Crave
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Comment from Slythytove2
But what a hard way to get it... Very much like your style and image usages. I also like how you're not afraid to use the unaccustomed phrase. The "strawberry" line being one, "fretting" is another. You work is interesting for the reader with a reward for the understanding. I think this is a superior of yours.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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But what a hard way to get it... Very much like your style and image usages. I also like how you're not afraid to use the unaccustomed phrase. The "strawberry" line being one, "fretting" is another. You work is interesting for the reader with a reward for the understanding. I think this is a superior of yours.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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SLYTHYTOVE2,
I, thank you so very much for this wonderful review and the compliment. I am just in awe at the exceptional this work has received. I wish I could see what you see. However, I will not argue. I will just take it.. thank you!!!!! jimi
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Perhaps if others see it and you don't you're looking to hard or have not realized a gift. Stay with it. You're welcome.
Comment from Kingsland
I like your poetry as you well know, but this one is just outstanding in its message line. It also reads very smoothly and has good rhythm in it lines of thoughts. This is a six-star presentation all the way. Keep on writing good poetry, you're the best good poetry. Your friend... John
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2016
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I like your poetry as you well know, but this one is just outstanding in its message line. It also reads very smoothly and has good rhythm in it lines of thoughts. This is a six-star presentation all the way. Keep on writing good poetry, you're the best good poetry. Your friend... John
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2016
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John,
This is a true honor. I remember when we always reviewed each other. I missed you friend. I never ever posted that piem for your birthday coming up. Remember I wrote a few years ago.
And you were the very first one who told me I could write.
I am still trying
to believe that. So thank you very much.
Hope all is well with you.
Yes, life is short and there is no room in my filled life with a petulant arrogant foolish moronic imbecile. Have you ever met one of them?
Thank you so very very much. I am honored.
Jimi
Comment from rockinm76233
Your words tell a great story, one of love and life and being. I enjoyed them and the read very much. I especially love the part where you grab your keys and go out into the world alone to achieve what needs to be achieved. I hope I interrupted that correctly.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Your words tell a great story, one of love and life and being. I enjoyed them and the read very much. I especially love the part where you grab your keys and go out into the world alone to achieve what needs to be achieved. I hope I interrupted that correctly.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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rockinm76233, thank you once again very much... jlsavell
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Your welcome and it should have said interpreted that not interrupted, sorry.
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you are so funny. never caught it.. well you should see some of my reviews.. from cell phone a lot and they are hysterical..
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Your welcome
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Crave, translates our daily rise and shine into the resurrection that it sometimes truly is. You present the speaker to us as someone intent on recreating the modern worker, about to launch again into the world that needs our presence in every way we can put it out there. You depict that morning grind very well and I would give this a six if I could. V6.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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This poem, Crave, translates our daily rise and shine into the resurrection that it sometimes truly is. You present the speaker to us as someone intent on recreating the modern worker, about to launch again into the world that needs our presence in every way we can put it out there. You depict that morning grind very well and I would give this a six if I could. V6.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Bill Schott, I need to thank you so very much again... jlsavell
Comment from Liberty Justice
MAGNIFICENT! You dear poet are a Master poet. This piece written so professionally with deep vivid images of morning cravings. Luscious metaphors and analogies. WELL DONE! lol liberty justice
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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MAGNIFICENT! You dear poet are a Master poet. This piece written so professionally with deep vivid images of morning cravings. Luscious metaphors and analogies. WELL DONE! lol liberty justice
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Liberty Justice,
Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review and to award me an exceptional.. Thank you so very much.. jimi
Comment from kriver
Hi,
This is a very good descriptive work.
Lots of visual wording.
It seems to flow well.
I enjoyed reading it.
Best regards,
K River
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Hi,
This is a very good descriptive work.
Lots of visual wording.
It seems to flow well.
I enjoyed reading it.
Best regards,
K River
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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kriver,
Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review. Thank you so very much.. jlsavell
Comment from Eternal Muse
Excellent free verse poem. I prefer rhymed poetry, but could always appreciate a masterly crafted free style when I see one.
Incredible imagery and visuals here. You draw a myriad pictures for the reader with your words.
These stood out:
Morning routine
solidifies loneliness
fretting o'er the last line drawn
by time's march
Almond oil silkens the skin
Hands caress my breast
Memories surface
and once again... I crave
Excellent.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Excellent free verse poem. I prefer rhymed poetry, but could always appreciate a masterly crafted free style when I see one.
Incredible imagery and visuals here. You draw a myriad pictures for the reader with your words.
These stood out:
Morning routine
solidifies loneliness
fretting o'er the last line drawn
by time's march
Almond oil silkens the skin
Hands caress my breast
Memories surface
and once again... I crave
Excellent.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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yeltel,
Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review. Thank you so very much.. jlsavell
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a great piece. The imagery is superb throughout and there is a great feel to the piece. It is simple, yet deep at the same time. One can layer interpretation on the piece but bringing a great sense to the mundane tasks with the internal monologue is well realised.
Good stuff
GMG
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Hi there,
This is a great piece. The imagery is superb throughout and there is a great feel to the piece. It is simple, yet deep at the same time. One can layer interpretation on the piece but bringing a great sense to the mundane tasks with the internal monologue is well realised.
Good stuff
GMG
Comment Written 24-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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giraffmang,
hi there to you.. Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review. Thank you so very much.. jimi
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
Nice job with this poem. Some people use their dark side as a way to grow in their lives. It's well done and in a very creative way. Good metaphors for life's day-to-day situations that help us grow.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Hello,
Nice job with this poem. Some people use their dark side as a way to grow in their lives. It's well done and in a very creative way. Good metaphors for life's day-to-day situations that help us grow.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Gypsy Blue Rose,
Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review. Thank you so very much.. jimi
Comment from Wabigoon
Hi Jimi--
Is this new or something resurrected? Seems the latter. Can't tell. I like the casual but sharp observation in it, the "ping of sugar cube" sort of thing, and I like how you conclude the poem on a "positive" note.
I noted a couple of things:
Heat (messages) my temples or massages?
The (l)ent of neediness is removed if you mean Lent, the season, wouldn't it be capitalized?
I also notice you irregular capitalization of first lines. There's no apparent logic to it. That's fine, you may have your own logic. Just that I notice it.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2016
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Hi Jimi--
Is this new or something resurrected? Seems the latter. Can't tell. I like the casual but sharp observation in it, the "ping of sugar cube" sort of thing, and I like how you conclude the poem on a "positive" note.
I noted a couple of things:
Heat (messages) my temples or massages?
The (l)ent of neediness is removed if you mean Lent, the season, wouldn't it be capitalized?
I also notice you irregular capitalization of first lines. There's no apparent logic to it. That's fine, you may have your own logic. Just that I notice it.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 23-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2016
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Well dear sweet brilliant friend and artist, I will check on it. Don't know why either. Hope your vacation or retirement time is going well with you. I am off today on a biz excursion and then the rest of the day with someone truly wonderful and my family. Tough week for me last week.
See you have a work posted. Will be there soon gifted friend.
Hope you don't mind recommended Melancholy Angel to catch 22. Brilliant write. I understand more now. Will talk later. I have just been busy with life and trying to prep for surgery.
Thank you dear sweet friend. Your suppirt means a great deal but your honest assessment is yruly important. I respect you. No need for 6 unless you feel it's worthy. Honestly. I appreciate but it is not necessary. Okay? Thank you...
Jimi