Where's Bob? (Conclusion)
A toddler's love and her missing grampie...21 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A great story. I'm sure Bob was watching and laughing. You seem to have a way of falling into comedy situations, much like Carol with her head stuck in a cannon.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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A great story. I'm sure Bob was watching and laughing. You seem to have a way of falling into comedy situations, much like Carol with her head stuck in a cannon.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Thank you, Thomas, for your RR&R and kind words. I am sure he was too! Carol and her head in a cannon...hmmmm. Sounds like another story for you!
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
At last your Emily found her Bob! :) One can just imagine how delighted she would have been to finally find her buddy, following days of searching for him.
Another exceptionally well written story, Mary. You give your reader a very clear picture of the type of man that your father was, and your story emphasizes how children really say, and do, some very embarrassing (to their parents) things at what always seems like the most inappropriate of times. Again, as in other chapters, this sort of thing really endears the reader to you and your family, and it really draws the reader into the story, as we all can identify with our own children having said or done similar types of things on occasion.
Your descriptions are vividly clear, and the reader can easily place themselves there at the scene, and feel that they are actually witnessing the entire thing.
I laughed at the bit about the two girls trying to make some money with their "pay to pray" venture. LOL ... you can't make this stuff up! They probably saw the lemonade, and their brains immediately went to 'let's man this lemonade stand and make some money', ha!.
Re your author notes .... your friend's text about your Dad's funeral really sums up the whole experience perfectly. "Tears mixed with laughter" ... I don't think that a funeral could get any better than that!
Connie
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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At last your Emily found her Bob! :) One can just imagine how delighted she would have been to finally find her buddy, following days of searching for him.
Another exceptionally well written story, Mary. You give your reader a very clear picture of the type of man that your father was, and your story emphasizes how children really say, and do, some very embarrassing (to their parents) things at what always seems like the most inappropriate of times. Again, as in other chapters, this sort of thing really endears the reader to you and your family, and it really draws the reader into the story, as we all can identify with our own children having said or done similar types of things on occasion.
Your descriptions are vividly clear, and the reader can easily place themselves there at the scene, and feel that they are actually witnessing the entire thing.
I laughed at the bit about the two girls trying to make some money with their "pay to pray" venture. LOL ... you can't make this stuff up! They probably saw the lemonade, and their brains immediately went to 'let's man this lemonade stand and make some money', ha!.
Re your author notes .... your friend's text about your Dad's funeral really sums up the whole experience perfectly. "Tears mixed with laughter" ... I don't think that a funeral could get any better than that!
Connie
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Thank you so much, Connie, for the wonderful review and your feedback. Thank you so much for noting the details that help me as a writer. I appreciate you so much as a constant friend and reviewer here at FanStory. XO
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Ditto, Mary! :)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I am sure that was the exact funeral your father would have wanted. It was wonderful. No one want to leave family and loved ones in tears, your children made sure that wouldn't happen, and little Emily, well, he would have loved her trying to wake him up. I just loved this story, what a wonderful memory, instead of the usual one of tears. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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I am sure that was the exact funeral your father would have wanted. It was wonderful. No one want to leave family and loved ones in tears, your children made sure that wouldn't happen, and little Emily, well, he would have loved her trying to wake him up. I just loved this story, what a wonderful memory, instead of the usual one of tears. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Thank you, Sandra, for your lovely review and wonderful words. It was the perfect funeral for Dad, and we just imagined him getting a big kick out of every escapade! I appreciate your review and interest in my work. Have a fabulous Sunday.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Your dad and my mom were two of a kind.
This was a joy to read and the mixture of humor in the situation was the best that only you could do.
No problems noted except that I had to read it again to get what I missed the first time.lol
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Your dad and my mom were two of a kind.
This was a joy to read and the mixture of humor in the situation was the best that only you could do.
No problems noted except that I had to read it again to get what I missed the first time.lol
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Hi Barb, thank you for your RR&R and kind words. I appreciate your input and reaction to the story. Have a wonderful Sunday.
