Unwilling Prey
Flash Fiction-Potlatch Practice28 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
Terrific work with this flash fiction challenge. I not only don't do much fiction I definitely do not do flash-fiction. Haven't read any of the others but can say honestly, I go a real kick out of this one.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Terrific work with this flash fiction challenge. I not only don't do much fiction I definitely do not do flash-fiction. Haven't read any of the others but can say honestly, I go a real kick out of this one.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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I've been sick. Sorry to be soooo far behind. Jeesh. Well, finally. So pleased you enjoyed this. I love heroines and I'm more likely to have a female star than a male. I'm a fan. LOL
Great to hear from you and I hope your feeling better and better. Hugs, mikey
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Awesome write here, mikey!!! Wasn't expecting that turn to the left! Hit the brakes hard but went right with it!!! I love a story, short or long, with a heroine in it. You know, being a woman and such (Olivia Benson is my hero! hahaha) Great job and a wonderful piece for the Potlatch Challenge. I am sure everyone will love it. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Awesome write here, mikey!!! Wasn't expecting that turn to the left! Hit the brakes hard but went right with it!!! I love a story, short or long, with a heroine in it. You know, being a woman and such (Olivia Benson is my hero! hahaha) Great job and a wonderful piece for the Potlatch Challenge. I am sure everyone will love it. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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LOVE me some Olivia, YES!!!! I love heroines too. So pleased you enjoyed this. I ALWAYS have heroines in my stories. I'm not a fan of men. HAHAHA! mikey
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lol...I don't think Olivia is much a fan of men either! God bless and hugs, Susanne
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I'm POSITIVE she likes me. HAHAHAHA!!!!
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too funny! My husband goes crazy when I put that show on...he can't stand Olivia's character. hahaha
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lol...I don't think Olivia is much a fan of men either! God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
A very nice written piece.
No problems found.
Interresting and definitely had the wow factor as I was totally off in a different direction.
Only you...
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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A very nice written piece.
No problems found.
Interresting and definitely had the wow factor as I was totally off in a different direction.
Only you...
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Yay! I was trying for a big surprise. LOL mikey
Comment from robyn corum
Wow, Mikey. So you managed to pull off a major switch there at the end of THAT piece. *smile* I sure wasn't expecting THAT. hahahahaha! YAY for the tiny girl this time! HUZZAH!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Wow, Mikey. So you managed to pull off a major switch there at the end of THAT piece. *smile* I sure wasn't expecting THAT. hahahahaha! YAY for the tiny girl this time! HUZZAH!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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I love tiny girls. :)) Most of my stories have heroines. I'm not a fan of men. They're not too bright. LOL
YAY! I got a HUZZAH! I'm real. :)) mikey
Comment from Pantygynt
And then you think well, why not? And you go back looking, as I did, for clues, but they are not there either way. Strange how the mind works and, as a result can be so easily fooled. This has an ending equal to Dogbert's somersault, very, very clever.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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And then you think well, why not? And you go back looking, as I did, for clues, but they are not there either way. Strange how the mind works and, as a result can be so easily fooled. This has an ending equal to Dogbert's somersault, very, very clever.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Great, I was going for a surprise, but I tried not to cheat. HAHAHA! Thanks a million. mikey
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is good Mikey. I was really caught up in the story. All sorts of things going through my head. He was her boyfriend who was thrown down the embankment by the Rapist? He was her beloved Dog? You surprised me at the end. Well done. xx Nancy
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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This is good Mikey. I was really caught up in the story. All sorts of things going through my head. He was her boyfriend who was thrown down the embankment by the Rapist? He was her beloved Dog? You surprised me at the end. Well done. xx Nancy
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Ah, great! I was hoping it would be a surprise. Sorry to be so late, been a little sick the last week. mike
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Sorry to hear that. Hope you are feeling better. xx Nancy
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Michael,
I enjoyed your flash fiction challenge practice story. I was engaged from start to finish.
You covered a lot of ground in a short space. All the elements work together to create this little drama. At first I thought Dogbert was going to be a good guy from the descriptions earlier--but with the title, that was a bit of a stretch on my part. Your story has a great twist. Were the 2 of them just a couple walking in the woods, and he fell done the embankment? Then we find out the rest of the story. Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Michael,
I enjoyed your flash fiction challenge practice story. I was engaged from start to finish.
