Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Jester at the Renaissance Faire"A collection of sonnets
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Comment from LIJ Red
Did the prompt say for general audiences only? If not, well, tough--
The rhythm and the rhymes look as well as Willie's work. Excellent.
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Did the prompt say for general audiences only? If not, well, tough--
The rhythm and the rhymes look as well as Willie's work. Excellent.
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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It doesn't say, but there's no way the committee will give this the time of day. LOL What a great compliment. I'll take that right into my delusional world. It will fit right in. :)) mikey
Comment from closetpoetjester
LMAO a delightful romp or should I say, a cleverly constructed bit of wishful thinking and I love the incorporation of the jester (albehim male LOL). Sounds like it just wasn't your day, no ample and available cleavage due to the King and all those Lords with their cannons cocked and raised...
Nothing like tending to your own turf you jerk off jugganaut...hey, when you want something done...
Cool write...you had a sixer when I read the title LOL
You need only mention a Jester. Plus, I knew it just HAD to be funny.
Well done mate. You may have blown your chances at the faire, but you'll reign supreme at home right? tee hee
P
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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LMAO a delightful romp or should I say, a cleverly constructed bit of wishful thinking and I love the incorporation of the jester (albehim male LOL). Sounds like it just wasn't your day, no ample and available cleavage due to the King and all those Lords with their cannons cocked and raised...
Nothing like tending to your own turf you jerk off jugganaut...hey, when you want something done...
Cool write...you had a sixer when I read the title LOL
You need only mention a Jester. Plus, I knew it just HAD to be funny.
Well done mate. You may have blown your chances at the faire, but you'll reign supreme at home right? tee hee
P
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 13-May-2016
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Hi, P
I decided to stretch the truth a bit to make the jester into a sympathetic character. I wasn't sure what it would be like to be him, I hope it came across as real. HAHAHA!! Jerk off juggernaut. LOL That sounds like something wonderful or something just as sad as hell!!!!! This was soooo much fun to write and the research was even more satisfying. I'm sure the committee will be thrilled. Thanks a million. Whew! All these stars too!!!!! mikey
Comment from Pantygynt
Oh Willy wert thou living at this hour,
you'd bed that middle maiden in some bower.
Codpiece aloft high risen like a tower,
you'd set aside your pen and get stuck in
to burrow 'twixt those pillows' sweet as sin.
The sonnetino is a good tool with which to review the sonnet, methinks, sirrah!
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Oh Willy wert thou living at this hour,
you'd bed that middle maiden in some bower.
Codpiece aloft high risen like a tower,
you'd set aside your pen and get stuck in
to burrow 'twixt those pillows' sweet as sin.
The sonnetino is a good tool with which to review the sonnet, methinks, sirrah!
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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That's damn good. You should post that. Blame it on me if you want. They'd believe you. HAHAHA! mikey
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Well thanks for that and I will if you can send me the picture - email to:
jambar1941.jb@gmail.com
or send me the link if it's google images
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let's see if I'm that clever....
pretty girls link click here
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Mikey,
I suppose the reason we write sonnets today is the same for those who do not wish to read haiku.
Given the choice I would rather write and read a crown of sonnets than write one haiku, but I suppose we all like what we like and thank God for choice as to whether we read or write them or not.
Having said that your sonnet is a great poem with all the right ingredients that makes for a good read. I love the humour and of course the crudeness, given the topic and the writer concerned it is what we all expect and hope for.
I loved this.
Brenda:))x
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Hi Mikey,
I suppose the reason we write sonnets today is the same for those who do not wish to read haiku.
Given the choice I would rather write and read a crown of sonnets than write one haiku, but I suppose we all like what we like and thank God for choice as to whether we read or write them or not.
Having said that your sonnet is a great poem with all the right ingredients that makes for a good read. I love the humour and of course the crudeness, given the topic and the writer concerned it is what we all expect and hope for.
I loved this.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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The writer concerned? HAHAHA! I'm pleased that I have lived up to the lofty expectations looked for in a gentleman of my caliber. Flippin eck! LOL
I'm quite pleased you enjoyed. It was fun to write and even more fun to research. :)) mikey
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Hi Mikey,
no disrespect intended, quite the opposite. I meant it as a compliment.
Most men never admit to what they are thinking or feeling so it is quite an eye opener in a very good way that we get to see what really makes you men folk tick!!!! Seems like I was right all along. LOL I like that men find us women attractive, but I like that we women have complete control over who does or gets what!!!1 Mum always said, "grab em by the balls and their hearts and minds will follow"
Me thinks she's right. Hahaha
Brenda:))x
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I actually figured all this out in high school. It's made my life soooooo easy. HAAAAHAHAHA!! Mum was exactly right and so are you. Of course, I didn't say that out loud and you won't tell the other guys I admitted it. LOL mikey
Comment from lindafisher
A wonderful world of ribald revelry. All bosoms and codpieces. These faires are just the greatest escapist fun. I can see that all these ladies flashing their bosoms could have quite an efect
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A wonderful world of ribald revelry. All bosoms and codpieces. These faires are just the greatest escapist fun. I can see that all these ladies flashing their bosoms could have quite an efect
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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I've not been in the longest time. But, yes, they are great fun. The attire is quite authentic and very interesting in an historical sense of course. Bosoms are effective I must say. LOL mikey
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Mikey
= LOL! Yeah, well, sometimes blowin' in the wind is better than not getting ... well, you know! (*<*)
= Cute entry. Good luck.
