Life's Observations and Reflections
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "None of us shed any tears"This is my prologue for the NaPoWriMo 2016 (30 Poe
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Comment from CD Richards
Really well written and visually compelling - those are my first thoughts.
I can imagine after a lifetime of abuse how people would reach the situation where to them, a person is already dead inside them, so their physical death really doesn't matter.
That's the impression you've conveyed to me, and done an excellent job of it.
Well done, Marijke :)
Craig
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Really well written and visually compelling - those are my first thoughts.
I can imagine after a lifetime of abuse how people would reach the situation where to them, a person is already dead inside them, so their physical death really doesn't matter.
That's the impression you've conveyed to me, and done an excellent job of it.
Well done, Marijke :)
Craig
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Thank you, Craig, for your observations and comments and your generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from djeckert
interesting, but very sad. what more can be said on the poem's sentiment?. a triolet is a new form to me. Ill have to try my hand at one. God Bless.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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interesting, but very sad. what more can be said on the poem's sentiment?. a triolet is a new form to me. Ill have to try my hand at one. God Bless.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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HI djeckert, thank you for your observations and generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Margaret Ford
Years ago, I worked as a surrogate parent in a temporary housing facility for dependent children. These young ones had been abused in horrible, unthinkable ways, including the sort of mistreatment strongly implied in this poem. So I know, or at least suspect, that the feelings expressed in this work are more commonplace than some very fortunate people might suspect.
That being the case, I appreciate the poem's statement of these feelings in such a straightforward way, with nothing added or subtracted. In other words, it strikes me as a very pure poem. Thank you so much for creating it.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Years ago, I worked as a surrogate parent in a temporary housing facility for dependent children. These young ones had been abused in horrible, unthinkable ways, including the sort of mistreatment strongly implied in this poem. So I know, or at least suspect, that the feelings expressed in this work are more commonplace than some very fortunate people might suspect.
That being the case, I appreciate the poem's statement of these feelings in such a straightforward way, with nothing added or subtracted. In other words, it strikes me as a very pure poem. Thank you so much for creating it.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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HI Margaret, Thank you for your observations and generous rating. Yes, things often happen behind closed doors, and often the family looks normal to those not behind those doors. Thanks for giving me your insightful perspective. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from AnnaLinda
Marijke,
When I read your title and saw your artwork choice,
I wondered if this poem was going in that direction.
I think your triolet does a great job ot conveying
the indifference and/or relief from the death of
their abuser.
Once again you have chosen your repeating lines
very well and your rhymes flow with ease.
Linda
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Marijke,
When I read your title and saw your artwork choice,
I wondered if this poem was going in that direction.
I think your triolet does a great job ot conveying
the indifference and/or relief from the death of
their abuser.
Once again you have chosen your repeating lines
very well and your rhymes flow with ease.
Linda
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Well, Linda, you are one of the main reasons I wrote this Triolet as a response to the one I entered in the Triolet concert. Your comments made me think from a different point of view. What if they were victims of the person who just died. I am sure there are times when people are happy when someone passess. Peace at last. Thanks for your inspiration. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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Oh, your successful poem is credit to you alone...but, you are welcome.
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Marijke!
You are rocking this triolet and the theme of death and tears. This is a fantastic addition to your NaPoWriMo book! We are in the downhill stretch with only ten days left to go. What a fabulous job you've made of this challenge :) I can't wait to see the next one :)
Kim
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Hi Marijke!
You are rocking this triolet and the theme of death and tears. This is a fantastic addition to your NaPoWriMo book! We are in the downhill stretch with only ten days left to go. What a fabulous job you've made of this challenge :) I can't wait to see the next one :)
Kim
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Hi Kim... not sure everyone appreciates this poem, in response to my Triolet a couple of days ago, and the responses received. Thank you so much for your kind commenrts and support. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from pmait
This is an interesting, although disturbing, use of the triolet form. I have used it more like a simple ode in the past, in praise of someone or something good, but in my innocence had not thought of repetitive evil as a theme. Painful thought, but very well done.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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This is an interesting, although disturbing, use of the triolet form. I have used it more like a simple ode in the past, in praise of someone or something good, but in my innocence had not thought of repetitive evil as a theme. Painful thought, but very well done.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Hi pmalt. I wrote a Triolet a couple of days ago, with the perspective of a person who is dying, and who has asked people not to shed a tear when she dies, because they didn't bother to visit while she was alive. I received some feedback that sometimes there are reasons some people do not come and visit. As I am an advocate against violence and abuse, I felt the need to write this from the perspective of a victim. Thanks for your comments and observations, and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from BruceMiller
Wow... Do you know any other funny stories? (lol) As depressing as this thing is, I found myself enjoying it. I'm not certain what that says about me. Cheers.
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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Wow... Do you know any other funny stories? (lol) As depressing as this thing is, I found myself enjoying it. I'm not certain what that says about me. Cheers.
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Hi Bruce, I wrote a Triolet a couple of days ago, with the perspective of a person who is dying, and who has asked people not to shed a tear when she dies, because they didn't bother to visit while she was alive. I received some feedback that sometimes there are reasons some people do not come and visit. As I am an advocate against violence and abuse, I felt the need to write this from the perspective of a victim. Thanks for your comments and observations, and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Good job with this triolet with an important statement.
No one knows what goes on, but many want to pretend they do and be mean/bossy.
Your triolet is in good form. The picture is perfect [but sad]. Your color scheme works well, too.
Your message is hard to 'take' unless one has been there.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Good job with this triolet with an important statement.
No one knows what goes on, but many want to pretend they do and be mean/bossy.
Your triolet is in good form. The picture is perfect [but sad]. Your color scheme works well, too.
Your message is hard to 'take' unless one has been there.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Hi Jan, as I am an advocate against violence and abuse, I felt the need to write this from the perspective of a victim, as these often happen behind closed doors. Thanks for your comments and observations, and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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I understand where you are coming from. I did not mean abuse was ok by any means.
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I didn't think you thought abuse was OK. I thought your review thoughtful and generous xxxx