Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

A very moving and loving tribute to Claire. Very touching and well composed poetic verse. A very desirable way to go is to pass in your sleep.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Hi Don Thanks very much for reading my poem to Claire and yes that is the way to go quietly and peacefully .With Cheers to you for your review

Comment from wilkswrites

Excellent

Although I am sad for your friend's mother's passing, I have to say that the way she passed is a blessing. Your writing effectively painted a picture of a person taking a rest, and not waking up. You did a fine job as I didn't have to imagine the scene, because you did a fine job of creating the image.

Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Hi vwilks. Thanks you very much for your time to read and review my poem and I am glad I was able to share with you my work and paint the picture that I wanted to portray Cheers

Comment from David I

Excellent

Both sad and comforting. A beautiful description from a different point of view from those that mourn, though they have the final say. Well written.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Hi Sprinter. Many thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem and for your lovely words of encouragement. I do appreciate your feedback Cheers

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

This is a beautiful tribute to the person mentioned in the author notes. So peaceful is the change from departure to arrival a step tow of existence. Hope you win the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Hi Ben . Many thanks for your encouraging review and comments for my contest entry and
for you good wishes. Claire passed unexpectedly and this is how my Sister told me when they had found her. Many Cheers to you

Comment from Windborne

Excellent

I like the way this poem leads from the perspective of the person dying to that of the family members around her. It is almost as if we are allowed to experience the journey of death with the departed.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Hi Windbone. I am pleased you stopped by to read and review my poem for Claire. this is how my sister told me about her sudden passing so I tokk it from there and this is what came out. I am glad you liked it Cheers

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

I think perhaps most of us would like to go this way, peacefully with no great drama and no pain. Your free verse poem does a good job of describing Claire's last moments.

I see you have signed your name at the bottom of your notes - this is a no-no in this blind voting contest, so you should remove it as soon as you can.

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Hi Steve, Thanks so much for reading and picking up that issue I did this unintentionally so have corrected the issue. I try to be so careful and appreciate your message and also for your lovely review. Claire's death was quite unexpected but sounds like her time was up. Cheers for your good luck message

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

What a wonderful tribute that you have given to Claire. You also place a most moving entry for this contest. I am out of six yet will be there to vote. You are so kind.

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 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Hi foxangie, Thanks so much for your lovely encouraging words. I am glad you thought so higly of this and I will give a copy to my sister as it is for her, also she lost her motherinlaw this week . Love your support and kindness Hugs and Cheers

Comment from ddmaewriting

Excellent

Very poignantly written and a touching dedication. Death comes like a thief in the night. I pray for all who have left us for, what I believe, a more peaceful and blissful afterlife. I pray to condole and console in my own way. Sending prayers to those who are hurting from the separation and for a peaceful respite to the departed loved one.

Technical note: was it probably a typo error? "santuary of death" instead of "sanctuary of death"?

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 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Hi ddmaewriting, Thank so much for reading my poem for Claire and for picking up this typo. yes I lost the lot ( didn't save so had to do it again so I appreciate your eyes. yes death just awaits us all at some time bit Claire sounded like she passed very peacefully. Cheers for you review and rating Christine😃

reply by ddmaewriting on 16-Apr-2016

Welcome. Take care.