2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "5/7/5 (be more like a tree)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from Glasstruth
Yes, people should be grounded and still have flexibility. Love the metaphor that the tree represents. You see, one can write a meaning 5-7-5 poem. Great job! Good luck with the contest. Les
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Yes, people should be grounded and still have flexibility. Love the metaphor that the tree represents. You see, one can write a meaning 5-7-5 poem. Great job! Good luck with the contest. Les
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much Les, I appreciate your review. :)
Comment from honeytree
I like this very much
Yes I feel we should reach out
like a tree and share our love
within our world everywhere
and with our enemies as well.
Honeytree
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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I like this very much
Yes I feel we should reach out
like a tree and share our love
within our world everywhere
and with our enemies as well.
Honeytree
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much I appreciate your excellent review :)
Comment from Pantygynt
A fantastic pair of artwork pieces illustrate this 5-7-5 so exceptionally well, the apparent straightness of the bamboo contrasting with the beautiful curves of the ... ah can't identify those. But it is the bamboo that will bend to the typhoons blast while the mighty looking trees that i can't identify are more likely to be toppled. Those beautifully curving limbs I think have limited flexibility.
The personification in the philosophy though is pretty sound stuff.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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A fantastic pair of artwork pieces illustrate this 5-7-5 so exceptionally well, the apparent straightness of the bamboo contrasting with the beautiful curves of the ... ah can't identify those. But it is the bamboo that will bend to the typhoons blast while the mighty looking trees that i can't identify are more likely to be toppled. Those beautifully curving limbs I think have limited flexibility.
The personification in the philosophy though is pretty sound stuff.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much I appreciate your excellent review :)
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hmmm... I think I wouldn't mind being a tree - there's something majestic about a good specimen.
Nice metaphor here with the double whammy of stability and flexibility.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Hmmm... I think I wouldn't mind being a tree - there's something majestic about a good specimen.
Nice metaphor here with the double whammy of stability and flexibility.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much I appreciate your excellent review :)
Comment from mfowler
This had me worried for a moment with advice to be deeply grounded in the earth; seemed like after death. But, then I got your drift. Be firm and confident with who you are but remain flexible wherever it's necessary to be so. The metaphor is strong. The tree is well established as part of the theme and you have followed all technical requirements. Excellent work. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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This had me worried for a moment with advice to be deeply grounded in the earth; seemed like after death. But, then I got your drift. Be firm and confident with who you are but remain flexible wherever it's necessary to be so. The metaphor is strong. The tree is well established as part of the theme and you have followed all technical requirements. Excellent work. Best of luck.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much I appreciate your excellent review :)
Comment from ravenblack
Deeply grounded with flexible limbs- are you sure that this is not a tree hugger poem directed at the U.S. Congress lol? Seriously though, in this we should all emulate trees. Good 5-7-5 and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Deeply grounded with flexible limbs- are you sure that this is not a tree hugger poem directed at the U.S. Congress lol? Seriously though, in this we should all emulate trees. Good 5-7-5 and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much I appreciate your excellent review :)
Comment from LanceHill
Thank you for sharing. I envision a person grounded in their personal beliefs but still able to accept others for who they are. When we are able to do that, friendships bloom.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you for sharing. I envision a person grounded in their personal beliefs but still able to accept others for who they are. When we are able to do that, friendships bloom.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much I appreciate your excellent review :)
Comment from twinklepoems
You have met the format of this 5-7- 5. Great picture to accompany your poem. Good visual of a grounded tree with flexible limbs. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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You have met the format of this 5-7- 5. Great picture to accompany your poem. Good visual of a grounded tree with flexible limbs. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much I appreciate your excellent review :)
Comment from flowergl
Very well written . Extremely strong imagery. This piece is short on words, but very deep and insightful. Loved the art work.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Very well written . Extremely strong imagery. This piece is short on words, but very deep and insightful. Loved the art work.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much I appreciate your excellent review :)
Comment from seaglass
Both of these pictures are fascinating. There are many lessons to learn from nature and trees teach many of them. I also like that they start from such tiny beginnings to eventually become such giants. I also like that they grow as long as they live.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Both of these pictures are fascinating. There are many lessons to learn from nature and trees teach many of them. I also like that they start from such tiny beginnings to eventually become such giants. I also like that they grow as long as they live.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much I appreciate your excellent review :)