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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your free verse poem. I really like its message. You expressed it well. The picture is awesome. I like the arrangement of lines as that adds to the enjoyment that something is happening and a bit off until the end.
Good job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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I enjoyed your free verse poem. I really like its message. You expressed it well. The picture is awesome. I like the arrangement of lines as that adds to the enjoyment that something is happening and a bit off until the end.
Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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Thank you jannypan.
Comment from William Ross
This is a good free verse poem, honestly the back and fourth moving around was a bit much. But reading this it really work out well as 3 different poems. Thanks for sharing and have a great day.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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This is a good free verse poem, honestly the back and fourth moving around was a bit much. But reading this it really work out well as 3 different poems. Thanks for sharing and have a great day.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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Thank you William. Good observations.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a fine piece of free verse writing with a picture element as the stanzas scatter and appear to swoop like the falcon they describe. Until, as if responding to the lure they come together on the perch.
Knowing Evil Eddie as well as I do I was nearly really impressed by the scatter of the stanzas until I realized you had merely centralized and flushed both left and right. What the hell! It's damned effective. Lol.
a suggestion - well perhaps B-U-R-S-T could have been even bigger in the font, spread wider and in a more startling colour. What do you think?
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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This is a fine piece of free verse writing with a picture element as the stanzas scatter and appear to swoop like the falcon they describe. Until, as if responding to the lure they come together on the perch.
Knowing Evil Eddie as well as I do I was nearly really impressed by the scatter of the stanzas until I realized you had merely centralized and flushed both left and right. What the hell! It's damned effective. Lol.
a suggestion - well perhaps B-U-R-S-T could have been even bigger in the font, spread wider and in a more startling colour. What do you think?
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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You know, I thought that very thing, I'll give that a try.
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Ok, it did it
Comment from foxangie123
An amazing picture and an amazing write, and outstanding formatting. I truly enjoyed every aspect of this work you created. You are wayyyyyyy talented friend, seriously..
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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An amazing picture and an amazing write, and outstanding formatting. I truly enjoyed every aspect of this work you created. You are wayyyyyyy talented friend, seriously..
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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Thank you foxangie.
