Life's Observations and Reflections
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Come on Monday..."This is my prologue for the NaPoWriMo 2016 (30 Poe
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Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I liked this one a lot. Love observational pieces and real life. This is quite a simply written piece, devoid of 'poetic rhetoric' and all the better for it.
to quench your insatiable thirst - can you quench an insatiable thirst? lol
and then we'll compose a rhyme.
- you need to close off the speech marks here.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Hi there,
I liked this one a lot. Love observational pieces and real life. This is quite a simply written piece, devoid of 'poetic rhetoric' and all the better for it.
to quench your insatiable thirst - can you quench an insatiable thirst? lol
and then we'll compose a rhyme.
- you need to close off the speech marks here.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 08-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Thanks for lovely review. Warmest regards :o)
Comment from William Ross
I like it very good, fun and witty a great read. I love the grandchildren best part is when i'm tired they go home to mommy and daddy. good luck on this and enjoy your day.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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I like it very good, fun and witty a great read. I love the grandchildren best part is when i'm tired they go home to mommy and daddy. good luck on this and enjoy your day.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2016
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Thanks for lovely review. Warmest regards :o)
Comment from Leineco
LOL - I couldn't figure out how this was going anywhere
near quiet!!! It seemed like a raucous good time
was destined to end with "exhaustion" (LOL)
Well done - and definitely a strong contender :-)
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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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LOL - I couldn't figure out how this was going anywhere
near quiet!!! It seemed like a raucous good time
was destined to end with "exhaustion" (LOL)
Well done - and definitely a strong contender :-)
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Comment Written 08-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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No, well, when you're surrounded, it is exhausting... but peace and quiet that night. (Then a week to get over it, before it starts all again). Thanks for your fun review and generous rating. Warmest regards.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
They are cuties. I enjoyed your poem. Good job with the rhyme. I like how you took everyday activities and made them into a rhyming poem. The lines have great flow. I like the 'things' you included about the grandkids--the cookies they will bake, the lemonade, the kisses they gave you, and just the sweet behavior enjoyed by you. Good job with the prompt I like quiet, too. Best wishes in the contest.
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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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They are cuties. I enjoyed your poem. Good job with the rhyme. I like how you took everyday activities and made them into a rhyming poem. The lines have great flow. I like the 'things' you included about the grandkids--the cookies they will bake, the lemonade, the kisses they gave you, and just the sweet behavior enjoyed by you. Good job with the prompt I like quiet, too. Best wishes in the contest.
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Comment Written 08-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, jannypan, for your observations and comments and your generous rating. Warmest regards.