Blood
Mystery & Crime - 200 wds (Noir)26 total reviews
Comment from Unspoken94
Dawn, I think this is one of the best I read of yours and I have
read many. I don't know why, but the title and the last sentence
fit so beautifully to the story. Very well written. -Bill
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Dawn, I think this is one of the best I read of yours and I have
read many. I don't know why, but the title and the last sentence
fit so beautifully to the story. Very well written. -Bill
Comment Written 08-Feb-2016
Comment from chasennov
Mystery & Crime - 200 wds (Noir). Blood.' This is an excellent story you have created here. What a shame it is when one is quite prepared to leave this world. People are people and they do f...up. Very well done.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016
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Mystery & Crime - 200 wds (Noir). Blood.' This is an excellent story you have created here. What a shame it is when one is quite prepared to leave this world. People are people and they do f...up. Very well done.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016
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So true - we never know what's just around the corner for us, so it IS a shame. But then, this is Noir fiction, and I guess after many years of being neglected by the person she loves it becomes more than she can bear. Years? She should have cut it off at the knees, and that's what happens to some people - they don't call a halt to it, and slowly lose themselves...
Thanks much, Chas!
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Dawn,
Dark, twisted yet thoroughly believable. You kept the mystery going right to the end. Terse and sharp.
Regards
Reg
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Dear Dawn,
Dark, twisted yet thoroughly believable. You kept the mystery going right to the end. Terse and sharp.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 07-Feb-2016
Comment from I am Cat
Yikes! His brother! WEll, that'll kill him. lol
Well written, Dawn, of course.
one note:
I think you need a space here:
I don't love this man;( )I love my husband, still.
But that's the only thing I could spy with my little eye. ;)
I originally thought this was a contest, but I see it's not! ;)
Well done though... I"m sure these can be very good exercises to do. i"m far too long-winded... (see?)
lol
Hugs
Cat
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Yikes! His brother! WEll, that'll kill him. lol
Well written, Dawn, of course.
one note:
I think you need a space here:
I don't love this man;( )I love my husband, still.
But that's the only thing I could spy with my little eye. ;)
I originally thought this was a contest, but I see it's not! ;)
Well done though... I"m sure these can be very good exercises to do. i"m far too long-winded... (see?)
lol
Hugs
Cat
Comment Written 07-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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LOL - shhhhhhhh....you can do it if you try....shhhhhhh....I know you can do anything you put your mind to. except maybe fly.....shhhhhhh. LOL
Thanks, Cat - already corrected, but you're a team-player, and top notch! Hugs back. :)
Comment from Joan E.
Wow, two shockers in one tiny story--first, knowing one is going to be killed, and second, choosing the brother. Your one word title and its repeat at the end are very effective. More sighs- Joan
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Wow, two shockers in one tiny story--first, knowing one is going to be killed, and second, choosing the brother. Your one word title and its repeat at the end are very effective. More sighs- Joan
Comment Written 07-Feb-2016
Comment from Sasha
This is very dark, but I enjoyed it very much. You have such an awesome imagination and have written a superb short story. You provided just enough information to convey the narrator's feelings and reasons for choosing the husband's brother. Excellent work with this. Keep up the great work.
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This is very dark, but I enjoyed it very much. You have such an awesome imagination and have written a superb short story. You provided just enough information to convey the narrator's feelings and reasons for choosing the husband's brother. Excellent work with this. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2016
Comment from nancy_e_davis
A sad story of love gone sour. Needing her husband while he is unfaithful to her and getting close to his brother because that is as close as she can get to him, the man she loves and he is going to kill her. Sad situation. Dark Dawn. Good image.
xsx Nancy
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A sad story of love gone sour. Needing her husband while he is unfaithful to her and getting close to his brother because that is as close as she can get to him, the man she loves and he is going to kill her. Sad situation. Dark Dawn. Good image.
xsx Nancy
Comment Written 07-Feb-2016
Comment from robyn corum
ouchie! I think you're right on both counts. Once IS enough - especially when it's blood.
I believe it's the husband that will kill you? That part wasn't exactly clear - whether it would be the hubby or brother doing the killing, but I'm assuming it's the hubs. Naughty girl.
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ouchie! I think you're right on both counts. Once IS enough - especially when it's blood.
I believe it's the husband that will kill you? That part wasn't exactly clear - whether it would be the hubby or brother doing the killing, but I'm assuming it's the hubs. Naughty girl.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2016
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Lots of impact in this one, Dawn. There's a palpable atmosphere - dark, but sad, too. Some unanswered questions, as well, about this love triangle and what led up to this night's events. A really cool little story!
Bravo.
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Lots of impact in this one, Dawn. There's a palpable atmosphere - dark, but sad, too. Some unanswered questions, as well, about this love triangle and what led up to this night's events. A really cool little story!
Bravo.
Av
Comment Written 07-Feb-2016
Comment from royowen
An excellent short work Dawn it takes a lot of imagination to write something like this. I love the theme that the best way near to the one you really love than to be close to the brother. Well done, great write, very clever, my friend, blessings, Roy
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An excellent short work Dawn it takes a lot of imagination to write something like this. I love the theme that the best way near to the one you really love than to be close to the brother. Well done, great write, very clever, my friend, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 07-Feb-2016
