Seth Sloth
A Peach Picking Sloth29 total reviews
Comment from winnona
very well done. You completed the challenge of this contest well. Your choice of words flow together to send the message to the reader and I enjoyed reading your poem. Good luck in the contest.
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very well done. You completed the challenge of this contest well. Your choice of words flow together to send the message to the reader and I enjoyed reading your poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
Comment from CDyer
Aha! Really cute and clever! Great use of alliteration. I think children would really enjoy and have fun with this. Quite the tongue twister as well. I remember one I won a contest with ( which I won't repeat at the moment) because the DJ was afraid to try on air. Let's just say it's a good thing Seth stuck to plucking peaches instead of figs.
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Aha! Really cute and clever! Great use of alliteration. I think children would really enjoy and have fun with this. Quite the tongue twister as well. I remember one I won a contest with ( which I won't repeat at the moment) because the DJ was afraid to try on air. Let's just say it's a good thing Seth stuck to plucking peaches instead of figs.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
Comment from mvbrooks
Enjoyed the witty alteration -- adds to the whimsy of the poem. Cute picture makes the lead character more appealing. Good luck with your contest.
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Enjoyed the witty alteration -- adds to the whimsy of the poem. Cute picture makes the lead character more appealing. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
Comment from rjuselius
Haha. This is an entertaining piece of poetry dear anonymous! The alliteration adds to the feel.
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
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Haha. This is an entertaining piece of poetry dear anonymous! The alliteration adds to the feel.
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
Comment from scd41
You have penned a befitting poem for the Witty animal 5-7-5 contest. Each line has excellent alliteration and the image also matches the poem. The second and the third line have all words with 'p'. That is great
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You have penned a befitting poem for the Witty animal 5-7-5 contest. Each line has excellent alliteration and the image also matches the poem. The second and the third line have all words with 'p'. That is great
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
Comment from cedarsflee
You applied the correct form, you stuck with the theme of the writing prompt and offered an amusing account of the sloth. But there's way too much alliteration. I needed an avalanche of advil after reading that. Maybe if you want to keep alliterating perhaps pick a different letter in the last line.
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You applied the correct form, you stuck with the theme of the writing prompt and offered an amusing account of the sloth. But there's way too much alliteration. I needed an avalanche of advil after reading that. Maybe if you want to keep alliterating perhaps pick a different letter in the last line.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine entry for the contest
Exact syllables to the form
The peach may rot before Seth can pluck
that pit for the center
Better to just eat the peach slowly
and let the pit fall where it will
Great picture to match
well done
Good luck in the contest
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This is a fine entry for the contest
Exact syllables to the form
The peach may rot before Seth can pluck
that pit for the center
Better to just eat the peach slowly
and let the pit fall where it will
Great picture to match
well done
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Cute artwork.
-Good format.
-Interesting use of alliteration. I wonder how fast Seth could say all that?!
-Cute story within your poem.
-I guess Seth loved his peaches so much, he would get them at any cost.
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-Cute artwork.
-Good format.
-Interesting use of alliteration. I wonder how fast Seth could say all that?!
-Cute story within your poem.
-I guess Seth loved his peaches so much, he would get them at any cost.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I think this is the best one of these I have read. I love a good tongue twister and this fits the bill very well. The alliteration is super.
Best of luck in the competition.
GMG
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Hi there,
I think this is the best one of these I have read. I love a good tongue twister and this fits the bill very well. The alliteration is super.
Best of luck in the competition.
GMG
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
Comment from Kaydoe
I enjoyed this witty animal 5-7-5 poem. I like how you used the "S" starting
each word and the "P" for the next 2 verses. Sound neat and clever job!
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I enjoyed this witty animal 5-7-5 poem. I like how you used the "S" starting
each word and the "P" for the next 2 verses. Sound neat and clever job!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2016
