To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 " Mothered Life"Poems by Michael
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. What will it cost to.make someone notice how much worthy you are. We can never force someone else to feel the same for us as we do for them.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2016
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A very well-written poem. What will it cost to.make someone notice how much worthy you are. We can never force someone else to feel the same for us as we do for them.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2016
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Hi Sandra...-smile-
hm...well this not a "how much is that doggy in the window" love. so...its worth...immeasurable as heavens imagined girth. I never force myself...its not my way. rest easy...-smileo love Michael
Comment from LIJ Red
Will vs. free will. Free will, when every soul is swept along by it's environment? As the twig's inclined the tree is bent. Reshaping a newborn soul sounds dangerous to me...excellent.
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Will vs. free will. Free will, when every soul is swept along by it's environment? As the twig's inclined the tree is bent. Reshaping a newborn soul sounds dangerous to me...excellent.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2016
Comment from Caressa_08
Beautiful animated graphics, that attracts the reader....And words that cause one to read it over and over to try to comprehend all of it, like myself a female...a mother.
Toward the end, a read that is definitely for me. not a clear cut message that does make the mind wonder...If it had anything to do with the Mother Mary, well there was Joseph, too, who treated Christ as his own son though too, Christ I believe He is truly the Son of God...His Will Be Done.
Caressa_08
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2016
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Beautiful animated graphics, that attracts the reader....And words that cause one to read it over and over to try to comprehend all of it, like myself a female...a mother.
Toward the end, a read that is definitely for me. not a clear cut message that does make the mind wonder...If it had anything to do with the Mother Mary, well there was Joseph, too, who treated Christ as his own son though too, Christ I believe He is truly the Son of God...His Will Be Done.
Caressa_08
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2016
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I see.....no...no. let me explain.
have you ever seen ah someone give all they have, um I'm sorry, it just amazes me that this not self explanatory...ah were was I...oh yes...this about the poets, song writers, the singers and even the audience...or not....who "reach stretch until it hurts to create what they feel. I hope that explains it. love Michael
Comment from RGstar
''If I sing you into song?''
Not many could find such a beautiful phrase. Sometimes a phrase, has to be near on perfect to sum up the character of a write, for it finds the emotion and path without us getting lost in the trees. This does.
You carried the soul and its theme to the very end, and ended with a rhetoric question than finds its way back to the gist of the write, and in so doing, its heart.
Good work, my friend, good work indeed. This like your last was less cryptic and could be the key for you, though I would not want you to lose the style for it defines you.
Bravo.
Best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2016
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''If I sing you into song?''
Not many could find such a beautiful phrase. Sometimes a phrase, has to be near on perfect to sum up the character of a write, for it finds the emotion and path without us getting lost in the trees. This does.
You carried the soul and its theme to the very end, and ended with a rhetoric question than finds its way back to the gist of the write, and in so doing, its heart.
Good work, my friend, good work indeed. This like your last was less cryptic and could be the key for you, though I would not want you to lose the style for it defines you.
Bravo.
Best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2016
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I know ...not many have searched for it as long....
Hey Star...-smile-
thank you Brother, you know how much I appreciate your honorable way. Always welcome my friend. love and much respect...Michael
Comment from BeasPeas
This is an interesting poem and I think each reader will identify with it in his/her own way. Your poem seems to be written about a specific person, one who drains emotionally and psychically, can never be satisfied. The poem seems to make a transition here:
"would starving finally be fed
priceless life filled up satisfied
cost counted paradise..."
making all efforts useless. And the question is if we could, "would we be born again...?" would we want to?
I guess we all know someone like that.
Marilyn
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2016
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This is an interesting poem and I think each reader will identify with it in his/her own way. Your poem seems to be written about a specific person, one who drains emotionally and psychically, can never be satisfied. The poem seems to make a transition here:
"would starving finally be fed
priceless life filled up satisfied
cost counted paradise..."
making all efforts useless. And the question is if we could, "would we be born again...?" would we want to?
I guess we all know someone like that.
