Christine's Poems
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Comment from dmt1967
This reminded me of a holiday I had a few years back. It was my first time flying and although I was scared the excitement kicked in as soon as I was airborne. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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This reminded me of a holiday I had a few years back. It was my first time flying and although I was scared the excitement kicked in as soon as I was airborne. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Hi dmt1967. Thanks for reading and reviewing my poemand glad to bring back a good memory. I enjoy flying but sometimes the waiting can be a bit long so I always carry a notebook and pen now. Never know when a poem will crop up .Thanks for your comments and good luck wishes Cheers
Comment from scd41
What a thorough observation you have narrated of your recent wait at airport for a flight that got delayed. Apparently, the time wasted was put to better use in penning this free verse. For others, time was flying away and they were competing with laptops and phones not to fall behind.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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What a thorough observation you have narrated of your recent wait at airport for a flight that got delayed. Apparently, the time wasted was put to better use in penning this free verse. For others, time was flying away and they were competing with laptops and phones not to fall behind.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Hi scd41. I am pleased you stopped to spend some time to read and review my free verse entry, I enjoyed watching the people and thought It lent itself to a bit of a write, also filled in my time LOL. I rarerly write free verse, but this one just seemd to fit the bill. Appreciate your review and rating Cheers
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
To wait for something can be annoying and frustrating. Each person deal with that waiting process in their own way. Good luck with the contest
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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To wait for something can be annoying and frustrating. Each person deal with that waiting process in their own way. Good luck with the contest
Comment Written 06-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Hi Sandra, yes you are quite right, filling in time is quite an individual event, and now I always carry a notebook and pen, just for such occasions, Thanks for taking your time to give me a review, Many Cheers to you
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow - this was a great read! It's smooth as silk, and pulled me into it as if I were the one sitting in that airport observing what was happening around me! Really, really good!
At first I felt the disconnect of people so involved with technology - it was such a disturbing feeling, and I was somewhat sad at the sterility, the lack of human connection.
But then you turn it around by describing the mounting impatience, and further that emotion with the frustration of failed technology, which ironically turns out to be the very thing that brings people together (as they begin "chatting" and so on).
To me, this amazing free verse is very much a 'sleeper' - it's a complete surprise (or was to me) that a topic so everyday becomes such an enormous poem of social commentary. In fact, if I had a six, this gem would have one.
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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Wow - this was a great read! It's smooth as silk, and pulled me into it as if I were the one sitting in that airport observing what was happening around me! Really, really good!
At first I felt the disconnect of people so involved with technology - it was such a disturbing feeling, and I was somewhat sad at the sterility, the lack of human connection.
But then you turn it around by describing the mounting impatience, and further that emotion with the frustration of failed technology, which ironically turns out to be the very thing that brings people together (as they begin "chatting" and so on).
To me, this amazing free verse is very much a 'sleeper' - it's a complete surprise (or was to me) that a topic so everyday becomes such an enormous poem of social commentary. In fact, if I had a six, this gem would have one.
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Hi Ideasaregems-Dawn, Wow what a fabulous review and I am so pleased you like it so much and 5 stars is certainly enough but your sixes are appreciated . I found once I started writing this it all just tumbled out and I had hoped it would work as a free verse ( I rarely write free verse and prefer rhyme and meter but I am pleased with this one. and your review is most welcome so thanks so much . Many Cheers
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It was my pleasure.
Comment from trumby
Hi, mate. This poem just showed how observant you are while waiting. You were able to describe every little detail. I love the choice of words, it adds interest and enjoyment in reading. A writer, wherever he is, the talent will always show. Beautiful one. All the best in the competition.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Hi, mate. This poem just showed how observant you are while waiting. You were able to describe every little detail. I love the choice of words, it adds interest and enjoyment in reading. A writer, wherever he is, the talent will always show. Beautiful one. All the best in the competition.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Hi Trumby. Many thanks for your great review and nest wishes. I sometimes feel like a secret 'sticky beak' but I find people and lofe interesting and I hope my writing is improving all the time. I have loved this site and feel compelled to keep writing. Many Cheers
Comment from writeapoem
I can relate to this free verse flying on a Jet plane. Delays what ever the reason can be troubling especially when I m eager to return home. But to complain does not help me to get into the plane. Just half to be b patient and wait. Even if I am going to be late. Thanks for sharing what happens when the flight is delayed. All the best.
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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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I can relate to this free verse flying on a Jet plane. Delays what ever the reason can be troubling especially when I m eager to return home. But to complain does not help me to get into the plane. Just half to be b patient and wait. Even if I am going to be late. Thanks for sharing what happens when the flight is delayed. All the best.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2016
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Thank writeapoem, for your quick response to my poem and for your review and rating much appreciated, I think quite a few people may relate to this also, I am glad you stopped by. Cheers