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reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Hi, Mikey
= LOL! Yeah, well, sometimes blowin' in the wind is better than not getting ... well, you know! (*<*)
= Cute entry. Good luck.
=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
=::= Feel free to visit my profile on Amazon.com =::=
amazon.com/author/jacquelinefranklin
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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HAAAAAAAHAHAHA! Yep, exactly. Glad you liked this. Great fun to write. Thanks a bunch, mikey
Comment from lightink
LOL, Mikey! This is awesome! I love the cocky yet classic language that goes back to renaissance times yet puts an impertinent twist on it! Daring, fresh and I ALMOST felt sorry for the poor guy! Almost! ;)
"while I am left to tend to my own turf." LOL!
This poem is so entertaining while VERY observant of the human nature!
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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LOL, Mikey! This is awesome! I love the cocky yet classic language that goes back to renaissance times yet puts an impertinent twist on it! Daring, fresh and I ALMOST felt sorry for the poor guy! Almost! ;)
"while I am left to tend to my own turf." LOL!
This poem is so entertaining while VERY observant of the human nature!
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Well, fortunately, it was just for the afternoon. HAHAHA! He did get to go home and have a bit better fate. Wow. I'm so thrilled you enjoyed this. I'm smiling from ear to ear. I had the best time writing it so I couldn't be more pleased. Thanks a million. mikey
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Woo Hoo party time!
Oh sorry, but that is what I thought.
Love the symbolism and the words...imagination running wild.
Nice sonnet form dear friend.
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Woo Hoo party time!
Oh sorry, but that is what I thought.
Love the symbolism and the words...imagination running wild.
Nice sonnet form dear friend.
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Tis' a bit of randiness for a Sunday evening. A bath and wine is called for. Hit it maestro!! mikey
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Wait, got to run the water
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Lord Michael of Cahill,
I love renaissance faires. I went to the Renaissance fair in the Black Forest, Novato, for years, until the fair was closed to open a freaking golf park. Can you believe it? It was the perfect place for it.
This is my kind of sonnet. LoL
I was always a wench in full costume. My girlfriend was one of the Merry Makers. She danced through the faire and on the stage periodically. I miss it. Did you ever eat those huge turkey legs? How about watch a couple eat it without hands? That was fun to watch. They guys gathered for miles when it was two girls eating the leg. That is not right. LoL
Good job, Mike. I didn't think you could enter a contest behind the wall of shame. Who knew?
Good luck!
*gypsy hugs*
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Hello, Lord Michael of Cahill,
I love renaissance faires. I went to the Renaissance fair in the Black Forest, Novato, for years, until the fair was closed to open a freaking golf park. Can you believe it? It was the perfect place for it.
This is my kind of sonnet. LoL
I was always a wench in full costume. My girlfriend was one of the Merry Makers. She danced through the faire and on the stage periodically. I miss it. Did you ever eat those huge turkey legs? How about watch a couple eat it without hands? That was fun to watch. They guys gathered for miles when it was two girls eating the leg. That is not right. LoL
Good job, Mike. I didn't think you could enter a contest behind the wall of shame. Who knew?
Good luck!
*gypsy hugs*
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Ahem, watched a couple eat it without hands? He walks away and lets it go. It's Mother's Day ....
I used to go every year. Bangers at the entrance, sausage things smothered in grilled onions. We smuggled in water bottles full of vodka. I was well behaved as always. Great fun. They sold harps there and I'd always end up there playing them. Cool instrument, plus they'd always have tons of other instruments, harpsichords and different string things. Eventually everyone would abandon my boring ass. HAHAHA! Still great fun. Glad you liked this. mikey Ancient Irish Hugs, before they had stupid laws... HAAAAAAAAAA!
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I know, I loved it! I gave away my car and now I use public transportation. It's fine most of the time but I miss driving to the RF it would be too hard to take a train and 15 buses dressed like a wench carrying a basket of fruit. LoL
Comment from jane.fallon
Excellent.
This is just a very minor point, and I probably have it wrong, but I just wonder about the placing of this comma:
"His staff it, seems, her ..." - I wondered if it should be "His staff, it seems, her ..."
Well done.
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Excellent.
This is just a very minor point, and I probably have it wrong, but I just wonder about the placing of this comma:
"His staff it, seems, her ..." - I wondered if it should be "His staff, it seems, her ..."
Well done.
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Oh, wow. Great eyes, Jane. YES! I wouldn't have caught it in a million years. Thanks so much. So pleased you liked this. Big smiles for all the stars. Thanks again. mikey
