The Chantress of Williamsburg
Short Story15 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, great ghost story here, Mikey. I love the infusion of humour as it advances the story nicely and I also just love humour.
Couple of missing commas,
It's getting' dark and cold.
Linda began, (.) Oh, make a space for me to sing, of thee I do beseech". Punctuation junction
Home hell? (!)
"Perhaps, I haven't made myself clear" (,") Eleanor gazed deeply into Linda's eyes and whispered", (,") take me home now.
"My pleasure" (,") she said, and truth be told, it was.
All the best wishes to you in the contest. I always relish a well told ghost story, especially one that may possibly result in mayhem and bloodshed on date night. :-)
Gloria
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Ha, great ghost story here, Mikey. I love the infusion of humour as it advances the story nicely and I also just love humour.
Couple of missing commas,
It's getting' dark and cold.
Linda began, (.) Oh, make a space for me to sing, of thee I do beseech". Punctuation junction
Home hell? (!)
"Perhaps, I haven't made myself clear" (,") Eleanor gazed deeply into Linda's eyes and whispered", (,") take me home now.
"My pleasure" (,") she said, and truth be told, it was.
All the best wishes to you in the contest. I always relish a well told ghost story, especially one that may possibly result in mayhem and bloodshed on date night. :-)
Gloria
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
Comment from justafan
Comere Mikey and let me dry those tears...has the big bad reviewers hurt your wittle feelings...lol. I couldn't resist hon.
This is certainly a good entry to this contest. I found nothing to crit but...I don't crit very well...lol.
Suffice it to say...I love it!!
Always,
Missy
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Comere Mikey and let me dry those tears...has the big bad reviewers hurt your wittle feelings...lol. I couldn't resist hon.
This is certainly a good entry to this contest. I found nothing to crit but...I don't crit very well...lol.
Suffice it to say...I love it!!
Always,
Missy
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Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
Comment from Zinnia48
This is really riveting! I was engaged from the beginning to the end! You've always had a knack for dialogue, and this gift continues in the story. The story itself was original. However, I didn't "get" the last line. How does the fact that it's date night fit in? Are the spirits going to be friends with or without benefits? I'm always glad to be able to read one of your stories, and I wish you luck. I think you have a great chance to win (but maybe rethink that last line....)Caroline
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This is really riveting! I was engaged from the beginning to the end! You've always had a knack for dialogue, and this gift continues in the story. The story itself was original. However, I didn't "get" the last line. How does the fact that it's date night fit in? Are the spirits going to be friends with or without benefits? I'm always glad to be able to read one of your stories, and I wish you luck. I think you have a great chance to win (but maybe rethink that last line....)Caroline
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
Comment from country ranch writer
SOME PEOPLE CAN REACH BEYOND THE GRAVE ONE NIGHT A YEAR AND THAT IS NEVER UNDER ESTIMATE THE POWERS OF THE UNKNOWN ON HALLOWEEN
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SOME PEOPLE CAN REACH BEYOND THE GRAVE ONE NIGHT A YEAR AND THAT IS NEVER UNDER ESTIMATE THE POWERS OF THE UNKNOWN ON HALLOWEEN
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Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
This was an extremely well told and entertaining tale. I felt it was complete although I can see tons of possibilities here for future stories. This is rich ground you have set up. This could win!!
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This was an extremely well told and entertaining tale. I felt it was complete although I can see tons of possibilities here for future stories. This is rich ground you have set up. This could win!!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015