Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is a really good short story for the book, Debbie. Your writing is concise, yet thorough, giving the reader details needed to understand the plot. Story flows well, characters are clear and believable leading to a surprise ending. Marilyn

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016

Thank you, my friend. Glad you enjoyed it~Debbie

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Well done Debbie, this is a great addition to the warehouse of horrors. These two sisters actually deserved one another. The ending was both a surprise and clever, good scribing my friend, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016

Thank you, my friend. Glad you enjoyed it~Debbie

reply by royowen on 16-Jan-2016

Most welcome

Comment from Lovinia

Excellent

Hi Debbie

Almost midnight, I guess just the right time to read your Tiny Tale of Terror. LOL Sounds a little like my relationship with my sister ... don't tell her, I just might end up with that knife ... well, that's my own tiny tale. Mwahahahaha!

"She hadn't been successful at getting them to work ... yet, but Catherine didn't know that.

My suggestion - "She hadn't been successful at getting them to work yet ... but Catherine didn't know that."

"Catherine bolted upright upon hearing her sister, and then seeing her hover by the bed." -- Fragmented sentence.

Fast paced and creepy ... I hate to think of the blood splatter ... sent shivers down my spine. Well done. Hugs - Lovi xoxo

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016

Thanks so much, Lovi. I did change these the other day after I first read this. If I would reply on first read, I wouldn't always be so far behind with these. Have a good day, my friend. Hugs~Debbie

reply by Lovinia on 16-Jan-2016

Never worry about being behind ... I'm much slower than you! LOL I would rather you write ... I 'hear' your responses in my mind anyway. It is very rare I find any edits or corrections in your work.

FYI - hahaha! I have actually written a Tiny Tale of Terror. A little hesitant to post ... it is awful in a blood thirsty kind of way. Mwahaha. Hugs - Lovi xoxo

Comment from JW

Excellent

Interesting story. However, part of it I don't get. How could it be a self-inflicted wound? Not to mention, what was a knife doing in the bathroom?

Thanks for sharing this, Debbie. JW

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 Comment Written 14-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016

Catherine stabbed herself when she saw how ugly she was. Don't you keep a knife in your bathroom? Just kidding. That part I can't explain. Have a good night, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Sisters who have to share a room can turn out to be disastrous at times, like this story where the younger sister pranks the older sister ending with the older sister killing herself.

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 Comment Written 14-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016

Thank you, my friend~Debbie