Marilyn
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2016
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Hi...no ...-smile-
this poem is about the attempt at resurrection, recreation...and the fear of failing. its about a love sworn to rescue..... no she is quite unique, because I love her. Michael
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Hi Michael. Sometimes with poetry it's open to interpretation of the reader. Oh well, my take on it was totally different from your intent, but I think that's okay. :) Marilyn
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Great poem - did you know that if you dream about singing or hearing a soothing song it symbolizes harmony and happiness. Your poetic words are keen. They tell a lovely tale and the arrangement with the artwork fits perfectly. Thanks for sharing this piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2016
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Great poem - did you know that if you dream about singing or hearing a soothing song it symbolizes harmony and happiness. Your poetic words are keen. They tell a lovely tale and the arrangement with the artwork fits perfectly. Thanks for sharing this piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2016
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Hey Bill...-smile-
thanks man...yea I was feeling this one.
appreciate you enjoying with me. love Michael
Comment from DR DIP
What a beautiful accompanying song sounds like Boy George these days.
this poem has some beautiful words and lines. thanks for sharing with us reconciled
dip
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2016
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What a beautiful accompanying song sounds like Boy George these days.
this poem has some beautiful words and lines. thanks for sharing with us reconciled
dip
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2016
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ah I dont remember boy George sounds like. however, I was listening to Lenard Cohen's and found this...it just seemed special. Anyway Doc...mucho appreciation. love Michael
Comment from Bollie
It never ceases to amaze me how beautiful that your poetry is. You have such a mastery of the english language that you eloquently implement into all of your poetry. This is another fantastic poem, keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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It never ceases to amaze me how beautiful that your poetry is. You have such a mastery of the english language that you eloquently implement into all of your poetry. This is another fantastic poem, keep up the good work.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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ha...well thank you Sir, appreciate hearing that.
listen to the song by Lenard first...but found this ah just struck me as special.anyway...thanks man. love Michael
Comment from Merlin2016
I was directed here by another and I must say that this is a different kind of poem for you...?
It can be interpreted as negative or positive depending upon the reading...The author is asking...if I sing you into being...and song is important..
or paint you...will you show mercy?...Will you come to me?
If I feed your starving soul or die trying, is there forgiveness?
Is there rebirth? All in all, this reading which I inaptly paraphrased...is beautiful...
A much darker view exists with the squeezed vocal chords...
birth and death symbolism, but I choose the first interpretation.
I would like to think that Ricky missed the point and lraven got it...The poem is meant for someone, but only the poet knows....Again, beautiful.
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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I was directed here by another and I must say that this is a different kind of poem for you...?
It can be interpreted as negative or positive depending upon the reading...The author is asking...if I sing you into being...and song is important..
or paint you...will you show mercy?...Will you come to me?
If I feed your starving soul or die trying, is there forgiveness?
Is there rebirth? All in all, this reading which I inaptly paraphrased...is beautiful...
A much darker view exists with the squeezed vocal chords...
birth and death symbolism, but I choose the first interpretation.
I would like to think that Ricky missed the point and lraven got it...The poem is meant for someone, but only the poet knows....Again, beautiful.
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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you scare me when you behave like this...you understand that right...it isn't normal. If you something to say to me...then say it as you. glad you liked the poem. yours too in the booth....you are deserving of respect for your writing. love Michael
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Not her....
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Michael,
I like your beautiful poem and the presentation is stunning. I just learned to add animated pictures too. Isn't fun? LoL
You have a unique style of writing, very ... spiritual. The video was nice too. Good job!
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Hello, Michael,
I like your beautiful poem and the presentation is stunning. I just learned to add animated pictures too. Isn't fun? LoL
You have a unique style of writing, very ... spiritual. The video was nice too. Good job!
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Hey Gypsy...-smile-
why thank you...yes yes it is...-smile-
ive ah recorded this with my very own voice...I just cant figure out how to put my phone inside the poem...so were half way there...maybe next time...haha...thanks Gyps...love Michael
