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Comment from seaglass
This is a lovely poem and gives us a glimpse of the girl in the woman. I too once considered religious work. I wanted to run an orphanage in a their world country. We find our path in the end.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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This is a lovely poem and gives us a glimpse of the girl in the woman. I too once considered religious work. I wanted to run an orphanage in a their world country. We find our path in the end.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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I think I was 5 years old when I wanted to be a nun. I was just really "into" church one day, even though I didn't understand the sermon at all. A nun who was there gave me her rosary! I've kept it all these years :))
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm sure every one of us would wish to change something in our lives if we could, and many of us would choose to change about everything. But in truth, what difference would it all really make? Or would it feed the butterfly effect? I'm guessing the difference would truly be minute. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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I'm sure every one of us would wish to change something in our lives if we could, and many of us would choose to change about everything. But in truth, what difference would it all really make? Or would it feed the butterfly effect? I'm guessing the difference would truly be minute. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 10-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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I agree with you, the difference might not end up being that profound. I generally try to avoid second-guessing past decisions! Thanks, Ric :)) Carol
Comment from Mark Valentine
Actually, I think nun and astronaut are probably the two coolest jobs in the world (the best woule be a nun who is also an astronaut - Sally Fields almost did that) - though meteorologist is up there too.
This is a very cool form (I think I've said that before, but the more I read, the more I like it - may have to try one myself). The arc of the poem is wonderful, especially because it resolves at such a great place - not the regrets over the unfulfilled fantasies, but the embrace of a path well-chosen. The "most" in the last line is perfect!
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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Actually, I think nun and astronaut are probably the two coolest jobs in the world (the best woule be a nun who is also an astronaut - Sally Fields almost did that) - though meteorologist is up there too.
This is a very cool form (I think I've said that before, but the more I read, the more I like it - may have to try one myself). The arc of the poem is wonderful, especially because it resolves at such a great place - not the regrets over the unfulfilled fantasies, but the embrace of a path well-chosen. The "most" in the last line is perfect!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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Lolol, I'm really glad I didn't go for the nun option...astronaut would have been pretty cool though! I really do like this form, and it is surprisingly easy - Gynt did a great job with this one. I liked the the "most" too - I'm a bit of a rebel at heart :)) Carol
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Carol. I do like this poem as it expresses the myriad of choices we all have in life and these choices evolve and change as we travel. Having lived in California for 10 years, I identify with the phrase, "she dreams and worships redwood trees--." Wonderful rhyming and form throughout. Marilyn
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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Hi Carol. I do like this poem as it expresses the myriad of choices we all have in life and these choices evolve and change as we travel. Having lived in California for 10 years, I identify with the phrase, "she dreams and worships redwood trees--." Wonderful rhyming and form throughout. Marilyn
Comment Written 10-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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Thanks, Marilyn - yes, those redwoods are amazing! I love to stand and gaze at the upper branches, imagining the world up there :) Carol
Comment from Pantygynt
This lass to full time fibber grew
(gets paid to check sea weed).
no wonder she now wants to do
some other thing instead (as an example of forza rima almost as good as "Carol Cee")
of checking sea weed to devine
whether or no the sun will shine
her meter better far than mine
on that all are agreed.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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This lass to full time fibber grew
(gets paid to check sea weed).
no wonder she now wants to do
some other thing instead (as an example of forza rima almost as good as "Carol Cee")
of checking sea weed to devine
whether or no the sun will shine
her meter better far than mine
on that all are agreed.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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Oh, I do so love poetic reviews on my work. Gets paid to check seaweed? I WISH - lol, I'd do anything to get away from this desk!
I do recall hearing about forza rima - is that something you made up?
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Yes. In my review of Marks terza rim a I spotted a forced rhyme and coined the phrase. He loved it and asked me if I would mind if he organised a formal rima contest.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Very nice, carol. This is a wonderfully well executed Pantygynt Poem.
Rife with vivid imagery, it's a bit of an introspective, melancholy musing; wond'ring what might have been...could have been...
Wonderful...
~Dean :}
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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Very nice, carol. This is a wonderfully well executed Pantygynt Poem.
Rife with vivid imagery, it's a bit of an introspective, melancholy musing; wond'ring what might have been...could have been...
Wonderful...
~Dean :}
Comment Written 10-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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What could have been we will never know - we can only surmise. Would a different decision have made our life totally different, or would we essentially be the same person we are now? No way to know...which is okay with me :)) Carol
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Personally, Carol, I wouldn't change a thing I've done. It's all made me the person I am today, and I'm sure you feel much the same way about your life.
Take care.
~Dean
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The only thing I'd change would be if I could somehow make myself a much better surfer, lol. Oh, maybe richer too as long as I'm at it! Lol (kidding)
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Richer would be nice...lol.
Comment from misscookie
I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem
Your words captured my attention from the first line to the last
You see I too wanted to be come a nun
I guess it was not in God's plans.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem
Your words captured my attention from the first line to the last
You see I too wanted to be come a nun
I guess it was not in God's plans.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 10-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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Thanks so much, my friend. How interesting that you had the desire to become a nun too. Do all little girls go through that? I think maybe they do :)) Carol
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I believe they do for different reason.
Take care.
cookie
Comment from WalkerMan
Few lives ever turn out as planned in childhood, as revised plans in teen years, or even as further refined plans from decade to decade. There are always surprises, both good and bad, that alter our thinking and subsequent choices. Maybe we should just be thankful if we last through "many scores of years" still able to do some of what we like.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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Few lives ever turn out as planned in childhood, as revised plans in teen years, or even as further refined plans from decade to decade. There are always surprises, both good and bad, that alter our thinking and subsequent choices. Maybe we should just be thankful if we last through "many scores of years" still able to do some of what we like.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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I think you are right, 100 percent - just be grateful to make it through. And, yes, there are many surprises along the way! Thanks for the review :)) Carol
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You're welcome, Carol. But "many scores of years"? As a score is twenty, surely you're not that old (or, at least, don't look it). :)) -- Mike
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Well, I'm 53 so "many" scores is a slight exaggeration...hey, poetic license!
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Carol, fifties today are like thirties not that long ago. I'm twenty years older than you are and still feel like I'm in my thirties, though I'm told I look not a day over 347. :)) -- Mike
Comment from LIJ Red
This Pantygynt Cycle poem for the Potlatch challenge follows the form nicely and tells the story of a child of the last century in excellent fashion.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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This Pantygynt Cycle poem for the Potlatch challenge follows the form nicely and tells the story of a child of the last century in excellent fashion.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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Thank you, it was supposed to be about me but I always seem to give the impression of old times.
Comment from Nika2016
Five stars for a tree-hugger...I love your dreams. .someone said you are a meteorologist? Spelling? I said I would believe it when you explain solar dimming and chemtrails.
Great poem.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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Five stars for a tree-hugger...I love your dreams. .someone said you are a meteorologist? Spelling? I said I would believe it when you explain solar dimming and chemtrails.
Great poem.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2016
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Well, I am a meteorologist, whether you believe it or not - lol...and tree hugger. :)
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Okay..then Miss Smarty...
Why haven't I seen you on TV?
Just kidding...Good for you...
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I work for NOAA - federal government - and thankfully haven't been on TV in quite a while! :))
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Cool....and I have a NOAA report confirming weather manipulation...hmm
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Now that's interesting.I must refrain from comment in the interest of keeping all our secrets ;)
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Hmmmm