You covered a lot of ground in a short space. All the elements work together to create this little drama. At first I thought Dogbert was going to be a good guy from the descriptions earlier--but with the title, that was a bit of a stretch on my part. Your story has a great twist. Were the 2 of them just a couple walking in the woods, and he fell done the embankment? Then we find out the rest of the story. Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed, Jan. Thanks so much, mikey
Comment from ciliverde
I need to try this flash fiction business, it feels like fun, reading your story. I loved it. But wouldn't it be a Sequoia, instead of a Redwood, if it's in Yosemite? Oh never mind it really doesn't matter, and Sequoia rapist just doesn't sound as good.
The Dogster goes to prison! Great little mystery, in short form! Love the light tone of it too :)
Carol
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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I need to try this flash fiction business, it feels like fun, reading your story. I loved it. But wouldn't it be a Sequoia, instead of a Redwood, if it's in Yosemite? Oh never mind it really doesn't matter, and Sequoia rapist just doesn't sound as good.
The Dogster goes to prison! Great little mystery, in short form! Love the light tone of it too :)
Carol
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Yes. It's fun. :))
Sequoias are redwoods or are commonly referred to as such. Giant redwoods or giant sequoias or giant sequoia redwoods. I've been there and they're giant and they're redwoods or at least they're red and I'm guessing they're wood.
The Sequoia Shoplifter would work or the Sequoia Statutory Rapist. Thank you. I've been sick, so I'm catching up. I'm sure I'm years behind in reviewing. mikey
Comment from Dean Kuch
Dogbert Balderfinfarm. Dogbert Balderfinfarm... Dog-bert Bal-der-fin-farm?!?... Really, Mike, LOL? What nationality is that? From where did the Balderfinfarm family first originate?
Whadda name, heh-heh...
Gary Ridgewood, John Wayne Gacy, Ted Bundy, David Berkowitz (more commonly known as the Son of Sam or the .44 Caliber Killer), Jeffry Dahmer, Richard Ramirez (the "Night Stalker"), Dennis Nilsen, the British equivalent of Jeffrey Dahmer, who was a homosexual killer who murdered 15 gay men within home in London, England between 1978 and 1983. He retained his victims' bodies before dissecting their remains and disposing of their bodies by burning or flushing the remains down the toilet, which led to his capture when human flesh was discovered in his sewage system...and now, Dogbert Balderfinfarm.
Good take on the potlatch prose, flash fiction challenge, Mike. Your tiny terror tale was very entertaining and well written.
~Dean
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Dogbert Balderfinfarm. Dogbert Balderfinfarm... Dog-bert Bal-der-fin-farm?!?... Really, Mike, LOL? What nationality is that? From where did the Balderfinfarm family first originate?
Whadda name, heh-heh...
Gary Ridgewood, John Wayne Gacy, Ted Bundy, David Berkowitz (more commonly known as the Son of Sam or the .44 Caliber Killer), Jeffry Dahmer, Richard Ramirez (the "Night Stalker"), Dennis Nilsen, the British equivalent of Jeffrey Dahmer, who was a homosexual killer who murdered 15 gay men within home in London, England between 1978 and 1983. He retained his victims' bodies before dissecting their remains and disposing of their bodies by burning or flushing the remains down the toilet, which led to his capture when human flesh was discovered in his sewage system...and now, Dogbert Balderfinfarm.
Good take on the potlatch prose, flash fiction challenge, Mike. Your tiny terror tale was very entertaining and well written.
~Dean
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Glad you liked. He's from Catalina, and island off California. It was a small tribe never over fourteen in number and all related. Probably just folks who robbed a liquor store and paddled over in a canoe, but Nat Geo bought the story. mikey
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My pleasure, Mike.
~Dean :)
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Sir Mikey.
This is a real fooled you story, I didn't realise that he would turn out to be a murderer, She had a lucky escape. I think this prose writing is showing up some pretty good writing among us poets.
Great read.
Brenda:))x
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Hi Sir Mikey.
This is a real fooled you story, I didn't realise that he would turn out to be a murderer, She had a lucky escape. I think this prose writing is showing up some pretty good writing among us poets.
Great read.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Hi there, Lady Brenda
I'm a little late for the party. Make mine a double.
Oh yes, poets can write prose in a snap. Prose people can write poetry too, but we don't tell them. LOL
Glad you enjoyed. I'm soooo behind. mikey :)) ssooxxww