To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 " Origins hunger"Poems by Michael
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Comment from Bill O'Bier
Marmalade in the morning has the same effect on taste buds that a cold shower has on the body- go figure. That being said, the words of your poem are expressive and create wonderful images. Thanks for sharing this fine piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill~ .
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
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Marmalade in the morning has the same effect on taste buds that a cold shower has on the body- go figure. That being said, the words of your poem are expressive and create wonderful images. Thanks for sharing this fine piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill~ .
Comment Written 09-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
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ah in my poetry...the shower is shared after the marmalade Bill.
in fact I hope to make it tradition...a ah weekly thing at least. Its the fountain of youth Bill....I found it at long last...shared showers and marmalade...sssshh...between you and Bro. this stuff is gold...-headnod-....love Michael
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Yes-you're on to something. Drive it home
All the best...
Bill
Comment from RoostyNester
A very nice poem of a love that is slipping away. Begging for just the bread crumbs. I like the style of your poem and the message it brings to the reader.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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A very nice poem of a love that is slipping away. Begging for just the bread crumbs. I like the style of your poem and the message it brings to the reader.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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-headtilt-....ah wrong vibe Dear....-smile-
unlike Stella...I cant lose my groove...-wink-...besides I only beg when there's only one segue left. aha...however, I am pleased you enjoyed. love Michael
Comment from MizKat
Hi Son,
You have written a very nice poem again. I enjoyed reading it too.
I hope you will continue to write poetry because you're very good at it.
They are what I like writing best. In fact I just wrote a true poem about me.
The name of it is "Funny Poem is True" if you care to read it, which would be nice.
Mum Kat
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Hi Son,
You have written a very nice poem again. I enjoyed reading it too.
I hope you will continue to write poetry because you're very good at it.
They are what I like writing best. In fact I just wrote a true poem about me.
The name of it is "Funny Poem is True" if you care to read it, which would be nice.
Mum Kat
Comment Written 09-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Hello Mum....-smile-
well I hopes so too ...I think as long as nobody who loves me tries to kill me...I'll be fine....-smile-...anyway, I think I might hire stranger for a body guard just in case....-wink-...I'm headed your way now. break out the milk and cookies....love Michael
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Oh your note was so cute that I couldn't help laughing a little. Of course I always feel better after I laugh. Thanks so much for that. Mum
Comment from Leineco
Hunger's Origins
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fermenting scent of bread
wafting promises
of crumbs to be fed
after slow rise and kneading...
leavened concoction
baked to
to perfection
< > < > < >
2
snippets of Shelley
murmured at random
neath parasol shelter;
poetic seduction
< > < > < >
3
morning serenade;
whispered breath
brushing through sleep's
tousled locks
< > < > < >
delicious escapades
sweet as marmalade
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Hunger's Origins
1
fermenting scent of bread
wafting promises
of crumbs to be fed
after slow rise and kneading...
leavened concoction
baked to
to perfection
< > < > < >
2
snippets of Shelley
murmured at random
neath parasol shelter;
poetic seduction
< > < > < >
3
morning serenade;
whispered breath
brushing through sleep's
tousled locks
< > < > < >
delicious escapades
sweet as marmalade
Comment Written 09-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Okay okay...please...please try to contain yourself Leinko....osha regulations and everything...besides this could get embarrassing if were not careful.....-smile- ....so next time at least wear a seat belt will ya...Alright Betty Davis eyes...see ya later...-headnod--callme-...love Michael
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Seat belts and airbags firmly engaged. . .poetic pedal to the metal. . .destination: 2nd star to the right and straight on to morning. . .flights of fancy catered by Harry & David. . .muse and I heading out now, in search of more inspiration. . .Foster Grants and Mont Blanc in hand~ ~
:-)
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yea...well...I dont like you anymore Leinko.........-smile-
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You cut me to the quick :-(
My search for more inspiration holds no interest?
And here I thought we had developed poetic simpatico. . .that you liked my poetic repartee.
some day I'll figure out what I've clearly misunderstood. . .learn to walk that fine line between friendly banter and hurtful misunderstandings.
Even if you don't. . .I still like you.
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I'll always love you Leinko...you know that...I have an addictive personality...-shouldershrug-...and terett syndrome in traffic...but...thats neither here nor there....well dont let me keep you from your muse Leinko....far be it from me to interrupt your attention getter...its fine.....goodnight-
Comment from oliver818
I really enjoyed that, from the beginning right through. A really nice piece. I love the image of breadcrumb bliss, very powerful . Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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I really enjoyed that, from the beginning right through. A really nice piece. I love the image of breadcrumb bliss, very powerful . Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2016
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Hey Man...-smile-
Good to here...glad you did. its my Valium now.
a sedation of a sort I guess. thanks....love Michael
Comment from djsaxon
Damn your clever hide. I can't review, we just sorta chat. An aggressive Isaak choice (he of gentle). Seminal track from him. "lots of unmade made tender love (delete made). Love that that you don't define "aubade". It's like a challenge. If you don't understand it, stop reading - smile. DJ xx
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Damn your clever hide. I can't review, we just sorta chat. An aggressive Isaak choice (he of gentle). Seminal track from him. "lots of unmade made tender love (delete made). Love that that you don't define "aubade". It's like a challenge. If you don't understand it, stop reading - smile. DJ xx
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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aha...hey DJ....-smile-
yea...I like three of his really well. no I want two "made-s" thats a poets responsibility is it not...to take the unmade and transform it into made love...yea I want two...thanks Bro....love Michael
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two it is xx
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
We should never feel we owe someone love, my friend. I especially like this:
the rest is unsaid heard aubade
in a stroke of genesis nethermost special
holy ghost to poets
the rest is unsaid heard aubade
in a stroke of genesis nethermost special
holy ghost to poets
Very well written as always, my friend~Debbie
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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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We should never feel we owe someone love, my friend. I especially like this:
the rest is unsaid heard aubade
in a stroke of genesis nethermost special
holy ghost to poets
the rest is unsaid heard aubade
in a stroke of genesis nethermost special
holy ghost to poets
Very well written as always, my friend~Debbie
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Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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-headtilt-....well...that really is debatable Deb...you want to talk about it....-smile-...aha....yes Maam....I was ya know listening to the song...-handtwirl-...and you know what happens. Anyway....I'm not planning on filing suit or anything...just relax...-smile-....love Michael
Comment from Joan E.
You did it again--a subtle animation in the picture, but movement nonetheless! And your original "breadcrumb bliss" has such a memorable ring to it. The whole poem is an "aubade"! Big hugs- Joan
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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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You did it again--a subtle animation in the picture, but movement nonetheless! And your original "breadcrumb bliss" has such a memorable ring to it. The whole poem is an "aubade"! Big hugs- Joan
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Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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aha...-smile-...if my French Teachers impressed happiness is my guest...-smile-...thank you Mademoiselle...my pleasure you carry well....love Michael
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Thanks for your rapid fire response. Sweet dreams monsieur- Joan
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Perfect and absolutely stunning job, Michael. I was so caught up in the video that I ran through twice before reading any words! This is the whole package, buddy. True art. Have a good one. Bruce.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Perfect and absolutely stunning job, Michael. I was so caught up in the video that I ran through twice before reading any words! This is the whole package, buddy. True art. Have a good one. Bruce.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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aha...thanks King.
really appreciate your feedback....dont tell anybody but i like to get high...-smile-..ah thanks Bro...love Michael
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Alright! LOL Nothin' bad there. Later.
