A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "With ...or Without You"Assorted poems of love
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Comment from Sankey
hi new friend. A great poem. Loved the picture. Very romantic until the end as if I am right it seems the writer is uncertain of the honesty of the one on whom she has sold her heart...in his eyes a question?
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2015
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hi new friend. A great poem. Loved the picture. Very romantic until the end as if I am right it seems the writer is uncertain of the honesty of the one on whom she has sold her heart...in his eyes a question?
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2015
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Hi there!
Thanks for stopping by and reading my humble offering :)
Always
Missy
Comment from TAB_that's me
Hi Missy. Great poem. Kind of a sorrowful love poem. Words of love never spoken and the person will always miss out on love.
Teresa
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2015
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Hi Missy. Great poem. Kind of a sorrowful love poem. Words of love never spoken and the person will always miss out on love.
Teresa
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2015
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T... Thanks hon for the always generous review... Luff ya!!
Missy
Comment from Mastery
Missy, this is truly worthy of six stars. Every single line is meaningful. I especially liked these in particular:
"But, my thoughts and heart strings
Are tied irrevocably to you...."
Bravo! Blessings. Bob
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Missy, this is truly worthy of six stars. Every single line is meaningful. I especially liked these in particular:
"But, my thoughts and heart strings
Are tied irrevocably to you...."
Bravo! Blessings. Bob
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Smilin!! Thanks for the review Bob... The 6 is icing after reading this review :)
Missy
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:) Bob
Comment from Dawn Munro
...sigh...I hope, fervently, that this beautiful poem is not biographical because the only things it's said that we regret are those times we didn't take a chance...(they don't know me and my past very well, is all I say to THAT)! LOL. But seriously gorgeous in every way, though so, so sad!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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...sigh...I hope, fervently, that this beautiful poem is not biographical because the only things it's said that we regret are those times we didn't take a chance...(they don't know me and my past very well, is all I say to THAT)! LOL. But seriously gorgeous in every way, though so, so sad!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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I am a real chicken chit, Dawn. I will talk innuendo's till the cow's come home but it's hard for me to really put myself out there.
Thanks for always coming to my rescue and know I love ya girlie :)
Missy
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Yeah, well, get over it. Life's short, and I love you too. Rejection won't kill you IF that's what happens, but my money is on you (unless he's a jerk). :))
Comment from Jay Squires
Ah-ha, so the question revolves around what it is she might see reflected in his eyes. Obviously it wouldn't be love or desire, would it? If it were that she would have no reason to bottle it up inside and not say her thoughts aloud.
One thing sure. The lady's got it bad, and that ain't good.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Ah-ha, so the question revolves around what it is she might see reflected in his eyes. Obviously it wouldn't be love or desire, would it? If it were that she would have no reason to bottle it up inside and not say her thoughts aloud.
One thing sure. The lady's got it bad, and that ain't good.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Hey you, I have missed ya lil butt!! Had to write something just to see ya name!!! How's that for perseverance :)
Thanks Jay for the review and smile.
Missy
Comment from Linda Engel
That is a most nerve racking feeling. I want to say I love you to someone but so afraid I will be rejected. It's like being love sick, having a crush, puppy love but so much more serious. This is a sweet poem and can hear you sighing as he walks by. Nice .
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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That is a most nerve racking feeling. I want to say I love you to someone but so afraid I will be rejected. It's like being love sick, having a crush, puppy love but so much more serious. This is a sweet poem and can hear you sighing as he walks by. Nice .
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Thanks, Linda. Thanks for reading and leaving this lovely review. I was just transported back to the 50's reading your work. :)
Missy
Comment from mfowler
I hope you appreciate the value of this poem, Missy. It shows the growth of your skill in a most positive light. The theme of unrequited love is strongly conveyed but it is in the delivery of this piece that I find the most to praise. Firstly, the stepped couplets are excellent visually and poetically. First line delivers and idea and then the second offers your immediate response to that idea. It provides a predictable and emotional rhythm that sets a poem apart. I liked your word choices a lot, this couplet being my favourite:
But, my thoughts and heart strings
Are tied irrevocably to you
There's a hint of 'proximate rhyme' in 'mind-design' that added a little to the rhythm of that section of the poem. Perhaps you may wish to explore a modest degree of that in other pieces.
