Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

This is a very strong and emotional contest entry. I could feel the pain as I read. Cancer is a horrible disease that I wish could be eradicated. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016

Thank you Barbara.

Comment from Slythytove2

Excellent

That certainly wasn't what I was expecting, having perused the notes and flash words first. I take it her passing was not expected either. So if that was what you intended- then your presentation was very successful in deed.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016

Thank you.

reply by Slythytove2 on 20-Jul-2016

You're welcome

Comment from cterp

Excellent

I can picture the beach near Atlantic City very well, having vacationed there myself as a child (and as an adult), and taken long walks with my own sister many mornings talking about everything and nothing. I am so sorry that you are living without her and with this pain. You have captured her as she could have been so nicely; you envision your potential friendship beautifully.

chris

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016

Thank you cterp.

Comment from johnwilson

Good

Oh, oh I entered this contest as well! This is, in my opinion, a winner. It holds everything a great poem needs: passion, descriptive words, similes, great ending and the remembering here is so haunting and beautiful!

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 Comment Written 17-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016

Thank you very much.

Comment from Ginger Banks

Excellent

I too have lost my sister, not to such horrors as yours, and I am truly sorry for your loss. Family issues hurt even more when once they are gone. I pray you find Peace one day. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016

Thank you Ginger.

reply by Ginger Banks on 19-Jul-2016

You're very welcome.

Comment from fimarie78

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this with us. I am so sorry for your loss. Six children? That's heart breaking.
Yo have a lovely writing style which flowed beautifully and had me engaged throughout.
best wishes
Fiona

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016

Thank you.

Comment from RoostyNester

Excellent

I can feel your pain in this free verse poem. I love my sister too...it would hurt so much to lose her. She also had cancer, but right now she is doing really good. They believe they removed all of it. I pray they did. Your poem allows all your love for you sister to flow out to the reader. Nice poem with well chosen words. God Bless You!

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016

Thank you so much.

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Well written tribute to your sister sure she will enjoy.

Never easy having a relative who does not feel the same closeness to you that you desire to have with them.

Writing allows you to create any environment you happen to chose and, at least on paper, make the wrong seem right.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016

Thank you so much.

Comment from Ogden

Excellent

No one can feel your pain, and few, I think, will identify with the kind of relationship you had with your late sister, but your excellent poem is very involving, with enough depth of story, in my opinion, to be considered for a novel.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016

Thank you Ogden.

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

Wow, this poem gives me chills. My condolence on your loss.

I can relate to your pain, for I lost a sibling (my brother) to cancer as well. We acknowledged each other as siblings.

Sometimes it best to focus on the positivity. It hurt less, I guess....

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016

Thank you Poetic Friend.