Comment from Kelly2
At least when Emily found Bob, she just thought he was sleeping. That's a relief.
Now, we at last find some humor, even in a bad situation:
"had hijacked the complimentary refreshment stand in the lobby, turning it into a 'pay to pray' capital adventure. " What does this child do for a living today? Do you mean venture?
"her seven year old inquiring mind wanted to know right then and there." "simultaneous gasping took place throughout the chapel." This is just too fooooooking funny!
"I believed I needed to get my drunk on. I was certain my mom was in need of her own cardboard box of wine, STAT!" (I was actually thinking this at the exact moment before I read it!)
"My dad's beloved but horny little Shih Tzu dog, Teddy, was busy humping an empty gallon milk carton in the middle of the yard, fearless and shameless in front of the assembled. Fr. Sharpe looked at me and without missing a beat announced, "Quick recovery--no grief counseling for the dog!" I would be looking for the cameras too. Seriously.
Truth really is stranger than fiction.
Very nicely written.
Kelly
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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At least when Emily found Bob, she just thought he was sleeping. That's a relief.
Now, we at last find some humor, even in a bad situation:
"had hijacked the complimentary refreshment stand in the lobby, turning it into a 'pay to pray' capital adventure. " What does this child do for a living today? Do you mean venture?
"her seven year old inquiring mind wanted to know right then and there." "simultaneous gasping took place throughout the chapel." This is just too fooooooking funny!
"I believed I needed to get my drunk on. I was certain my mom was in need of her own cardboard box of wine, STAT!" (I was actually thinking this at the exact moment before I read it!)
"My dad's beloved but horny little Shih Tzu dog, Teddy, was busy humping an empty gallon milk carton in the middle of the yard, fearless and shameless in front of the assembled. Fr. Sharpe looked at me and without missing a beat announced, "Quick recovery--no grief counseling for the dog!" I would be looking for the cameras too. Seriously.
Truth really is stranger than fiction.
Very nicely written.
Kelly
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Hi Kelly, so happy to see you back, soul sister in humor writing 😄 thank you for your awesome review on this. I appreciate you very much. (I went with adventure vs. venture since 7 year olds are always looking for an adventure ☺
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Yeah, I was wondering if that was a spin on words. It occurred to me when I was going to ask if she was a venture capitalist. LOL
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well, another six-worthy write, my friend, but I think I'll hold onto it until I see what you've just posted tonight. Your father's funeral sounds like it would have made him happy to see the antics his little buddy and others got up to. I guess your friend's text said it best.
Oops, lucky thing I checked first - I've been off site so much I thought I'd missed this and just now caught it - I didn't. It's dated today, so I can rate it properly.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Well, another six-worthy write, my friend, but I think I'll hold onto it until I see what you've just posted tonight. Your father's funeral sounds like it would have made him happy to see the antics his little buddy and others got up to. I guess your friend's text said it best.
Oops, lucky thing I checked first - I've been off site so much I thought I'd missed this and just now caught it - I didn't. It's dated today, so I can rate it properly.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Thank you so much Dawn, for your kind words and for your review. The six was an awesome addition for sure. It was a funeral dad would have laughed about for years. Thank you and happy Sunday!
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Still recovering from the shock of losing my friend yesterday, but thanks. Staying on site a bit, keeping busy might help. XX
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Oh no!!! I am so sorry. Is this the person in your building who has been hospitalized? Ah, Dawn. I am sad for you. Hugs.
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Yes. He had his surgery a few days ago, after being put off the last time. Thanks, Mary!
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Not not a clue what happened. He had surgery a few days ago (for prostrate), but seemed fine. However, he apparently had a minor stroke about six weeks ago too, when you're referring to his hospitalization, so perhaps that's what happened - I just know it was a big shock.
