To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Truth or Bare"Poems by Michael
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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A powerfully written poem with a message my son really should hear after threatening to shoot (loaded gun and all). I especially like your closing stanza:
manifested destiny belies
manslaughter's eye for eye
justified slow suicide
Well done, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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A powerfully written poem with a message my son really should hear after threatening to shoot (loaded gun and all). I especially like your closing stanza:
manifested destiny belies
manslaughter's eye for eye
justified slow suicide
Well done, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Hi Deb....smile.....thank you sweetheart. Well if he's living in his will it will be his last will in testament . Appreciate you. Love michael
Comment from Joan E.
You must have some time off from work for good behavior or for the holiday, in order to be posting again! I liked your playful title even though the theme is dark and your famous tercets. "Solomon turned suddenly solemn" is memorable and the next stanza with more alliteration is very effective. I hope some of the Fourth's fireworks brightened your mood! Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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You must have some time off from work for good behavior or for the holiday, in order to be posting again! I liked your playful title even though the theme is dark and your famous tercets. "Solomon turned suddenly solemn" is memorable and the next stanza with more alliteration is very effective. I hope some of the Fourth's fireworks brightened your mood! Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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I was motivated J ....-smile-.....prompted by acknowledgement....no I'm steady working and pursuing my put upon passion.. It seems we have a little organized crime ring of geriatric mobsters encircling their greatest liability. A psychopath who sincerely believes he's due the respect of kings.....pathetic weakling that he is....never granted genuinely. They run insurance scams....already been indicted once....his partner turned up dead....apparently carbon monoxide poisoning.....supposedly killed himself. Anyway....I'll fill you in When get there. love to you michael
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Hey, that's material for a crime novel--your next passion? Happy day after and have a productive week. More hugs- Joan
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Yes ma'am.....that's exactly right.....I'm working on it.....smile....you too....stat safe
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Yipee! I just wish you had more spare time. More hugs- Joan
Comment from foxangie123
Wow this is truly a most moving piece of writing and I love the musician you chose as well. Way to go on this fine piece of great writing. I can relate to dwindling away.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Wow this is truly a most moving piece of writing and I love the musician you chose as well. Way to go on this fine piece of great writing. I can relate to dwindling away.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Hey Fox....-smile-
thank you...I was under influence when I wrote it...I've since tweaked it, polished it bit. I read your poem. I hope you're okay. love to you. Michael
Comment from Gloria ....
Michael what a fascinating poem. I won't pretend to understand all of it, but the general gist I get is we gotta do what we gotta do to survive cause sometimes we just encounter devils along the way.
A slow suicide eh? I guess "they" must've been really bad.
Great job my dear friend.
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Michael what a fascinating poem. I won't pretend to understand all of it, but the general gist I get is we gotta do what we gotta do to survive cause sometimes we just encounter devils along the way.
A slow suicide eh? I guess "they" must've been really bad.
Great job my dear friend.
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Gloria...my Dear Dear Friend...-smile-
let me explain. first stanza....with hand over heart and repeat allegiance please....haha..."manslaughter"...in any and every form carries with it a "price tag"...."deliberate-purposeful..."manslaughter" especially so. Now when a ah mess like this...spends his adult years pursuing "manslaughter" as career legacy. well then God created a place for him and those like minded....this per say....like the demons of yesterday...is aware his heart is giving out after all these years of living off the breast of "other" men. and knows what next comes......and there you have it...as I've already said in my poetic musing...-smile-...love to you Michael
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Oh, I truly like this poetry. Love free-verse, but have a hard time creating it to make sense. This is flawless and beautiful. Great job. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Oh, I truly like this poetry. Love free-verse, but have a hard time creating it to make sense. This is flawless and beautiful. Great job. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Hi Sue...-smile-
ah thank you...it certainly is real.
I love hugs...-smile-...back at ya. love to you....Michael
Comment from Slythytove2
I imagine you're too young to remember Berma-shave signs along the highway. The lay out and message of your work here bring that memory back to mind. It is tough reading. The transition from first line to the next is often stark and difficult to follow. I find myself having to reread each section several times before moving on to the next which puts the meaning and message further from understanding." Hairy-hip" went right over my head, I can't connect it to anything. I feel this piece needs more work and perhaps a lighter touch. I want to point out something positive and up lifting about this piece but if I can't understand it I can't appreciate its meaning, and that is what the writer's job is.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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I imagine you're too young to remember Berma-shave signs along the highway. The lay out and message of your work here bring that memory back to mind. It is tough reading. The transition from first line to the next is often stark and difficult to follow. I find myself having to reread each section several times before moving on to the next which puts the meaning and message further from understanding." Hairy-hip" went right over my head, I can't connect it to anything. I feel this piece needs more work and perhaps a lighter touch. I want to point out something positive and up lifting about this piece but if I can't understand it I can't appreciate its meaning, and that is what the writer's job is.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Yea well....maybe you should have skipped to the lou my darling....enjoy your dollar...smile
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You pays you dime....
