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Comment from Ricky1024
forever as forever Here I am but I am NOT saying I am and I'm not a total or eaten by the name of dr. Suess my name is Michael stay here until my work here on the loose to hop aboard don't be a caboose being engine engine number 9 and then you will feel this each and every time Fergie 10:24
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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forever as forever Here I am but I am NOT saying I am and I'm not a total or eaten by the name of dr. Suess my name is Michael stay here until my work here on the loose to hop aboard don't be a caboose being engine engine number 9 and then you will feel this each and every time Fergie 10:24
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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My thoughts exactly. When the caboose backs up it's a sign to enter. mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
Jesus, dude. I`m tempted to ask if you make house ... well, is there anything you need, are you okay? Can I ... um ... this is a great story actually. The setting lets you really explore fidelity and limits I think. Kind of like what if Selma Hayak was standing in front of you naked? Most people I know have been divorced, including you. I know how crazy true blue you are, but still, you aren`t with your first wife. You`ve even seperated fr this one, right? So nothing goes like it^s,planned. I never thought mine was a creep. But hell, how blind was I? Well you have such a strong undertone of insight in everything you write and I doubt many notice and appreciate it. Your tone is so breezy. But it still goes in the brain. Lord, I sound like you now. Blither, blither. Why are you facing the wall? Do you need me to .... well Jk :)) NG
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Jesus, dude. I`m tempted to ask if you make house ... well, is there anything you need, are you okay? Can I ... um ... this is a great story actually. The setting lets you really explore fidelity and limits I think. Kind of like what if Selma Hayak was standing in front of you naked? Most people I know have been divorced, including you. I know how crazy true blue you are, but still, you aren`t with your first wife. You`ve even seperated fr this one, right? So nothing goes like it^s,planned. I never thought mine was a creep. But hell, how blind was I? Well you have such a strong undertone of insight in everything you write and I doubt many notice and appreciate it. Your tone is so breezy. But it still goes in the brain. Lord, I sound like you now. Blither, blither. Why are you facing the wall? Do you need me to .... well Jk :)) NG
Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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You're tooooo damn funny. Ha! Who's Selma Hayak? Some actress or something? I'd loan her my shirt, she'd swoon over my massive chest and it wouldn't be my fault. Just like always.
You should have let me kill yours, but I guess it's better I'm free. I'm glad you liked the writing as that's the point, the rest of it's a nuisance really although I'm just trying to make it not boring and I hope not silly. Anyway, I have this slight ache, well, not slight and ... mikey
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
whoo hoo. Damn where is the fan.
Oh as to the story, it is a great start. I never pictured you doing a long story but this has the makings of a really nice piece.
Descriptions are great and story line is fantastic. Don't leave me waiting too long...I get restless
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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whoo hoo. Damn where is the fan.
Oh as to the story, it is a great start. I never pictured you doing a long story but this has the makings of a really nice piece.
Descriptions are great and story line is fantastic. Don't leave me waiting too long...I get restless
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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I'll try and get a part two up soon. A little humour coming by first though. Glad you liked this. I've done lots of long stories, even six or seven books. Who knows what I may do. HAHAHA! mikey