Comment from DR DIP
Oh I loved this story! the innocence of a child entrepreneur! Your dad sounds like a funny guy who loved his grandkids immensely. I am not a grandparent yet But it might be happening in the near future as my first born and his wife are getting all clucky lol FUUUUUUUUUCK! lol
dip
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Oh I loved this story! the innocence of a child entrepreneur! Your dad sounds like a funny guy who loved his grandkids immensely. I am not a grandparent yet But it might be happening in the near future as my first born and his wife are getting all clucky lol FUUUUUUUUUCK! lol
dip
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Hi Dip, thank you for your wonderful review and for that fabulous SIX!! So very appreciated! I had to laugh at your closing comment and the clucky reference!! How exciting for your family. There is mothing quite like grandparenting!!
Comment from Sis Cat
Ha! This made me laugh, "Quick recovery--no grief counseling for the dog!" How clever of Fr. Sharpe!
This chapter is a fine collection of memories, conversations, and observations surrounding the funeral of your father which was both sad and comical at the same time:
"Katie, along with a friend's daughter, Molly, had hijacked the complimentary refreshment stand in the lobby, turning it into a 'pay to pray' capital adventure."
Funerals can bring out the oddest behavior of people. I am sure your father would have understood it and laughed.
The only spags are these in your author's notes: "Ã?????Ã????Ã???Ã??Ã?."
Thank you for sharing your memories. You have my condolences.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Ha! This made me laugh, "Quick recovery--no grief counseling for the dog!" How clever of Fr. Sharpe!
This chapter is a fine collection of memories, conversations, and observations surrounding the funeral of your father which was both sad and comical at the same time:
"Katie, along with a friend's daughter, Molly, had hijacked the complimentary refreshment stand in the lobby, turning it into a 'pay to pray' capital adventure."
Funerals can bring out the oddest behavior of people. I am sure your father would have understood it and laughed.
The only spags are these in your author's notes: "Ã?????Ã????Ã???Ã??Ã?."
Thank you for sharing your memories. You have my condolences.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Thank you, Andre, for your wonderful RR&R, and for letting me know about the weird characters showing up in the Notes section. They've been corrected and it seems to happen when I switch computers, going from an Apple to a Dell. They have been removed. I appreciate your continued interest in my work andvwonderful reviews.
Comment from Sasha
This is sad, humorous and delightful. What a charming child. I would have both laughed and cried had my daughter done the same. Lovely tribute to you father, daughter and thanks so much for making me laugh. Excellent work with this story. I enjoyed it immensely.
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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This is sad, humorous and delightful. What a charming child. I would have both laughed and cried had my daughter done the same. Lovely tribute to you father, daughter and thanks so much for making me laugh. Excellent work with this story. I enjoyed it immensely.
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Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Thank you, Sasha, for your second review of the day for me! Much appreciated. I loved reading your words on my fathers story, especially and thank you so much for that. Have a wonderful weekend!
Comment from LaRosa
Nothing could be finer! 6***'s all the way! Quick flowing, light touch to a traditionally serious and mournful moment. The image of an un-churched yet deeply faithful and godly parent was perfectly described along with his impact on all he knew from community down (or should I say UP) to the tiniest little angel of love.
Wonderful intro and juxtaposition of verbal-bombs.
A very good read, kept my mind, heart attention all the way!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Nothing could be finer! 6***'s all the way! Quick flowing, light touch to a traditionally serious and mournful moment. The image of an un-churched yet deeply faithful and godly parent was perfectly described along with his impact on all he knew from community down (or should I say UP) to the tiniest little angel of love.
Wonderful intro and juxtaposition of verbal-bombs.
A very good read, kept my mind, heart attention all the way!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Thank you so much for this most fantastic review and award of a six LaRosa! I greatly appreciate your specific review and will come back to it often as I reflect on this story months later. Thank you so very much for your gift of review. The first part of the story is no longer earning, but would help frame this piece if you are so inclined. No need to review it, just offering that for clarity. Have a wonderful weekend, and thank you again.
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I would love to go back and read Where's Bob! In fact I already decided that the way you write makes me want to read more. Got busy and forgot to bookmark you (think that's what you do? I'm new to this and keep forgetting, getting confused) Promise, I'll do it! Keep writing, you're great!
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Love 'em already!
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Gotcha, thanks