All in all, I loved the shape and clarity of this piece. You seem to have done your editing homework on this.
Good one!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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I hope you appreciate the value of this poem, Missy. It shows the growth of your skill in a most positive light. The theme of unrequited love is strongly conveyed but it is in the delivery of this piece that I find the most to praise. Firstly, the stepped couplets are excellent visually and poetically. First line delivers and idea and then the second offers your immediate response to that idea. It provides a predictable and emotional rhythm that sets a poem apart. I liked your word choices a lot, this couplet being my favourite:
But, my thoughts and heart strings
Are tied irrevocably to you
There's a hint of 'proximate rhyme' in 'mind-design' that added a little to the rhythm of that section of the poem. Perhaps you may wish to explore a modest degree of that in other pieces.
All in all, I loved the shape and clarity of this piece. You seem to have done your editing homework on this.
Good one!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Thanks, Mark. Your review is one I have come to expect.
Missy
Comment from Dean Kuch
I remember a well received song by the band, U2, with the same title, Missy. Great song, and a fantastic poem as well.
There are few things that make someone feel worse than unrequited love. Even more frustrating is knowing someone, falling head-over-heels in love with them when you know full well it won't work out well in the end.
Many will tell you to follow your heart, not your head, in such matters. But I've found it's always best to follow a little of both.
Nicely done.
With admiration
~Dean :}
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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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I remember a well received song by the band, U2, with the same title, Missy. Great song, and a fantastic poem as well.
There are few things that make someone feel worse than unrequited love. Even more frustrating is knowing someone, falling head-over-heels in love with them when you know full well it won't work out well in the end.
Many will tell you to follow your heart, not your head, in such matters. But I've found it's always best to follow a little of both.
Nicely done.
With admiration
~Dean :}
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Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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True, Dean. I believe as you that it's better at times to just keep your own counsel. I would be devasted to know.
Thank you for reading and reviewing this lil work of mine.
Your biggest fan,
Missy
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'welcome, Missy.
Comment from JanPerry
It is exceptionally lovely. The resolution you have with someone, to stay by his side no matter what. It is very romantic and succinct.
I enjoy the colours which bring the eye to the young lady who adores someone.
But never be afraid to find out what they think of you. More than likely they are a fan of yours too!!
Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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It is exceptionally lovely. The resolution you have with someone, to stay by his side no matter what. It is very romantic and succinct.
I enjoy the colours which bring the eye to the young lady who adores someone.
But never be afraid to find out what they think of you. More than likely they are a fan of yours too!!
Well done!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Thank you ever so much, Jan for this lovely review. I am such a chicken when it comes to this...I will remain quiet and just adore from afar.
Blessings,
Missy
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Hi there, {Missy is also the name of my cat]
Just sayin. Yes I do this too. Ill be quiet, but sometimes I compliment them, and they love that.
Same problem as me I'm afraid.
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:) Maybe one day ... he will see this, and smile!
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Ah, the unacknowledged love interest. Very mysterious. I say, fear not! Let that special someone in on your secret. You could very well be pleasantly surprised. Good job on this free verse poem, Missy. You captured the inner thoughts of a woman in love!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Ah, the unacknowledged love interest. Very mysterious. I say, fear not! Let that special someone in on your secret. You could very well be pleasantly surprised. Good job on this free verse poem, Missy. You captured the inner thoughts of a woman in love!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
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Hi there sugga, thanks for stopping by and leaving this thought provoking review. I am too chicken...lol.
Always,
Missy
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Oh, just do it! You have everything to gain. If you say nothing at all, nothing will happen--guaranteed!