Christine's Poems
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Comment from Glasstruth
LOL. You really lost me here. Couldn't keep track of who loved who. Quite a merry go round. Love the rhyming and even though I got lost the poem is still a great limerick. Awesome! Les
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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LOL. You really lost me here. Couldn't keep track of who loved who. Quite a merry go round. Love the rhyming and even though I got lost the poem is still a great limerick. Awesome! Les
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thanks Glasstruth lol I even got lost too but thanks for your great review really appreciate your time and comments Cheers
Comment from LanceHill
I have to say this limerick blew my mind for a little while. I had to read it multiple times to see who loved who. This was read silently and aloud. It allowed my family a laugh. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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I have to say this limerick blew my mind for a little while. I had to read it multiple times to see who loved who. This was read silently and aloud. It allowed my family a laugh. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you Lance for reading my limerick ( even I got confused in the end lol ) but had fun thinking this up so glad you all got a laugh that was m aim Cheers
Comment from Eric1
Hi Mystery Author, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, This is a really well written double limerick which flows very well, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Hi Mystery Author, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, This is a really well written double limerick which flows very well, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Hi Eric thanks so much for reading and giving my limerick such a great review and rating. i had a bit of un with this so glad you like it thanks for the good luck wishes too Cheers
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It was a pleasure to review my friend.
Comment from Beejay
This certainly brought a smile to my face. I always enjoy a limeric and your notes were helpful and interesting.a good choice of artwork too. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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This certainly brought a smile to my face. I always enjoy a limeric and your notes were helpful and interesting.a good choice of artwork too. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you Beejay for stopping by and having a read of my limerick so glad you did and thanks for your great review Cheers
Comment from RYME4U
This is very well written. The humor id subtle and original. You have worded the confused relationship very well. This Limerick contest entry is great. Good luck
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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This is very well written. The humor id subtle and original. You have worded the confused relationship very well. This Limerick contest entry is great. Good luck
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Hello RYME4U thank you for reading and reviewing my limerick and for giving this great feedback and good luck wishes. Cheers
Comment from trimple
Hello there.
You have crafted a fun poem that has all the hallmarks of a limerick.
A short tale of an entangled love scenario.
Your rhyming is good although you use the same end rhyme with'Bill' in the first limerick. I'm not sure if this is acceptable according to the rule.
Re-edited...
Yup having the same rhyming end word is acceptable, so I have given an additional star with the proviso that you adhere to the
AABBA rhyming in the second limerick :)
Good luck anyway
kind regards
trimple
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Hello there.
You have crafted a fun poem that has all the hallmarks of a limerick.
A short tale of an entangled love scenario.
Your rhyming is good although you use the same end rhyme with'Bill' in the first limerick. I'm not sure if this is acceptable according to the rule.
Re-edited...
Yup having the same rhyming end word is acceptable, so I have given an additional star with the proviso that you adhere to the
AABBA rhyming in the second limerick :)
Good luck anyway
kind regards
trimple
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Hi trimple I appreciate your feedback for my limerick as I almost confused myself writing it lol but I hope it meets requirements .thanks for your review and advice Cheers
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LOL, yes I can see why :)
Well, at it stands, you will probably be disqualified...
The rhyming should be 'AABBA' but in the second limerick you have 'AABBB.' :)
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Hi have changed it, hope so in time I didnt realize my mistake until I reread it so thanks again for your advice. I( I did this late last night so probably a bit tired ) Cheers
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That's betterer :)
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Hi trimple again thanks for your helpful comments I hadn't realized that I had the wrong AABBA in the 2nd Limerick so hopefully I have corrected this now, so appreciate your call on this Cheers ( it is always great to get help )
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Hehe
Funny how we simply cannot see for looking sometimes :)
Looks good now...
I'm in this competition too.
May the best man/woman win...
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Yes good luck to you too Win lose or draw its always fun to have a go I will check out the others also Cheers
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a good limerick writing prompt entry. Certainly not the sort of poem to try and figure out after a few pints of the golden ale. A clever rhyme with an amusing tale. Well done for the entertaining read and good luck in the competition.
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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This is a good limerick writing prompt entry. Certainly not the sort of poem to try and figure out after a few pints of the golden ale. A clever rhyme with an amusing tale. Well done for the entertaining read and good luck in the competition.
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Hi PoemsOfDD. Thanks so much for your great review for my limerick .No could be a bit tricky after and ale or two ha ha but I was sober (I think) and had a bit of fun thinking this up .Cheers for the good luck wishes
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was great! Your second stanza made me laugh out loud. What a devious love rectangular (lol). Ben stole Jill from Bill to spite him, though his true love was Jen, and Jill was thrilled because she loved Ben! How very creative. I wish them all happiness though II suspect everyone will get shorted.
Excellent rhymes and just the right inflection for a Limerick which is hard to pull off.
I loved this entry, I think it will be among the top contenders, I wish you luck.
Love, Y.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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This was great! Your second stanza made me laugh out loud. What a devious love rectangular (lol). Ben stole Jill from Bill to spite him, though his true love was Jen, and Jill was thrilled because she loved Ben! How very creative. I wish them all happiness though II suspect everyone will get shorted.
Excellent rhymes and just the right inflection for a Limerick which is hard to pull off.
I loved this entry, I think it will be among the top contenders, I wish you luck.
Love, Y.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Wow Thank you yeltel for such a great and encouraging review for my limerick and glad you had a laugh. I was goong to try a third limerick but I think ai would have become to confused so I amd glad you liked this and you have made my day with your beaut 6 star rating Cheers
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Now with your latest edit your last line has 9 syllable. You have picked 8-8-5-5-8 count, now the last line has one extra syllable.
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Oh, please do forgive me. Your syllable count is correct. I've reviewed too many limericks in the past 24 hours (lol)
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Hi, not a problem I hope the other aren't as confusing lol Cheers