Christine's Poems
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Comment from Jackarrie
This is a very good entry into the contest I am not perfect. I can resonate with your flaw too. You have written your poem with rhyme and I love the humour. A good contender. Good luck Mary
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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This is a very good entry into the contest I am not perfect. I can resonate with your flaw too. You have written your poem with rhyme and I love the humour. A good contender. Good luck Mary
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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Thank you Mary for reading my poem and giving it a review and for your great comments about its construct . enjoyed writing this one I could have gone on and on re memory issues but probably couldn't affort the space lol Cheers
Comment from pharp
Excellent job in the penning of this poem I am sure I will not forget or maybe I will. I am in the same situation, I forget my children names and always say old well you know who you are. A poem written with much clarity, excellent rhyming and meter and a very smooth flow giving the reader a most enjoyable and easy read. I have read most of the entries, there are some very good ones and this is one of them. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings......................Portia
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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Excellent job in the penning of this poem I am sure I will not forget or maybe I will. I am in the same situation, I forget my children names and always say old well you know who you are. A poem written with much clarity, excellent rhyming and meter and a very smooth flow giving the reader a most enjoyable and easy read. I have read most of the entries, there are some very good ones and this is one of them. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings......................Portia
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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Thanks Portia, very much for your lovley review and comments about the meter and rhyme . this is very encouraging and appreciated. i am glad your enjoyed reading this and welcome to my world ha ha Cheers
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
G'day mate :)
I think you were not supposed to tell your name because it is a blind contest. The poem is well written. I like the rhythm and the rhyme. Good job!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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G'day mate :)
I think you were not supposed to tell your name because it is a blind contest. The poem is well written. I like the rhythm and the rhyme. Good job!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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Thanks Gypsy oh I must check re my name I hadn't realize I had disclosed that sorry I am usually careful about those things, however this time it must have slipped my mind ( apt for this title lol) but thanks for the review also Cheers
Comment from syrhey
This poem really resonates with me because I have so much in my brain that I can never remember anything either unless I put it in my organizer (or iphone). It reminds you as well that "forgetfulness" or "bad memory" is indiscriminate of age and it is actually quite a common or normal phenomenon. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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This poem really resonates with me because I have so much in my brain that I can never remember anything either unless I put it in my organizer (or iphone). It reminds you as well that "forgetfulness" or "bad memory" is indiscriminate of age and it is actually quite a common or normal phenomenon. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much syrhey for upur fabulous review and rating for my poem I am glad I struck accord with you, I have learn't to live with this and just acknowledge it as part of me. My friends and family think it a hoot at times. Still it is a normal phenomenon for a lot of us . appreciate your time and great comments Cheers
Comment from Nosha17
I think the glasses, keys scenarios we all experience a lot, we have busy lives and it is difficult to remember to put all the right things in the right place at the right time! Good touch of humour, excellent rhyming and well described elements of your imperfections. Most enjoyable and good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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I think the glasses, keys scenarios we all experience a lot, we have busy lives and it is difficult to remember to put all the right things in the right place at the right time! Good touch of humour, excellent rhyming and well described elements of your imperfections. Most enjoyable and good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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Thank you Nosha17 for your time to read this poem amf for your encouraging comments. Yes glasses and keys sometimes an issue still fun to have a go at oneself. appreciate your comments and good luck wishes Cheers
Comment from lancellot
I have a feeling it will only get worse with age, I know mine has. This a great poem, very funny and real. We've all been there and continue to be.
notes:
For [I]cannot read and get quite mad
- To be consistent, you added the 'I' in other places.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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I have a feeling it will only get worse with age, I know mine has. This a great poem, very funny and real. We've all been there and continue to be.
notes:
For [I]cannot read and get quite mad
- To be consistent, you added the 'I' in other places.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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thanks lancellot for your review and comments, to consider and yes it probably get worse with age but I am not too worried as it has always been bad lol Cheers
Comment from Cass Carlton
I can relate to this so well. At my age we call it having a seniors moment. I remember once walking around in the dark looking for the torch, guess what I used to light my way! fortunately for you your people are aware of this trait and make allowances. The Diary is a good idea, try putting notes up at eye level on the fridge or the dressing table mirror, or other convenient places , that does help, as I have found. This piece is good for a poke at one's self in fun. It has an appeal that I respond to. cheers Cass
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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I can relate to this so well. At my age we call it having a seniors moment. I remember once walking around in the dark looking for the torch, guess what I used to light my way! fortunately for you your people are aware of this trait and make allowances. The Diary is a good idea, try putting notes up at eye level on the fridge or the dressing table mirror, or other convenient places , that does help, as I have found. This piece is good for a poke at one's self in fun. It has an appeal that I respond to. cheers Cass
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Thanks so much Cass I enjoyed reading your review and had a smile at the torch episode. my kids just think its me so they do forgive ( but don't forget lol) but all in good fun. Alway ready to poke fun at myself so appreciate your thoughts too Cheers
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Memory should be a human multiple choice option. I too have several or your quirks, but how is it we NEVER forget what someone does to us, the indignities and the time place and moment it happened?
Great poem, and trust me, I understand.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Memory should be a human multiple choice option. I too have several or your quirks, but how is it we NEVER forget what someone does to us, the indignities and the time place and moment it happened?
Great poem, and trust me, I understand.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Thanks Spritual Echo for your great review and rating, My memory is not to bad at times better long term than short, just too busy I guess lol Cheers
Comment from Leineco
There's an undertone of frustration running quietly in the background that makes this poem poignant. We all have lapses, now and then, but this relentlessness seems to have pushed past endearing idiosyncrasy into occasionally regrettable. I think that is the power of this poem. . .the way it walks lightly with self- deprecating humor, but hints at human frailty being an unwelcome burden at times.
Nicely done :-)
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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There's an undertone of frustration running quietly in the background that makes this poem poignant. We all have lapses, now and then, but this relentlessness seems to have pushed past endearing idiosyncrasy into occasionally regrettable. I think that is the power of this poem. . .the way it walks lightly with self- deprecating humor, but hints at human frailty being an unwelcome burden at times.
Nicely done :-)
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Thank you Leineco for your review and comments. I seem to have had a bad short term memory all my life, just a bisy mind I guess. Like my poetry I can write it but can't recite it, unless I 'learn it' lol. however I have been in stage plays with amateur theatre and can remeber my lines and songs etc. and I always remember birthdays etc. but times my short term memory lets me down so I have strategies to remember now mostly they work. so appreciate your critique and Cheers