Comment from Taylor Muhaarib

Excellent

Really nice haikus. Good job following the requirements of the first letter of the words.. You painted a really descriptive picture of that warm day, even though you could only use so few words.
Nice job.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

Thank you very much for your review and kind words. :)

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

All of these are perfect in their own right. Each paints a picture of a moment in nature. Together, they can also describe and rain storm. I prefer that the bird of paradise not be drowned.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

Thank you very much for the review. The bird of paradise's ----mating call was drowned- the mating call, not the bird LOL I guess drowning the bird would be a permanent birth control LOL

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

I like your fist two haiku- very serene. But that last one just sticks out, the tone completely different from the other two, which seem more linked. Still, a good entry and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015

Thank you :)

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

I am not an expert on haiku, and so glance at the prompt and the general layout,
and if it's close, and makes sense at all, I give the short ones an excellent. I can't
tell a classic great Haiku, from everyday ones. To me, this suite is excellent.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015

Thank you :)

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

very well done and you made this come to life and i can picture this in my mine and it looks so stunning a well penned poem and you did amazing job with it and it was a pleasure

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015

Thank you very much for your feedback and excellent review. :)

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

I have checked this sequence of haiku for compliance and, as far as I can see it complies with the comprehensive set of rules. The satori ah hahs build over the three leaving the best till last. Yes I love that because it really is a different way of looking at water.

Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015

Thank you very much for your feedback and excellent review. :)

Comment from Delahay

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poems and imagining a warm day by a cool spring with the water flowing by with a soothing sound. Then the rainy spring day with the water filling the creek under the willows. Then I have to feel sorry for the poor bird whose mating call is drowned out by the rain.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words :)

Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr

Excellent

Hello poet friend
I enjoyed your poem, the images it raised in the imagination of the reader. My best to you in the weiting prompt.
I enjoyed, Loyd

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words :)

reply by Loyd C. Taylor, Sr on 24-Sep-2015

My pleasure, Loyd

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Veee--rrreee nicely done!

your first and third haiku are my favorites - (if you care!) *smile* I love the zen picture of the first one and find the birth control image in the third quite amusing!! (though I imagine the birds do NOT! ) hahahahha

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words :)

Comment from MM lives on :)

Excellent

Hello poet,

Nice job on all three of these little gems. I like the satire and metaphor of the last one with drowning and birth control used effectively. Maybe a picture would add to the effect.

Well done!

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words :) I would love to add a picture but it is against the contest rules.