Christine's Poems
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Comment from lightink
I love how your created a lope with the repeated words! It's playful yet also nostalgic! It's a perfect interpretation - hoping to get in touch with the inner child!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2016
I love how your created a lope with the repeated words! It's playful yet also nostalgic! It's a perfect interpretation - hoping to get in touch with the inner child!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2016
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Hi Lightink, Yes the continuing word from one line to the next was my way of 'running the stick along the poem. glad you liked it and always in touch with the inner child LOL. Cheers for your review and comments Christine😀
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
I enjoyed your poem, it is easy to remember those
carefree days of our youth. A simple toy, perhaps a
stick, brought enjoyment. Now, it takes game boys,
I-pads and face-book.
Well done,
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2016
I enjoyed your poem, it is easy to remember those
carefree days of our youth. A simple toy, perhaps a
stick, brought enjoyment. Now, it takes game boys,
I-pads and face-book.
Well done,
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2016
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Hi Caroln, Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my challenge post, it was a fun write and I think a stick is much better fun Cheers Christine 😀
Comment from ciliverde
Very nice job on this, I like how the poem evolves from strolling, to the fences, her stick and her noisy clatter, then back to her carefree stroll again. I enjoyed this one very much!
Carol
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2016
Very nice job on this, I like how the poem evolves from strolling, to the fences, her stick and her noisy clatter, then back to her carefree stroll again. I enjoyed this one very much!
Carol
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2016
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Hi Carol, thanks for saying so and I can remeber doing this very thing as a child and this image just happened to lend itself to this poem .I am so pleased you like enjoyed this one Cheers Christine😄
Comment from misscookie
You captured my attention from the start'
and yes your poem brought back memories except I live in the city and my stick was targeting a iron fence.
Good write.
Cookie
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
You captured my attention from the start'
and yes your poem brought back memories except I live in the city and my stick was targeting a iron fence.
Good write.
Cookie
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Hi Cookie,
Thanks so much for you review and I bet the iron fence made a racket LOL Many Cheers Christine
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Yes the iron fence did... I love the loud sound. LOL
Cookie
Comment from mvbrooks
I enjoyed the way this poem picks up on the last word or each line and presents it in a new form as the first word of the next line. It seemed to emphasize the message of "add some child-like fun" to your life. While the message at first seems light with the evoking of sound and sight, it's actually rather deep and stays with the reader after the poem is finished.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
I enjoyed the way this poem picks up on the last word or each line and presents it in a new form as the first word of the next line. It seemed to emphasize the message of "add some child-like fun" to your life. While the message at first seems light with the evoking of sound and sight, it's actually rather deep and stays with the reader after the poem is finished.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Hi mybrooks, Thanks for having a read and for you message. I think my idea was for the continuing line to represent the fence noise ,it just came out like that when I began to write this. Glad you enjoyed the read. Cheers Christine
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Care free and don't care who found the noise annoying. Walking along the street without any fear to be attacked. That's the way we grew up.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
Care free and don't care who found the noise annoying. Walking along the street without any fear to be attacked. That's the way we grew up.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Hi Sandra, yes so care- free and innocent is the way we grew up, but kids today are a lot different. Thanks for your review and lovely rating. Cheers Christine😀
Comment from C.J. 16
A lovely little poem inspired by the picture. Yes, the image does bring to mind how carefree and innocent children are. Nice work. I enjoyed it. Thanks and have a great day.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
A lovely little poem inspired by the picture. Yes, the image does bring to mind how carefree and innocent children are. Nice work. I enjoyed it. Thanks and have a great day.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Hi C.J.16. Many thanks for reading and reviewing my post for this challenge. I am glad you like the innocence in this one Cheers Christine😀
Comment from robyn corum
Christine,
I don't know what this poetry form might be called, but I really like it AND I love it for this subject matter! The repeating words echo and help remind us of carefree days. Kudos! Loved it!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
Christine,
I don't know what this poetry form might be called, but I really like it AND I love it for this subject matter! The repeating words echo and help remind us of carefree days. Kudos! Loved it!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Hi Robyn, Neither do I , I just came up with it and it seemed to work ( perhaps I've invented an new style. LOL) Thanks for your lovely review and it is always nice to hear from you. Another great challenge Cheers for a great day. Christine 😀
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Chrissy - a very nice interpretation of the picture. You wrote exactly what you saw in a short but interesting piece. Good accompanying author notes. Nice expressive piece about the carefree time of youth. Exactly, when did I last walk down a road like that, trailing a stick along a fence, LOL. Thoughtful work. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
Hi Chrissy - a very nice interpretation of the picture. You wrote exactly what you saw in a short but interesting piece. Good accompanying author notes. Nice expressive piece about the carefree time of youth. Exactly, when did I last walk down a road like that, trailing a stick along a fence, LOL. Thoughtful work. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Hi Dorothy. Glad you stopped by to take a peek at my challenge and Thanks for you lovely review. Perhaps we can both find a stick and a fence what fun hey. Cheers so much Christine x
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This really goes well with the picture, a carefree little girl and her stick. Well done, yours is the third one I've read so far and each one has been so different. Excellent. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2016
This really goes well with the picture, a carefree little girl and her stick. Well done, yours is the third one I've read so far and each one has been so different. Excellent. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2016
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Hi Sandra, Many thanks for your comments and lovely rating, I can't wait to have a read of the others too. enjoyed this challenge and returned my to my childhood for a moment ( sometimes I don't think I have left it LOL) Cheers Christine xx😀