!!!
OMG, the middle finger, your brother, Jenny's added entertainment!!! Girl, you BETTER publish this one!
All kidding aside, Mary, you MUST put a book together of these stories! (And I MUST stop stopping to comment or I'll spoil the momentum you've got going - IF anything can! LOL)
AAAAAAHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAHHAHAAHAAAAAAAHHHAAAAA!!!
Did the trio get banned? (I swear my face is hurting, and my eyes are tearing up, I'm laughing so hard!)
Oh no - I just had a terrible thought - what if it's just because we both have 'sick' senses of what's funny? HAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHA!
"falls"? As in PLURAL? Yikes!
Okay, this is just too good. I have to stop again because MY DIY ear-piercing was successful. And the holes are still fine, thank you. Ice cubes, a NEEDLE, sterilized, NOT a bloody pin unless you want infection, and a heartless friend who ignores your tears and pleading. (LOL)
I want MORE!
(and no (*&%@#@!!) sixes for this hysterically funny wrote!) Fooook!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016
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Hahahaha, your reviews always bring sunshine to my work. Thank you, Dawn. I really pondered that 'so'...I was trying to make the emphasis that I did the opposite of Bruni's suggestion...So I did... but I went ahead and removed it because once you have to explain something like I just did, it's better without! So thank you for that.
I need help with my book title...Mary's Wonderland? Weird Shit that Happens to Me? ... C'mon, seeking all suggestions. :D I'm really glad you enjoyed it, because I was honestly not feeling it, and after writing most of it, I went to "save" and lost everything when I received the fatal...'you are not connected to the internet'. FOOOOOOOK!!!!! I wanted to cry, but decided to go polish furniture instead. So damn frustrating!!
Thank you again, Dawn! XO
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Oh NO-o-o-o-o-o!!! How awful! So sorry! Tell me you have all saved in Word documents at least?
Title, huh..."My Life As A _______ "(*evil twinkle* again- fill in the blank! LOL)
Comment from Sasha
I love Brunhilda and this story brought back some not so fun memories of my own daughter. She wasn't an adult, but just 12 years old. She had awesomely lovely, long, soft curly hair. Unlike mine, she could wash it, towel dry it and it would fall perfectly over her shoulders and down her back. One morning she asked me if she could get a Mohawk hair cut. I casually responded with, "over my dead body." I return later that afternoon and found her sitting at the kitchen table. She not only had a Mohawk, she had it died purple. I honestly almost had a heart attack. We laugh about it now, but I was just sick to my stomach and beyond angry. I cannot wait to hear the rest of your fun family vacation. Great work with this one.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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I love Brunhilda and this story brought back some not so fun memories of my own daughter. She wasn't an adult, but just 12 years old. She had awesomely lovely, long, soft curly hair. Unlike mine, she could wash it, towel dry it and it would fall perfectly over her shoulders and down her back. One morning she asked me if she could get a Mohawk hair cut. I casually responded with, "over my dead body." I return later that afternoon and found her sitting at the kitchen table. She not only had a Mohawk, she had it died purple. I honestly almost had a heart attack. We laugh about it now, but I was just sick to my stomach and beyond angry. I cannot wait to hear the rest of your fun family vacation. Great work with this one.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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Hi Sasha, thank you so much for your RR&R! I appreciate your story with your daughter more than you know. I know the feeling of dread when they do something like that. I think I might have cried on that one! We laugh about Nashville five years later, but I was ready to shoot both my kids that weekend! Thanks again and have a great weekend!
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A funny story. It's good to see Brunhilda back She's a hoot. In fact your whole family sounds like a hoot. It's easy to find things to write about when your families nuts.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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A funny story. It's good to see Brunhilda back She's a hoot. In fact your whole family sounds like a hoot. It's easy to find things to write about when your families nuts.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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Haha, thanks Thomas...I think? I appreciate your RR&R very much. I'm glad you like Bruni...she is demanding more time in my writing...becoming a real diva of sorts. Have a great evening!
Comment from DR DIP
You know Mary, i love the wAY YOU RIGHT IT HAS A SATIRICAL FACETIOUS FEEL ABOUT IT WITH A BIT OF SMART ARSERY ALL IN ONE LOL
yOU CERTAINLY TELL IT HOW IT IS THATS FOR SURE. yOU KNOW i AM USUALLY NOT ONE TO READ SHORT STORIES I HAVE NEVER BEEN A READER FULLSTOP BUT i HAVE ENJOYED YOUR WRITING brunhilda...jUST LOOKED UP AND SAW i WAS ON CAPSLOK i APOLOGISE LOL FOR SHOUTING
DIP
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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You know Mary, i love the wAY YOU RIGHT IT HAS A SATIRICAL FACETIOUS FEEL ABOUT IT WITH A BIT OF SMART ARSERY ALL IN ONE LOL
yOU CERTAINLY TELL IT HOW IT IS THATS FOR SURE. yOU KNOW i AM USUALLY NOT ONE TO READ SHORT STORIES I HAVE NEVER BEEN A READER FULLSTOP BUT i HAVE ENJOYED YOUR WRITING brunhilda...jUST LOOKED UP AND SAW i WAS ON CAPSLOK i APOLOGISE LOL FOR SHOUTING
DIP
Comment Written 01-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Dip, I really enjoyed your review, thank you so much. I am honored that you decide to read me in that case. Brunhilda is too...all the way from Australia :) Have a great Wednesday!
Comment from DonandVicki
Thank you for your story, you have convinced me that I should never go on a trip with my chi
dren, what I don't know won't hurt me.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your story, you have convinced me that I should never go on a trip with my chi
dren, what I don't know won't hurt me.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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Haha, thank you DonandVicki...It's about to get much worse! I appreciate your RR&R and continued interest in my work.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Mary
= So sorry, I apologize for not reviewing your work the last few days.
= My FM has been acting up of late, so it has slowed me down a lot.
= Just cannot concentrate the last few days, or get around too well.
= I'm also trying to get ready for company this weekend--not easy while sick.
= It will be a few days until I can get back into the swing of things.
= I didn't want you to think I'm ignoring you. Just need down time.
= I hate to do it, but please excuse the cut/paste.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings --- Jax
<> Published as --- Jacqueline M Franklin
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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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Hi, Mary
= So sorry, I apologize for not reviewing your work the last few days.
= My FM has been acting up of late, so it has slowed me down a lot.
= Just cannot concentrate the last few days, or get around too well.
= I'm also trying to get ready for company this weekend--not easy while sick.
= It will be a few days until I can get back into the swing of things.
= I didn't want you to think I'm ignoring you. Just need down time.
= I hate to do it, but please excuse the cut/paste.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings --- Jax
<> Published as --- Jacqueline M Franklin
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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No worries, Jax, I understand completely. With two new grandbabies on the way and me providing their daycare, I don't know how much longer I'll be able to keep this up come August. Thank you for the RR&R. Absolutely no worries. I hope you get some relief soon and are feeling better. :)