Comment from ~Dovey

Exceptional

Hi Marijke!

This is amazing! I've seen a lot of the entries for the Triolet contest posted. I sure hope yours wins. The message is one that is so important for everyone to hear. Your refrain lines are powerful, that is the key element to the Triolet. WOW! Stunning artwork! Your entire presentation is exquisite!

I hope the committee agrees with me :)

This is exceptional! Good luck!

Kim

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Wow, Kim, thank you so much for this very generous review and your great comments. I appreciate both so much... Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is a marvelous poem and one I can relate to. I have notified all my family members they are not invited to my funeral whenever it is. If they cannot bother with me while I am alive, I certainly do not want their tears when I am gone.

I am getting ready for surgery on my ribs and will be gone for a week or two. The infection has cleared up but the ribs just will not heal. By the time they get done with me I will have enough screws in my chest to set off metal detectors at an airport.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Hi Sasha. I am sorry you felt the need to notify your family members not to come to your funeral... and I am sorry your ribs are not healing. Let's hope this surgery will fix your ribs... I hope so. Thanks for your comments and your generous review. Warmest regards and best wishes for a speedy recovery, Marijke :o)

Comment from jusylee72

Excellent

That has to one of the saddest poems I have ever read. I hope that is not how we are treating the ones we love. We do have our busy lives but that is just too sad. Beautifully and tragically stated.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Jusylee, for your kind and generous review and comments. Yes, some families are too busy to remember they have a loved one sitting alone. Just one telephone call or email, or an hour for a cuppa would be sufficient. But too too busy (I am not in that position, I may add. But I feel for some friends who are). Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

And those people will have to live with their decisions the rest of their lives.

Your triolet is in good form. It reads very well. Your repeating lines fit in nicely. Your message is great, and one that many need to hear.

Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Jan, for your kind and generous review and comments. Yes, some families are too busy to remember they have a loved one sitting alone. Just one telephone call or email, or an hour for a cuppa would be sufficient. But too too busy (Fortunately, I am not in that position, I may add. But I feel for some friends who are). Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Kazzawin

Excellent

How true this is......and how often have we seen it!

It's happened in my own family. The sad thing is those who have departed don't have the chance to say it then. It's painful to watch and desperately upsetting.

I think this is a great little poem that should pack a punch! ....to remember those who you love before it's too late.

I hope it does well : )

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Kazza, for your kind and generous review and comments. Yes, some families are too busy to remember they have a loved one sitting alone. Just one telephone call or email, or an hour for a cuppa would be sufficient. But too too busy (Fortunately, I am not in that position, I may add. But I feel for some friends who are). Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

FG,

Unfortunately, I think you're right. I think we all seem to neglect the important things (to certain degrees) until it's too late. I wonder if those people were crying because:

1.) they were sad and were going to miss the deceased
2.) they deeply regretted their inattention to her and hated that it was too late to make it right
3.) wanted to get attention as a survivor of the lost person.

Perhaps, if it was #2, they've learned a lesson...? Hope so. Anyway, your poem should serve as a smart reminder to the rest of us. Thanks and good luck in the contest!

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 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Robyn, for your kind and generous review and comments. Yes, some families are too busy to remember they have a loved one sitting alone. Just one telephone call or email, or an hour for a cuppa would be sufficient. But too too busy. I think you are right, it is often No. 2 point, but that doesn't help the person who needed their love and their time when they were alive. (Fortunately, I am not in that position, I may add. But I feel for some friends who are). Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

Your presentation in this poem is stunning. Great picture and color choices. You verse is thought-provoking and powerful. It tells us not to take our loved ones for granted and to be sure we stay in contact with them regularly. I agree with you. You cannot make up for indifference once they have passed

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 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Douhglas, for your kind and generous review and comments. Yes, some families are too busy to remember they have a loved one sitting alone. Just one telephone call or email, or an hour for a cuppa would be sufficient. But too too busy (Fortunately, I am not in that position, I may add. But I feel for some friends who are). Warmest regards, Marijke :o)