Comment from Lancer1979

Excellent

I enjoyed everything about this poem. Not one negative thing to say. The artwork you chose was a great choice, especially using a drawing rather than a photo. My favorite line was, "This burden I have grown". Too often in life we let things weigh heavy on us, which in turn weighs heavy on our minds, and causes us to get sick. Better to speak one's mind and release it, so that you can move forward, without regrets.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016

Hi Lancer1979 I am so pleased you enjoyed my poem and thanks so much for dropping by. Yes too often things are left unsaid or done so one should have few regrets along the way. Many Cheers for a nice review

Comment from anabellapongasi

Excellent

So this is how a PantyGynt form is written. Very nice. It works very well with your chosen theme of regret. Flows well, excellent meter and rhyme. Well done. Good luck in the contest.

Blessings,
Anabella

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016

Hi Anabella, I am very thankful for your lovely words and encouraging review ,I hope it does meet this styles requirements so you good luck wishes are received without regret Cheers

Comment from Sambangi

Excellent

Hi, this is a very good entry for this contest. I guess this format is not as easy as one thinks. Your syllable count and rhyme is spot on though I can not say the same about meter. I think there are some deviations in meter. For example set, debt, regret do not follow iambic meter. Please look at that
Wish you all the best

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016

Hi Sambangi, Thanks for your critique and suggestions I will look into this. still learning about meter I find it quite confusing at times, but trying new things out. Much appreciation for your time. Cheers

Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

Yes, this certainly does reflect upon a life that is filled with regret from a past that could have been lived in a more positive light. Now, only loneliness and ... regret offers company.
You have done well to use this new form. Well done!

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016

Hi PoemsOfDDD. Many thanks for your review and rating for my poem for this style, I had fun thinking it up and am pleased with your comments. Regrets I have a few, but all now all good ,Cheers

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

You have met the criteria of the form to perfection
but more importantly, marvelous message!

The consequences of our actions have the potential
to weigh us down - and, oh, how often we did not
properly assess them, and our left lugging the load
on our own.

I'f only we had thought it through- - -if only we had known.

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 Comment Written 11-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016

Hi Leinco. Yes too true .Thanks so much for your encouraging words and great rating. I am so pleased you thought it met the criteria well. Cheers to you my friend

Comment from Pyrrho

Excellent

Own/shown feels like a forced rhyme.

Also, the insertio0n of "do" in line five to fix the meter is "lazy" poetry. It is usually easy to fix meter in less artificial ways, and the poetry is so much better.

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 Comment Written 11-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2016

Hi Pyrrho, Thanks for your review and comments and I have taken your suggestions on board so have changed some words and now hope it has more depth (if you care to re read), much appreciation for your help. Cheers