Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 " First, With Words"A collection of sonnets
30 total reviews
Comment from Gypsymooncat
I like this form, and after reading this marvellous effort, might try my hand at it! This is the second time today I've been inspired by someone's work on here, and I'm enjoying it immensely. I love the presentation of this too; the black and red works so well with that juicy, passionately EXCITING content lol! Good golly gosh, I was salivating while reading it hahaha. Nah ... well maybe a little wink wink! If this was a first effort by you, then methinks there should be more. Fantastic work! Cheers xoxoxoxoxoxoxox
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I like this form, and after reading this marvellous effort, might try my hand at it! This is the second time today I've been inspired by someone's work on here, and I'm enjoying it immensely. I love the presentation of this too; the black and red works so well with that juicy, passionately EXCITING content lol! Good golly gosh, I was salivating while reading it hahaha. Nah ... well maybe a little wink wink! If this was a first effort by you, then methinks there should be more. Fantastic work! Cheers xoxoxoxoxoxoxox
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
Comment from Pyrrho
The departure from iambic is a bit disruptive and does distract from the flow and from my reading pleasure. Than you maintained a pentameter meter was a surprise after you gave up on the poetic-foot requirement. Thus I give you the benefit of the doubt ... you did warn you readers of your departure from the norm.
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The departure from iambic is a bit disruptive and does distract from the flow and from my reading pleasure. Than you maintained a pentameter meter was a surprise after you gave up on the poetic-foot requirement. Thus I give you the benefit of the doubt ... you did warn you readers of your departure from the norm.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello Michael :)
What a classy romantic sonnet about lovemaking. I love it! First I thought it was for the fanstory crash contest. Gloria is awesome, she also helped me with a sonnet.
Good job!
Gypsy
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Hello Michael :)
What a classy romantic sonnet about lovemaking. I love it! First I thought it was for the fanstory crash contest. Gloria is awesome, she also helped me with a sonnet.
Good job!
Gypsy
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
Comment from seaglass
Great rhyme and the lento and sonnet styles work well for the sensual theme. I like ending poems with a couplet, it's like a summary sentence in a story. I've thought about Adewpearl and have wondered how she's doing.
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Great rhyme and the lento and sonnet styles work well for the sensual theme. I like ending poems with a couplet, it's like a summary sentence in a story. I've thought about Adewpearl and have wondered how she's doing.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow where did this come from?
Very nicely different from what I know about you and I am glad to know you are human too.
LOL
Nicely done with the descriptions and the flow
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Wow where did this come from?
Very nicely different from what I know about you and I am glad to know you are human too.
LOL
Nicely done with the descriptions and the flow
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
Comment from Glasstruth
Very sexy and sensual. Passion and the Human body speaks volumes where words are not needed, except in this poem. Great enjambment and flow throughout. Reads beautifully. Les
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Very sexy and sensual. Passion and the Human body speaks volumes where words are not needed, except in this poem. Great enjambment and flow throughout. Reads beautifully. Les
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, anything you and Gloria work on together...has to be nothing but perfection...you are two of the top writers on this site...along with Brooke...this has a little bit of both of you in it...and the mix is brilliant...every word delicious...so sensual....every women's dream...soft and tender...whispers of splendor...ok I'm pretty much melting here...LOL...congratulation to all three...so wonderfully written... beautifully felt...Luff Linda xxoo
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HI Michael, anything you and Gloria work on together...has to be nothing but perfection...you are two of the top writers on this site...along with Brooke...this has a little bit of both of you in it...and the mix is brilliant...every word delicious...so sensual....every women's dream...soft and tender...whispers of splendor...ok I'm pretty much melting here...LOL...congratulation to all three...so wonderfully written... beautifully felt...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
Comment from LIJ Red
Granted, poetry is supposed to sound different than backfence gossip or Katie
reviewing the news. But then one wants his image-filled words, rhyme and meter
to sound natural. The more rules you set, the harder this gets. Excellent job.
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Granted, poetry is supposed to sound different than backfence gossip or Katie
reviewing the news. But then one wants his image-filled words, rhyme and meter
to sound natural. The more rules you set, the harder this gets. Excellent job.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
Comment from Kingsland
This poem has good rhythm in its thoughts and poetic measures. It uses good poetic devices that are easy to read and understand. It also has an excellent rhyme scheme its phrases. I enjoyed reading this excellent piece of poetic art... John
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This poem has good rhythm in its thoughts and poetic measures. It uses good poetic devices that are easy to read and understand. It also has an excellent rhyme scheme its phrases. I enjoyed reading this excellent piece of poetic art... John
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a very sexual, sensual poem of lust and love. It has the strong emotion of one who is enjoying the one he/she loves.
I like the red writing to show the blood that is boiling within. It is also the color of love.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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This is a very sexual, sensual poem of lust and love. It has the strong emotion of one who is enjoying the one he/she loves.
I like the red writing to show the blood that is boiling within. It is also the color of love.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
