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Comment from CD Richards
This is a lovely and fitting ending (or is it near ending?) to the NaProWriMo collection. It convey a gentle, joyous tone.
Some people would probably complain about the switch of meter in the second stanza (which I've tried to show by listing the stressed syllable below):
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it's your poem, and it doesn't say it's meant to follow any particular scheme. Therefore, it doesn't bother me lol
I think it's great, thanks for sharing.
Craig
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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This is a lovely and fitting ending (or is it near ending?) to the NaProWriMo collection. It convey a gentle, joyous tone.
Some people would probably complain about the switch of meter in the second stanza (which I've tried to show by listing the stressed syllable below):
2
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1
2
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2
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But...
it's your poem, and it doesn't say it's meant to follow any particular scheme. Therefore, it doesn't bother me lol
I think it's great, thanks for sharing.
Craig
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Craig,
No one has mentioned a switch in meter until now lol thanks for pointing that out. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review, I know you've been swamped. :)
I'm happy you liked it.
Kim
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Well, people are picking me up on doing the same thing all the time (except I think I'm more conscious of it now). I was being honest when I said I don't see a problem in it, but some 'purists' probably mark us down on it, if that's of any importance lol
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You are more graceful than I... It's my poem, I'll choose the words lol
I'm teasing :) you are right about the purists though... however, whenever most try to 'fix' the lines... they bastardize the meaning lol That's my point about word choices :)
I'm happy you like it. Gloria raved over it and Cat bookmarked til she can give it a six... maybe they aren't purists lol
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Oh hell no, those two aren't purists... they're rebels. They think rules were made to be broken ;-)
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Guess I'm not a purist either lol ;)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A great poem for your book. It is close to the end now. It was great fun and a great learning experience with myself learning new forms and reading other's beautiful works.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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A great poem for your book. It is close to the end now. It was great fun and a great learning experience with myself learning new forms and reading other's beautiful works.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Sandra!
Thanks for taking the time to read and review! Did I mention to you that I put a NaPoWriMo post in the poetry forum? I've gotten so far behind on my reviews, and am trying to catch up tonight lol
Kim
Comment from Marykelly
The joy the writer gets from poetry is evident in these three simple verses, which is especially evident in dancing with her muse. The poet enjoys writing so much she is disappointed when the work is done.
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The joy the writer gets from poetry is evident in these three simple verses, which is especially evident in dancing with her muse. The poet enjoys writing so much she is disappointed when the work is done.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Marykelly,
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I truly enjoy you stopping by! Have a great evening!
Kim
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Kim,
What a great picture to accompany your super poem. The lines flow smoothly with a great story, too. I really like the use of rhyme.
GBrooks poem was fun to read as was yours.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Kim,
What a great picture to accompany your super poem. The lines flow smoothly with a great story, too. I really like the use of rhyme.
GBrooks poem was fun to read as was yours.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Jan!
I've had fun reading Gwendolyn Brooks today. Thanks for taking the time to leave your awesome comments. :)
Kim
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, extremely lyrical in its rhyme and rhythm - well constructed with just a couple of uneven spots - easily corrected by reading the poem aloud several times, - this poet will catch the phrasing herself...
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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In my opinion, extremely lyrical in its rhyme and rhythm - well constructed with just a couple of uneven spots - easily corrected by reading the poem aloud several times, - this poet will catch the phrasing herself...
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review, eve. I appreciate you adding your comments.
Kim
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You are very welcome - an artistic rendering...
Comment from tfawcus
Interesting to read about Gwendolyn Brooks and o have her poem there as a comparison with your own. The style is mimicked to perfection and yours also retains something of the sense of the joy of revisiting earlier times in our later years. Reminds me a bit of Jenny Josephs':
"When I am an old woman I shall wear purple
With a red hat that doesn't go, and doesn't suit me,
And I shall spend my pension
on brandy and summer gloves
And satin sandals, ...etc"
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Interesting to read about Gwendolyn Brooks and o have her poem there as a comparison with your own. The style is mimicked to perfection and yours also retains something of the sense of the joy of revisiting earlier times in our later years. Reminds me a bit of Jenny Josephs':
"When I am an old woman I shall wear purple
With a red hat that doesn't go, and doesn't suit me,
And I shall spend my pension
on brandy and summer gloves
And satin sandals, ...etc"
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Hi Tony!
I really enjoy the Jenny Joseph poem... that is iconic... Thanks for the reminder of hers :) I enjoyed reading Gwendolyn Brooks today and thought I'd share. She has another one, vastly different style... one I might try to play with a bit more, I liked it that much. (I always love something a bit different lol)
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment! :)
Oh, I put a post in the Poetry forum under NaPoWriMo 2016, if you get the chance, I'd love you to have a look. :)
Thanks!
Kim
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Congratulations on inspiring such a magnificent turnout for NaPoWriMo. Whilst I didn't complete the course, I enjoyed taking part for a while!
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You added awesome selections to our project for the month! :) I'm very happy you were able to join in the fun!
Comment from reconciled
Hey now we know about them bears we going no where...smile....hello Kim you make this stuff taste like candy. Another pleasing offering. Big love michael
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Hey now we know about them bears we going no where...smile....hello Kim you make this stuff taste like candy. Another pleasing offering. Big love michael
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Hi Michael,
Thank you for the compliments and beautiful six shiny stars. I really should stay out of the forum!! lol
I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Kim
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nonsense...someone needs to rudder the ship...or will all sink...or get eaten by bears...-wink-
Comment from Gloria ....
I must admit, I'm a little saddened that the NaPo month is over too and I wasn't even in it. It's been a thoroughly delightful trip though reading everyone's poetry and getting a feeling for where they're headed.
Gwendolyn Brooks sounds like a poet after my own heart too, so I'm glad you wrote your rendition.
Excellent poem.
Gloria
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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I must admit, I'm a little saddened that the NaPo month is over too and I wasn't even in it. It's been a thoroughly delightful trip though reading everyone's poetry and getting a feeling for where they're headed.
Gwendolyn Brooks sounds like a poet after my own heart too, so I'm glad you wrote your rendition.
Excellent poem.
Gloria
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Hi Gloria!
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment... I'm going to miss NaPo!! (Though, I might actually get something done around the house?! lol) Gwendolyn Brooks was a fun read today. I listed her works with my second selection.
Have a great evening!
Kim