Christine's Poems
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Comment from Tessa Kay
Yes, I think we all would like to walk this road. It's a lovely picture.
Your poem is full of love of nature. I like the idea that no artist's brush can compete with nature's prose. Very nice.
One thing I stumbled over a bit, but maybe it's just artistic licence: present participle of show is shown, not showed. Maybe change it to normal past tense?
Enjoyed this poem. :)
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Yes, I think we all would like to walk this road. It's a lovely picture.
Your poem is full of love of nature. I like the idea that no artist's brush can compete with nature's prose. Very nice.
One thing I stumbled over a bit, but maybe it's just artistic licence: present participle of show is shown, not showed. Maybe change it to normal past tense?
Enjoyed this poem. :)
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Hi Tessa sorry my reply got lost just want to say thanks so much for your review and suggestions I hope I have corrected the tense Cheers for your lovely review and help Christine😀
Comment from Eric1
Hi Chrissy, this is a beautifully penned poem that just flows wonderfully from the mouth when read aloud, the rhythm is exquisite as is the rhyme and excellent meter my friend.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Hi Chrissy, this is a beautifully penned poem that just flows wonderfully from the mouth when read aloud, the rhythm is exquisite as is the rhyme and excellent meter my friend.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Hi Eric, Thank you very much for you great review amd rating for my poem I did enjoy the challenge of writing this a little different to some of my work, but I do enjoy the challenge of a good rhyme and meter so your comments has gladdened my heart so thanks heaps Cheers Christine😃
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from OnyxSapphire78
Beautiful poem! Great approach to this challenge.
Of new beginnings, tiny seeds were planted long ago
By loving hands so carefully that placed them in a row.
Nicely stated. What did this place look like before the gorgeous foliage? Makes me ponder.
From long ago when earth was bare, to now a colour spread
Thank you for sharing. This is a very lovely poem.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Beautiful poem! Great approach to this challenge.
Of new beginnings, tiny seeds were planted long ago
By loving hands so carefully that placed them in a row.
Nicely stated. What did this place look like before the gorgeous foliage? Makes me ponder.
From long ago when earth was bare, to now a colour spread
Thank you for sharing. This is a very lovely poem.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you OnyxSaphire78 for your great review and rating for my poem . I do enjoy writing and find these challenges good fun to have a go and so glad you found this a very lovely poem. With Cheers Christine😃
Comment from barkingdog
Your rhyming couplets are lovely. The compliment the picture perfectly. I like how you imagined how the sprouts grew in a row to eventually form the canopy.
'Each year have grown until at last, their canopy embrace
With branches strong, all reaching out, each other they do face. '
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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Your rhyming couplets are lovely. The compliment the picture perfectly. I like how you imagined how the sprouts grew in a row to eventually form the canopy.
'Each year have grown until at last, their canopy embrace
With branches strong, all reaching out, each other they do face. '
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you barkingdog for having a read and fiving me feeback with you lovely comments. sometimes the words just appear and seem to flow out so I am pleased you like it so with a big Cheers to you Christine😃
Comment from robyn corum
What a fun write! This was a great direction to go in and one I never considered: watching the trees grow from tiny saplings to mature ones! Good job!
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What a fun write! This was a great direction to go in and one I never considered: watching the trees grow from tiny saplings to mature ones! Good job!
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Hi Robyn yes this was a fun write and I will get a chance soon to read everyones poems which I am looking forward too. So thanks so much for your great comments Cheers Christine😃