Wet Eventually.
Bushfires, a part of life in Australia.15 total reviews
Comment from Alan K Pease
Your story is a realistic account of terror in the form of fire almost killing a family in the bush. Fortunately, they survive as well as their home. My only comment is that napalm and flame throwers might not have been used by the US and its allies since Vietnam. International law does not specifically outlaw its use. The US actually signed a UN protocol prohibiting its use in 2009 - 25 yrs after the UN adopted the resolution; my thought is the US didn't use it ahead of this date in Afghanistan. It was Obama first full day in office when he signed the protocol. I don't know about Australia, but I assume you were ahead of the US.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Your story is a realistic account of terror in the form of fire almost killing a family in the bush. Fortunately, they survive as well as their home. My only comment is that napalm and flame throwers might not have been used by the US and its allies since Vietnam. International law does not specifically outlaw its use. The US actually signed a UN protocol prohibiting its use in 2009 - 25 yrs after the UN adopted the resolution; my thought is the US didn't use it ahead of this date in Afghanistan. It was Obama first full day in office when he signed the protocol. I don't know about Australia, but I assume you were ahead of the US.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Hello my friend Alan. Thanks so much for reading. I don't like the style, clipped writing is a pain, I like descriptive work. Don't know about the war, threw it in for interest. Love, Kay.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully. I thoroughly enjoyed this, especially the crisp flow which served to enhance the overall tone of the entire piece. The ending was very well executed as you turned the fear into a window through which the little group found total peace and harmony. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. I thoroughly enjoyed this, especially the crisp flow which served to enhance the overall tone of the entire piece. The ending was very well executed as you turned the fear into a window through which the little group found total peace and harmony. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Hello my friend, So pleased you liked it. Not easy to clip the story to the bones, that was what they wanted for the contest. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Sasha
I so wish I had a 6 to give you for this. So much vivid imagery both physical and emotional. Marvelous work with this and a terrific entry for this contest. I sincerely wish you all the best. Superb work with this, I didn't see a single word that should be removed. Perfect just as it is.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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I so wish I had a 6 to give you for this. So much vivid imagery both physical and emotional. Marvelous work with this and a terrific entry for this contest. I sincerely wish you all the best. Superb work with this, I didn't see a single word that should be removed. Perfect just as it is.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Hello my friend, It wasn't easy to take it to the bare bones, not my style really. I got there in the end. Thanks so much. :-) XX Kay.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
This is a very well done piece, a moving story. Your skill is really commendable especially your active pace which drives the story quickly through out. I love your short sentences scheme. I am relieved with the happy ending of the story. Well done.
ola thomas
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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This is a very well done piece, a moving story. Your skill is really commendable especially your active pace which drives the story quickly through out. I love your short sentences scheme. I am relieved with the happy ending of the story. Well done.
ola thomas
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Hello Ola, The contest called for 'bare bones' taking the story right down to necessary words; not my style at all, a real challenge for me. Thanks so much for kind comments. :-) XX Kay.
Comment from Zue65
I love your story, a story of triumph and survival and your Dad is a real hero. His love for your Mom and three daughters and his struggle to look after 3 kids orphaned at a young age by their Mom killed in a fire car accident is presented well here and made us closer to the main character. An excellent write.
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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I love your story, a story of triumph and survival and your Dad is a real hero. His love for your Mom and three daughters and his struggle to look after 3 kids orphaned at a young age by their Mom killed in a fire car accident is presented well here and made us closer to the main character. An excellent write.
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thanks so much for reading and enjoying. It is fiction. But I am pleased you enjoyed. :-) Kay. XX