Christine's Poems
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Comment from c_lucas
The warm sun should be taken in moderation, so you won't get too much. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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The warm sun should be taken in moderation, so you won't get too much. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Hi c lucas. Thank you for reading my Sun poem I had fun writing this as I was sunbaking and so glad it made a good read. I must have Sun it makes me feel great and lifts ones mood. No a fan of the cold brrrr Cheers Christine😀
Comment from Pantygynt
Sitting here waiting for the weather to warm up as April draws nearer to May it is hard to adjust to the thoughts of those whose world is a mirror image of are own. You'd better enjoy it whjile it is available.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Sitting here waiting for the weather to warm up as April draws nearer to May it is hard to adjust to the thoughts of those whose world is a mirror image of are own. You'd better enjoy it whjile it is available.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Hi Pantygynt, Yes we are waiting for Winter in June and have some lovely Autumn weather hence my last ditch effort to have a sunbake LOL Thanks for stopping by Cheers Chrstine 😀
Comment from ciliverde
How fun to read about a hot autumn day, while we enjoy a seasonable spring day here in California. Hey, personify the sun all you want, I'll never critique you for that! I used to love finding a place on the beach to sunbathe and read, and where we live now the water is warm enough (barely) to take a dip in the summertime. Oh, I hope you use sunscreen! :)
Carol
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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How fun to read about a hot autumn day, while we enjoy a seasonable spring day here in California. Hey, personify the sun all you want, I'll never critique you for that! I used to love finding a place on the beach to sunbathe and read, and where we live now the water is warm enough (barely) to take a dip in the summertime. Oh, I hope you use sunscreen! :)
Carol
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Hi Carol, Yes it is unusual to have such lovely weather here at this time Late April. So I have to make the best of it. Yesterday my husband and me went for a motorbike ride and the weather was hot and the ride was great. Australian weather can be unpredictable at times 4 seasons in one day But i am making the most before Winter in June . Thanks for your review Cheers for a good day Christine😄
Comment from William Ross
Just great I like how the poem is misleading thinking you are talking about a lover and then find out it's the sun. Great job on this, have a wonderful day
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Just great I like how the poem is misleading thinking you are talking about a lover and then find out it's the sun. Great job on this, have a wonderful day
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Hi William. that was my intention glad you liked it and thank you very much for your review your time to do so is so appreciated Cheers Christine
Comment from lightink
Haha! I had to reread once the new meaning emerged! Wow! You fully capture how sensual it is to lay in the sun and fully take in the glow! What a fun poem with perfect meter!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Haha! I had to reread once the new meaning emerged! Wow! You fully capture how sensual it is to lay in the sun and fully take in the glow! What a fun poem with perfect meter!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Oh yes lightink. it is a sensual experience. The warm rays and inner warmth Make me feel alive I love the sun LOL .Thanks for reading my poem and I am glad you had a reread once my meaning became clear Ha Ha. it was a fun poem to write also. Cheers Christine😀
Comment from DR DIP
wish you didn't say you had personified the su in your authors notes because i had guessed this in your wonderfully written poem without reading those notes Yes I too am a sunworshipper from Cronulla in Sydney So Iknow our Australian weather well thanks for sharing Chrissy
dip
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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wish you didn't say you had personified the su in your authors notes because i had guessed this in your wonderfully written poem without reading those notes Yes I too am a sunworshipper from Cronulla in Sydney So Iknow our Australian weather well thanks for sharing Chrissy
dip
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Ha Ha Dip. so therecare others like me out there Sunbaking Aussies, I have been one all my life and if anyone wants to find me in the summer they know where I'll be. This little poem just popped into my head as I enjoyed the warm rays in an Autumn sun
Thanks so much for reading and you lovely comments. Cheers Christine 😀
Comment from fionageorge
You have certainly succeeded at personification of the sun. It wasn't until that last stanza. Loved it. Words flow freely, good rhyme and rhythm, but best of all, you pulled me into a beautiful and sensual love story... until that last stanza. Thanks for sharing and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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You have certainly succeeded at personification of the sun. It wasn't until that last stanza. Loved it. Words flow freely, good rhyme and rhythm, but best of all, you pulled me into a beautiful and sensual love story... until that last stanza. Thanks for sharing and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Hi Marijke, I am glad you liked my poem with a twist Ha Ha , I love to do different things and can be a little naughty at times but hopefully in good taste. Cheers for reading and reviewing Christine 😄
Comment from happykat4
A sun lover. Well done. As the poem begins the reader is led to believe this is about lovers. It isn't until the last stanza we know it is about the sun and a sun bather or sun worship. The poem flows well and has a rhyming pattern. Thank you for sharing it with me. Have a great week. Kat
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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A sun lover. Well done. As the poem begins the reader is led to believe this is about lovers. It isn't until the last stanza we know it is about the sun and a sun bather or sun worship. The poem flows well and has a rhyming pattern. Thank you for sharing it with me. Have a great week. Kat
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Hi Kat, I am pleased to have shared this with you and Thanks very much for your lovely review and yes a sun lover have always been it warms me up and I love a suntan but it has to be natural. I am glad you found the twist in the last Stanza LOL Cheers Christine 😀
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Christine
= Very nice, but I will admit, I thought you were talking about hubby with the sensuous overtones. (*<*)
= Doesn't matter, because I really like it.
= I turn red as a lobster. The sun is NOT my friend. I'll remain hiding behind my computer, thank you very much. I donate my share of the sun to you. (*<*)
=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
=::= Feel free to visit my profile on Amazon.com =::=
amazon.com/author/jacquelinefranklin
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Hi, Christine
= Very nice, but I will admit, I thought you were talking about hubby with the sensuous overtones. (*<*)
= Doesn't matter, because I really like it.
= I turn red as a lobster. The sun is NOT my friend. I'll remain hiding behind my computer, thank you very much. I donate my share of the sun to you. (*<*)
=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
=::= Feel free to visit my profile on Amazon.com =::=
amazon.com/author/jacquelinefranklin
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Hi Jackie, Ha Ha had you fooled, it was the sun all along, but have just been on a motorbike ride with my husband great day out but now the comfort of a soft chair is welcome ( must be getting old LOL) Thanks for your review comments for this effort. Looking forward to the picture challenge tomorrow. ( it is actually Monday 25th here in Australia so I am ready to go LOL) Cheers Christine😀
Comment from royowen
And a very sensual sun indeed, puts a new outlook on "sun worship" Christine! Yes, we've also been having some sensational weather here as you have there, wherever one goes in the world Autumn is overlooked as the best, most stable season! Beautifully written Christine, your rhyming quatrains are so well crafted and even metered so to make you a legend. Sweet worded and uncontrived aabb rhyming, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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And a very sensual sun indeed, puts a new outlook on "sun worship" Christine! Yes, we've also been having some sensational weather here as you have there, wherever one goes in the world Autumn is overlooked as the best, most stable season! Beautifully written Christine, your rhyming quatrains are so well crafted and even metered so to make you a legend. Sweet worded and uncontrived aabb rhyming, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Hi Roy , a bit of tongue in cheeky LOL Had some fun with this one as I was sunbaking and composing my poem. Yes we have had some lovely weather here. another beautiful day today. ( out on the motorbike with my husband great ride ) Thanks forcyour great comments I do try hard to do good work and like rhyme and even meter. so thanks for saying that. Much appreciative of your ongoing support. Many Cheer my friend Christine😀
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Enjoyable Christine