Christine's Poems
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Comment from foxangie123
I love the kitty cat, the picture. I love the book the kitty has its paw on which is brilliant, and the lines are above and beyond those read thus far. Kudos to you.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
I love the kitty cat, the picture. I love the book the kitty has its paw on which is brilliant, and the lines are above and beyond those read thus far. Kudos to you.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
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Hi Foxangie123 . with many thanks for your read and review for my first attempt at this style I am learning all the time and had fun doing this one and I snapped up cat image as soon as I found it. Many Cheers again
Comment from DonandVicki
You make it sound easy but I'm sure it isn't. A fun poem and a good entry into the contest. The art work is touching and a good choice for your work.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
You make it sound easy but I'm sure it isn't. A fun poem and a good entry into the contest. The art work is touching and a good choice for your work.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
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Hi DonandVicki , Thanks for stopping by for a read and giving me a review I really appreciate your time and comments. A bit of fun and still learning re all the styles and poetry's technical language. I loved the Cat too seemed to suit the words Cheers
Comment from Judvan2
Very cute idea. Fun to read, hope it was fun to write. Great contest entry, good luck. I haven't tried one of these, after reading yours I may have the courage to try! Thanks.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
Very cute idea. Fun to read, hope it was fun to write. Great contest entry, good luck. I haven't tried one of these, after reading yours I may have the courage to try! Thanks.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
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Hi Judvan2 Go for it . I thought I would give it a try and am still learning the meaning of iambic meter etc and syllables .so my next one will be an improvement now I understand how they are written, but I enjoyed the challenge with this one anyway. Cheers and many thanks for your review
Comment from Cheryl9359
I like your poem lol, it is good and cute too I just recently tried to do one of these poems too and it was a little harder than I expected but still fun you did great
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
I like your poem lol, it is good and cute too I just recently tried to do one of these poems too and it was a little harder than I expected but still fun you did great
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
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Hi Cheryl, Thank for reading and reviewing my poem and I am beginiing to realize it is not as easy as it looks I am still learning the poetry language and meter requirememts etc so next one will ne better LOL cheers for your comments and it was fun
Comment from Douglas Paul
Pretty darned good for a first try. A nice muse on trying to write and your picture is really good and funny. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
Pretty darned good for a first try. A nice muse on trying to write and your picture is really good and funny. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
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Hi Douglas, Still learning the requirements for many styles and what all the poetry language means I just write how I feel it should sound but a bit light on the tecchnical side this time LOL however next one will be more precise bit enjoyed the challenge anyway Cheers
Comment from ciliverde
The image is so cute, "what rhymes with cat"? :)
It's am intriguing form, I like the example that Adewpearl uses...why not try it again?
Oh, she says iambic - emphasis on second syllable.
It looks
Like fun
But yet
'Tis hard :)
Carol
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
The image is so cute, "what rhymes with cat"? :)
It's am intriguing form, I like the example that Adewpearl uses...why not try it again?
Oh, she says iambic - emphasis on second syllable.
It looks
Like fun
But yet
'Tis hard :)
Carol
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
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Hi Carol ,Thanks for your review and I think I finally understand what iambic means so my next one will be more technically correct. It is not as easy as it looks and I am learning new things all the time so I do appreciate and now understand your comments. Had some fun with this one though. Cheers
Comment from Drew Delaney
This is great Chrissy. I am so glad you tried this. It is a good challenge for choosing the exact syllable count. Prepares one for the even more difficult syllable count forms. Bravo!!
Drew xx
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
This is great Chrissy. I am so glad you tried this. It is a good challenge for choosing the exact syllable count. Prepares one for the even more difficult syllable count forms. Bravo!!
Drew xx
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Hi Drew, yes I am alway up for a poetry challenge and saw this and though I would have a go not sure if the meter is all correct but I like it as I have written it . That is how it came out of my brain LOL ( however as you know my brain can go a bit haywrie sometimes Ha Ha ) Cheers again Christine
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Yes, me too! LOL
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
This is a cute one, these iambic monometers can be tricky because you have to keep with the da DUM sound with you write your lines so when starting yours you are out of meter. You might try this kind of rhythm
It's clear
that one
must try
so hard
to find
That type of thing. Let me know if you revise and I'll take another look
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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
This is a cute one, these iambic monometers can be tricky because you have to keep with the da DUM sound with you write your lines so when starting yours you are out of meter. You might try this kind of rhythm
It's clear
that one
must try
so hard
to find
That type of thing. Let me know if you revise and I'll take another look
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Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Hi Dawn of Tomorrow, Thanks very much for your review and helpful comments I will have another look and see if I need to change, I will bear this in mind for future ones also, so I appreciate you pointing this out to me ( learning all the time) Many Cheers to you
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Christine
= You did a great job with this prompt.
= Too cute a picture.
= I'm sure it isn't as it it may look.
= I think your brain would automatically conjure up three and four syllable words.
= Good luck in the contest.
* Keep Smilin' *
Jackie (*<*) Jax
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
Hi, Christine
= You did a great job with this prompt.
= Too cute a picture.
= I'm sure it isn't as it it may look.
= I think your brain would automatically conjure up three and four syllable words.
= Good luck in the contest.
* Keep Smilin' *
Jackie (*<*) Jax
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Hi Jackie, and thanks for your freat review and rating Isn't the Cat great I snapped it up as soon as I saw it .Thanks for your good luck wishes who knows ? Cheers Christine Ps Glad to be back LOL😃
Comment from Joy Graham
I think you did a super good job of this contest entry :) Well done for your first try. I think enjambment is the way to go with this poetry form, and you did just that. Best of luck to you, you may hold your head high with this effort.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
I think you did a super good job of this contest entry :) Well done for your first try. I think enjambment is the way to go with this poetry form, and you did just that. Best of luck to you, you may hold your head high with this effort.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Hi Joy Thanks very much for your encouraging words I will look up enjambment so I can see what you refer too. I am going to do a course in writing to learn all about the styles and poetry language and get a better understanding of what it all means. I have been learning heaps since joining FS and will have a try at many different styles, sometimes without knowing the depth required. ( I think I even have a Haiku down pat now LOL had never heard the term before FS) Once again thanks for your support Joy Cheers
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enjambment is where you carry a sentence across to the next line.
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Thank you Joy I will remember that and yes that is what I have done Many Cheers I will put that one away for later use. Christine 😃