Comment from RodG

Excellent

I commend you for accepting the challenge. You have done a masterful job of describing the beauty that you are walking amidst. It's easy to visualize those poppies and the bees.
Unfortunately, you only have four lines to work in the tornado, yet we feel your dread as the funnel cloud draws near.
The weakest part of the poem for me is your closing couplet.
Still, overall an excellent effort.

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 Comment Written 12-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016

Thanks, Rod, your kind comments are gratefully accepted, as are the suggestions :)

Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

Wow. It's the quality that usually takes hours or days to achieve. Isn't it amazing the mode the brain goes into with this challenge. This is flawless in form and meter PLUS the flow of thought and wording is compelling and really engaging. You wrote a top notch sonnet in less than an hour. Super job!! mikey

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 Comment Written 12-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016

Thanks Michael, you are very kind. I love these challenges - and "challenge" is definitely the word!