Hope
Little life lesson82 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Outstanding poetry, Author. You encompass all that pertains to the relevance of not giving up. I liked this stanza in particular:
"Hope has no price but its value is endless
It gets us past times when we're feeling helpless
But the real key to joy is to show that we care
That always comes when we're willing to share.
Great rhyming throughout.
Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Outstanding poetry, Author. You encompass all that pertains to the relevance of not giving up. I liked this stanza in particular:
"Hope has no price but its value is endless
It gets us past times when we're feeling helpless
But the real key to joy is to show that we care
That always comes when we're willing to share.
Great rhyming throughout.
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Thank you much...John
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Poet,
The couplet rhymes are of course strong and effective. It is a pity that the metre lets down what could be a powerful work. However, the message is clear and well put.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Dear Poet,
The couplet rhymes are of course strong and effective. It is a pity that the metre lets down what could be a powerful work. However, the message is clear and well put.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Thank you
Comment from MelB
A well penned poem on what hope means. Very nice aabb rhyme, rhythm, and flow. This made me smile all the way to the end. The last two lines are my favorite.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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A well penned poem on what hope means. Very nice aabb rhyme, rhythm, and flow. This made me smile all the way to the end. The last two lines are my favorite.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Thanks
Comment from Eric1
Hi Mystery Author, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, The rhyming is most excellent, the rhythm and flow are very good, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Hi Mystery Author, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, The rhyming is most excellent, the rhythm and flow are very good, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Thank you much
Comment from Marykelly
I think the message of this poem is that hope, faith, and love can only be fulfilling and uplifting if they are part of actions that offer these virtues, like the example of feeding a homeless person in the poem. When things are not going well it's not enough to think about hope, faith, and love; they must be acted on.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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I think the message of this poem is that hope, faith, and love can only be fulfilling and uplifting if they are part of actions that offer these virtues, like the example of feeding a homeless person in the poem. When things are not going well it's not enough to think about hope, faith, and love; they must be acted on.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
Interesting poem about what hope means to you.
When life gets too tough and you can't cope /You can just hope or
call all on faith /Or be productive and get off your ass
hope a way to avoid responsibility
Wishful thinking is okay /But when life makes demands of a more serious sort It's action that works
Faith and hope are both used to avoid reality
The next time you feel down and somewhat dejected
Do something different and unexpected
homeless give them a meal /Watch as they eat and see how you feel you gave them some hope Add some real love and you'll know they can cope /Love, faith and hope can save anyone's day
And they grow exactly the very same way ....
I tried to make some sense of your poem because it was a bit confusing. I think what you mean is that hope is found in helping others.
Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Hello,
Interesting poem about what hope means to you.
When life gets too tough and you can't cope /You can just hope or
call all on faith /Or be productive and get off your ass
hope a way to avoid responsibility
Wishful thinking is okay /But when life makes demands of a more serious sort It's action that works
Faith and hope are both used to avoid reality
The next time you feel down and somewhat dejected
Do something different and unexpected
homeless give them a meal /Watch as they eat and see how you feel you gave them some hope Add some real love and you'll know they can cope /Love, faith and hope can save anyone's day
And they grow exactly the very same way ....
I tried to make some sense of your poem because it was a bit confusing. I think what you mean is that hope is found in helping others.
Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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THANKS
Comment from kiwisteveh
You are right in your message that hope on its own is useless - you need to take some action to give hope a chance to show its true colours. I took action yesterday by buying a lottery ticket - today I have hope. Tomorrow I will probably be dejected again! :O)
Sound rhyme and meter carry this along, although I found the meter was stronger in the first stanzas and tended to fall away a little towards the end.
Steve
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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You are right in your message that hope on its own is useless - you need to take some action to give hope a chance to show its true colours. I took action yesterday by buying a lottery ticket - today I have hope. Tomorrow I will probably be dejected again! :O)
Sound rhyme and meter carry this along, although I found the meter was stronger in the first stanzas and tended to fall away a little towards the end.
Steve
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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THANKS
Comment from Stephanie Kastner
Great poem about what hope means to you. Too many sit around hoping without being proactive. When you can shed a light on somebody else's need for hope, you are sharing God,s live the way He intended. Good luck!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Great poem about what hope means to you. Too many sit around hoping without being proactive. When you can shed a light on somebody else's need for hope, you are sharing God,s live the way He intended. Good luck!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you
Comment from rjuselius
This is,an interesting philosophical sentiment dear anonymous! It first sounds as you don't approve hope and faith. The end is closer to my heart.
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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This is,an interesting philosophical sentiment dear anonymous! It first sounds as you don't approve hope and faith. The end is closer to my heart.
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you
Comment from mvbrooks
The poem seems rather dark -- that "hope" is separate from action. It is an uncommon view separating it from other inspirational poems. I was surprised that "hope" has no "audacity" as President Obama penned a book entitled the "Audacity of Hope" and used that as a basis for his message of "hope" that propelled him to the White House.
The poem's rhythm / pacing is uneven as the length of lines vary--stanza two especially stands out in contrast to the rest of the poem. Perhaps if the lines/stanzas/pacing were more even, the message would seem more clear.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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The poem seems rather dark -- that "hope" is separate from action. It is an uncommon view separating it from other inspirational poems. I was surprised that "hope" has no "audacity" as President Obama penned a book entitled the "Audacity of Hope" and used that as a basis for his message of "hope" that propelled him to the White House.
The poem's rhythm / pacing is uneven as the length of lines vary--stanza two especially stands out in contrast to the rest of the poem. Perhaps if the lines/stanzas/pacing were more even, the message would seem more clear.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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THANKS