Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Another interesting poem and form presented. We are always a friend to someone and we everything we can to make our friendships work.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Hi Sandra,

I read Gwendolyn Brooks' poem and I just coming back to it today. I just had to try something similar! Thanks for the kind thoughts.

Kim

Comment from lightink

Excellent

You always have a way of creating an uplifting poem from something somber! :)
I love your self-statement! There's so much kindness in it and also, very realistic!
"always friend" - I can fully see that! ;)

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Hi Jyoti!

Thank you :) I appreciate all the wonderful comments. I read Gwendolyn Brooks' poem today and I thought wow, I really need to try something with that lol I kept coming back to it. Thanks for taking the time to read and leave your thoughts.

Kim

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

Interesting style... I have to say, I like yours much better than hers, I'm not sure i'm a fan of the separated pronouns to the lines... but hey, I see what you're doing. As Mary Oliver says, we learn by imitating, reading, imitating, reading... repeating. ;)
Well done,
Cat

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Hi Cat!

Gwendolyn Brooks has diversity. This is the only one of her poems that I read that was written in this style, but it just really struck me. Don't be surprised, I may have to try another variation or two lol My other post today is her, too, but in a vastly different style. I just met her today, but I like her. :) Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!

*hugs*

Kim

reply by I am Cat on 27-Apr-2016

Yes, I just read the other one you wrote... I absolutely fell in love with it! ;)

reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Yay! :) I'm happy you enjoyed it! :) This month has gone so fast! I'm going to miss NaPo when it is done! lol

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Kim,
I really enjoyed your poem. I love the way you formatted the lines, and can easily see where you got your inspiration.

I like how you used the 'I'. I love the great rhyme, too. Thanks for the author notes.

Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan

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 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Hi Jan!

I read Gwendolyn's poem, "We Be Cool," today and couldn't get it out of my head. I may even have to do another one lol fun stuff! Thank you for reading and sharing in my fun!

Kim

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Another splendid pairing. This is an interesting format. I might try it too sometime. Love the way you hang the personal pronoun between each pair of ambivalent ideas.

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 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Hi Tony,

I really just couldn't get past that same style from Gwendolyn Brooks' "We Be Cool," today. I just had to try it! I have a feeling I may have to do more lol thanks for the interest in her style today :) What I've enjoyed the most is sharing poets that the readers might not come across otherwise.

Kim