The End of the Story
There is always an end to the story, eventually.34 total reviews
Comment from damommy
Bless your heart. This happens to so many of us.
Mine was my childhood sweetheart since we were twelve years old. Married for twenty. I was completely blindsided. His excuse was he wanted to be free, too. Sure. Right.
But we survived, didn't we? Like you I will always love him, but I'd never take him back. He asked three times.
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Bless your heart. This happens to so many of us.
Mine was my childhood sweetheart since we were twelve years old. Married for twenty. I was completely blindsided. His excuse was he wanted to be free, too. Sure. Right.
But we survived, didn't we? Like you I will always love him, but I'd never take him back. He asked three times.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
Comment from Mary Wakeford
First off, my sympathies on several levels. I have heard of this happening a few times over the course of my life and I'm always amazed at how they pull it off. I'm exhausted just living my own life, I can imagine trying to manage a double one. You didn't mention if you had actually divorced, but it seems to me Sue is liable for some of his debt to the IRS. Isn't it something how she was never there for him when he really needed her. I'm so sorry. You deserved better. A few suggestions:
I was struck dumb. -> I was dumb struck
Oh yes, the sightings...;people didn't want me to -> I would remove the ... and just leave the semi-colon.
His twin brother, the kids and I , took -> remove space following I,
He passed away after excruciating months. I did my best to just love him. By then, it no longer mattered whether he could share the truth with me. It was just too late.
-> I would add the number of excruciating months (six; seven...) I'd also lose the 'just' -> I did my best to love him. then you can keep the second one ... It was just too late.
He has (had) been seeing Sue for years. They had planned their retirement together. He bought property on a lake, a boat, and they had been saving money. All their assets were placed in HER name. Sue ended up with about half of what should have been left to the kids and me. Legally, there wasn't anything I could do about it. Sue was already a wealthy woman, and in the end she held on to all the savings and property that were our children's and my rightful inheritance as Mike had put everything in her name.
Then, the IRS visited. Mike had made a real mess for me to clean up. In trying to impress her, he spent more money than he had. I couldn't believe it.
So, the fight for some kind of normalcy continues. I always have and always will love Mike, but I have no idea who he really was.
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First off, my sympathies on several levels. I have heard of this happening a few times over the course of my life and I'm always amazed at how they pull it off. I'm exhausted just living my own life, I can imagine trying to manage a double one. You didn't mention if you had actually divorced, but it seems to me Sue is liable for some of his debt to the IRS. Isn't it something how she was never there for him when he really needed her. I'm so sorry. You deserved better. A few suggestions:
I was struck dumb. -> I was dumb struck
Oh yes, the sightings...;people didn't want me to -> I would remove the ... and just leave the semi-colon.
His twin brother, the kids and I , took -> remove space following I,
He passed away after excruciating months. I did my best to just love him. By then, it no longer mattered whether he could share the truth with me. It was just too late.
-> I would add the number of excruciating months (six; seven...) I'd also lose the 'just' -> I did my best to love him. then you can keep the second one ... It was just too late.
He has (had) been seeing Sue for years. They had planned their retirement together. He bought property on a lake, a boat, and they had been saving money. All their assets were placed in HER name. Sue ended up with about half of what should have been left to the kids and me. Legally, there wasn't anything I could do about it. Sue was already a wealthy woman, and in the end she held on to all the savings and property that were our children's and my rightful inheritance as Mike had put everything in her name.
Then, the IRS visited. Mike had made a real mess for me to clean up. In trying to impress her, he spent more money than he had. I couldn't believe it.
So, the fight for some kind of normalcy continues. I always have and always will love Mike, but I have no idea who he really was.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh my God, what a tragic story - I am so sorry! This must have been excruciating to write. I hope it was at least somewhat cathartic for you.
I have one very small suggestion for this brilliant non-fiction - this part of the sentence is redundant: "...too much money he didn't have..." I would omit 'too much'.
Best of luck in the contest, and I hope life will be so much kinder to you...
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Oh my God, what a tragic story - I am so sorry! This must have been excruciating to write. I hope it was at least somewhat cathartic for you.
I have one very small suggestion for this brilliant non-fiction - this part of the sentence is redundant: "...too much money he didn't have..." I would omit 'too much'.
Best of luck in the contest, and I hope life will be so much kinder to you...
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
Comment from light
Wow! That's a heart grabber. You told this story with great emotion. That really was a fight of a life. Well done. Hope you do well in the contest.
Elaine
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Wow! That's a heart grabber. You told this story with great emotion. That really was a fight of a life. Well done. Hope you do well in the contest.
Elaine
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
Comment from Ira White
WoW! This is a sad tale indeed. Well written, it lays out all the important points of the man's infidelity without going overboard. I would be crushed if this happened to me...
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WoW! This is a sad tale indeed. Well written, it lays out all the important points of the man's infidelity without going overboard. I would be crushed if this happened to me...
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
Comment from Kooky Clown
I read this with sadness as i am lucky That i have been married for over fifty years and although I don't know you, you have my heartfelt sympathy for what your partner put you through all those years. I hope sharing it will help a little with the sadness you must feel.
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I read this with sadness as i am lucky That i have been married for over fifty years and although I don't know you, you have my heartfelt sympathy for what your partner put you through all those years. I hope sharing it will help a little with the sadness you must feel.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
Comment from Alex Biasin
This was very well written, though I can't imagine how hard it must've been to do - I just have to say that it sounds like he was an absolute tool and didn't deserve your devotion.
All the best for you in the future.
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This was very well written, though I can't imagine how hard it must've been to do - I just have to say that it sounds like he was an absolute tool and didn't deserve your devotion.
All the best for you in the future.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
Comment from Bridge
You are a really strong woman . I am not sure ...if I had been in your place. A school mate of mine went through a similar situation...her husband had two families as well. A great piece. It is very well written and is very gripping.
Thank you for sharing
Regards
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You are a really strong woman . I am not sure ...if I had been in your place. A school mate of mine went through a similar situation...her husband had two families as well. A great piece. It is very well written and is very gripping.
Thank you for sharing
Regards
Comment Written 17-Oct-2016
Comment from crybry67
Yours is a particularly devastating story, and the way you've come through it is a testament to your strength. I think you write very well, and I can imagine it is great therapy at times. I know it is for me...
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Yours is a particularly devastating story, and the way you've come through it is a testament to your strength. I think you write very well, and I can imagine it is great therapy at times. I know it is for me...
Comment Written 17-Oct-2016
Comment from Stephanie Burster
This is such a sad piece. To have a husband that will not be there for his wife and kids. Who spends all his time with his work, golfing etc. (Sue). He lied his whole life to his family about who he was and the wife stuck by him. That is something I could not do. Not to a man so selfish that he left his wife with nothing but sorrow. So well written.
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This is such a sad piece. To have a husband that will not be there for his wife and kids. Who spends all his time with his work, golfing etc. (Sue). He lied his whole life to his family about who he was and the wife stuck by him. That is something I could not do. Not to a man so selfish that he left his wife with nothing but sorrow. So well written.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2016