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You dumb as quarter...
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Yes, but I make a coherent statements with proper English that my readers can understand.
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good....I'm proud of you. now... work on poetic expression...then get back to me...I'll take another look...-wink-
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Just tell me what-"hairy-hip" means (in context) and I'll be happy.
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it means batchelorette no. one was the wrong choice...-wink-
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Thanks-
Now let me give you a chance to pick one of mine apart. Coming soon-" Apostasy"
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well yer welcome...its always best to test the fabric before you buy it....or else you might fall away from the truth. whole lot a made up takes place. I'll read it-
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If you can't wait you could go to my Portfolio and sample. Slythytove2
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. To kill for religion, cannot be right. That is not what my religion expect from me to do to be accepted.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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A very well-written poem. To kill for religion, cannot be right. That is not what my religion expect from me to do to be accepted.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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No....it's not. But some folks religion is murder. The man I honored in this write , spent his whole life killing......like demons before him he believes and trembles now for tomorrow's hour approaches with his reward.....love to you michael
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I wanted to play the song, but my I think one of the cats unplugged my speakers. My desk right n ow is too messy to fix it. Oh my!!! I did however enjoy reading your poem. It's extremely descriptive and flowed smoothly.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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I wanted to play the song, but my I think one of the cats unplugged my speakers. My desk right n ow is too messy to fix it. Oh my!!! I did however enjoy reading your poem. It's extremely descriptive and flowed smoothly.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Hi Barb....-smile-
oh no....you have to....with all mine...but especially this one.
I always listen to the song that becomes part of my poems....while I'm writing them. Oh okay....love to you Michael
Comment from Neonewman
Lucifer's con peddler
Brilliant analogy my friend. I always enjoy and look forward to reviewing your talent.
God bless my friend.
Steve
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Lucifer's con peddler
Brilliant analogy my friend. I always enjoy and look forward to reviewing your talent.
God bless my friend.
Steve
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016
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Hey Steve....-smile-
ah thanks Bro....appreciate you telling me.
you too man...God bless you. love Michael
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My pleasure!
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My pleasure!
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alright, alright.....Hey Steve...have you released anything lately...? what ya been up too man...?
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I have not been on in awhile due to unfortunate weather conditions(Mother nature has Texas in her sight this year)but hope to get back to normal soon. I have so many ideas that need to hit the market.
God bless and thank your interest my friend.
Steve
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you got it man...-smile- what part of Texas...? I'm ...here. haha..ah you too Bro-
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Close to Houston. A place called Decker's Prairie.
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Conroe...right on the boarder of the woodlands. Never heard of Decker's prarie...sounds about as big as Crockett....haha
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This is true my friend. It's in between Tomball and Magnolia. I know Conroe well.
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thats right around the corner...you know its a small world when you run into Decker's prairie...ahaha...were neighbors Brother...-smile-
Comment from nomi338
The sin that is acknowledged but never atoned can wear the soul down to a frazzled mess. We have an inborn need to be forgiven. Anyone able to overcome that need is a dangerous individual for he has no moral compass to hold his actions in check. He is capable of doing anything, committing any horrible act and sleeping like an innocent babe afterwards. The rest of us suffer a troubled and oft interrupted sleep over a minor infraction.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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The sin that is acknowledged but never atoned can wear the soul down to a frazzled mess. We have an inborn need to be forgiven. Anyone able to overcome that need is a dangerous individual for he has no moral compass to hold his actions in check. He is capable of doing anything, committing any horrible act and sleeping like an innocent babe afterwards. The rest of us suffer a troubled and oft interrupted sleep over a minor infraction.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2016
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yes....I've experienced it.
ah..."they" encircle themselves with lies, confirming one another's sin Saving Grace. Brought ah out in the open in bright white light "they" crumble. but entombed together "they" sustain each other.
the story of the "Roman Centurion comes to mind for some reason. The "ought-most" world authority at the time....ah I'm sorry I dont remember off hand the exact Gospel...but he travels a distance ...desperate to reach Jesus. When he comes upon Jesus...he bows as before a King. then pleads for the life of his daughter. but it is how he "comes"...saying only, Thou speak it...it shall be. Jesus was moved to tears saying "truly I have never seen such faith in all of Israel"
I dont really know why I thought of that....-smile-...thanks. love to you...Michael
