Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Unrelinquished and Relished"A collection of sonnets
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Comment from C.J. 16
A very nice sonnet Mikey. The last two lines are my favorite. You are quite prolific and you have a unique style. Well done. All the best.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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A very nice sonnet Mikey. The last two lines are my favorite. You are quite prolific and you have a unique style. Well done. All the best.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Aww. How very nice of you to say, Linda. I'm way behind and I promise to get to some reviewing SOON. I hope you're still writing some cool children't pieces. I like those after reading all the doom and gloom. LOL mikey
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Thanks mikey. I'm going to try to post one or two poems a week for the time being. I'll see how that works out.
Take care,
Linda
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Thanks mikey. I'm going to try to post one or two poems a week for the time being. I'll see how that works out.
Take care,
Linda
Comment from Nika2016
Five stars for rhyme/meter..2 stars for understanding...
It is not love the knight seeks, but mastery and control. The elusive lady must reflect the same attributes as the knight..bravery..tenacity..or she is not his peer. There is no honor in taking what is not freely given as choice without duress is the mainstay of every bargain under heaven..in law..in love. Love must be earned, not stolen. What he offers is not love, as love would place him as protector, not enemy.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Five stars for rhyme/meter..2 stars for understanding...
It is not love the knight seeks, but mastery and control. The elusive lady must reflect the same attributes as the knight..bravery..tenacity..or she is not his peer. There is no honor in taking what is not freely given as choice without duress is the mainstay of every bargain under heaven..in law..in love. Love must be earned, not stolen. What he offers is not love, as love would place him as protector, not enemy.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Hmm. Yes, I see where one could draw that conclusion. Not my intention, but it does have a kind of macho, grab the lady and ride feel to it I admit. It's meant to be a mutual meeting of two like minds not giving in to age riding off together. I agree with your sentiments completely, so I'll take a look and maybe I can reflect that better here. Thanks for the kudos on the skills and the honest review. Most appreciated. mikey
Comment from Ric Myworld
You ol' sly fox, you. You couldn't have purchased a paid advertisement loaded with more come-to-Papa bull crap to make those willing and able forlorn lovers from getting fired up and ready. Walk softly and carry a big stick. :-)
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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You ol' sly fox, you. You couldn't have purchased a paid advertisement loaded with more come-to-Papa bull crap to make those willing and able forlorn lovers from getting fired up and ready. Walk softly and carry a big stick. :-)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Exactly, half the fun is in the surprise!!! LOL!
Mount the grey pony and ride! mikey
Comment from Pantygynt
Old Billy Shake sometimes left his volta to the couplet. You leave it till the last line. Is that called poetic brinkmanship do you think?
It is a fine angry sonnet, angrier I think than any Billy wrote. I thought we were in for a villanelle at first with that remark about the dying of the light anbd love rather than rave.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Old Billy Shake sometimes left his volta to the couplet. You leave it till the last line. Is that called poetic brinkmanship do you think?
It is a fine angry sonnet, angrier I think than any Billy wrote. I thought we were in for a villanelle at first with that remark about the dying of the light anbd love rather than rave.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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I calmed down once I realized I had the girl. I was getting a little miffed there for a while. But a little muff trumps a little miff any day. HA! Just made that up. So clever. LOL mikey
Comment from LIJ Red
Hero Sonnets, Italian Sonnets, Shakyspeare sonnets, blankety-blank sonnets--ain't most half-page poems some sort of sonnet? I like this one. Snow on the roof but a bit of fire still in the chimney. Excellent.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Hero Sonnets, Italian Sonnets, Shakyspeare sonnets, blankety-blank sonnets--ain't most half-page poems some sort of sonnet? I like this one. Snow on the roof but a bit of fire still in the chimney. Excellent.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Yep, anything that keeps me from having to reach the bottom of the page is okay by me. Ha! Yep, as long as there's something to prod the fire with, we're good to go. mikey
Comment from write hand blue
Hi Michael, This is a fantastic sonnet, real or otherwise.
I enjoyed the flow of this well executed word play, most eloquently written. This makes for a truly impeccable write. The subject is of interest to me and it's so true about youthful fires fizzling out.
Most inspiring... ~Mel~
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Hi Michael, This is a fantastic sonnet, real or otherwise.
I enjoyed the flow of this well executed word play, most eloquently written. This makes for a truly impeccable write. The subject is of interest to me and it's so true about youthful fires fizzling out.
Most inspiring... ~Mel~
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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What awesome words to hear. Yes, the older I get the more I believe that it's all wasted on youth. HA! Thanks a million. I'm just delighted, Mel. mikey
Comment from closetpoetjester
Wow, super smooth mikey and this oozed appeal from every angle yes Siree!
Rolled off the tongue like liquid gold, even the "knit and piss", too funny.
I agree, let them all go to hell and you go chase that spark! Loved this. You give good Sonnet. Sixer for you.
P
PS More real Sonnets please. I say f**k free verse for now haha!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Wow, super smooth mikey and this oozed appeal from every angle yes Siree!
Rolled off the tongue like liquid gold, even the "knit and piss", too funny.
I agree, let them all go to hell and you go chase that spark! Loved this. You give good Sonnet. Sixer for you.
P
PS More real Sonnets please. I say f**k free verse for now haha!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Hi there Ms. P
WOW! I think I may just write more of these sonnet things if you REALLY like them. LOL We agree 100%, let 'em drop, life is to be lived! Yeah, f**k free verse, rhyme, meter, even a little enjambment here and there, applied gently of course. HA! Thanks so much. I truly can't stop smiling. :)) mikey
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NEVER stop smiling LOL
x
Comment from Quire's Gal
I'm being particular to this poem because I like it personally. Otherwise, I can't keep up with you,you're so prolific and I have a visual disability to boot. Good sonnet rhythmically, flows well and Totally LOVE the couplet!
Can you please explain the "knit and piss into a cup." Line? It seems out of place with the rest of the poet.
Take care, QG
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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I'm being particular to this poem because I like it personally. Otherwise, I can't keep up with you,you're so prolific and I have a visual disability to boot. Good sonnet rhythmically, flows well and Totally LOVE the couplet!
Can you please explain the "knit and piss into a cup." Line? It seems out of place with the rest of the poet.
Take care, QG
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Glad you liked this. Well ... I liked the sound of the line, it's meant to depict old people kind of giving up on life, sitting around knitting and giving the doctor specimens etc. It is probably a bit out of place like you say.
But I'm thrilled you liked the ending. That was the main point! Thanks so much, mikey
Comment from c_lucas
The young are untrained in maintaining Love's burning embers. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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The young are untrained in maintaining Love's burning embers. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Couldn't agree more. And I agree more everyday lately!! Thanks a bunch, Charlie. mikey
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Mjkey,
when did you write a un- proper sonnet then? This is pretty cool. you do have a good way with words, "you all can knit and piss into a cup" I'm not entirely sure I understand the meaning of this line but I like the way it sounds.
Great sonnet.
Brenda
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Hi Mjkey,
when did you write a un- proper sonnet then? This is pretty cool. you do have a good way with words, "you all can knit and piss into a cup" I'm not entirely sure I understand the meaning of this line but I like the way it sounds.
Great sonnet.
Brenda
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Ha! Oh, I made out like my last rambling free verse thing at the beach was a sonnet because someone asked me to do a sonnet. LOL
That line was to indicate a bunch of old people sitting around knitting and peeing in urinals or specimen cups I guess, basically just getting old and not LIVING. I liked the way it sounded too! Glad you liked it. :)) mikey
