The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "My First Paid Holiday - I Leave JSJ"Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
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Comment from judiverse
I do like your style! You know how to connect with the readers in your folksy style. Excellent details, and you bring them in with flair, so they really seem personal. Your feelings about your dad and mother come through, as well. You were young when you were making all those decisions about work and travel, etc. Great work! judi
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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I do like your style! You know how to connect with the readers in your folksy style. Excellent details, and you bring them in with flair, so they really seem personal. Your feelings about your dad and mother come through, as well. You were young when you were making all those decisions about work and travel, etc. Great work! judi
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Thanks Sis. Big REVIVE Certificate review coming real soon. More pictures and more dialogue at Jay Squires especially suggested. I am putting one more new added chapter up later today as well. Things I forgot when I came through last time. hang around ok! Thanks again.
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You're very welcome. I'm not too big on using dialogue a lot in biographical writing. If you do, you're probably just making it up. I certainly don't remember other people's words. judi
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Yeah well if zI remember something I will use it folks have become obsessed with fiction and dialogue. But I saw something on here to confirm Non Fiction is Good so go figure.👍
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Hi, Sankey. Actually, I didn't miss dialogue in your writing. Seems to me, it becomes fiction if you do that. Your stories are lively enough, anyway. judi
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Thanks I appreciate your thoughts. Adding more pictures and URL Links where available maybe that will suffice people seem to want so much fiction...however I was pleased to see a new class or something in here for writing NON Fiction and praising Non Fiction so pleased. Wanna hear a weird story...ONLY ON FACE BOOK my keyboard won't type a, s, d I think f works, but they are ok everywhere else go figure.
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You're welcome. I haven't taken any courses on FS, but might be interesting. judi
Comment from mermaids
I enjoyed reading your story and the time you spent with your father. Your father sounds like a character, good with working but not with managing money. The pics are great and fit the story.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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I enjoyed reading your story and the time you spent with your father. Your father sounds like a character, good with working but not with managing money. The pics are great and fit the story.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Hi mermaids not sure we have met before. I have one more left outr chapter I am adding today then in the next few weeks the whole book is coming up for a REVIVE Certificate review. hope you will stick around and thanks for your comments.
Comment from Ben Colder
I find this story interesting. It acquaints the reader with Austrailia and you. People here in America who never travel enjoy learning first-hand advenatures. I fine nothing wrong.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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I find this story interesting. It acquaints the reader with Austrailia and you. People here in America who never travel enjoy learning first-hand advenatures. I fine nothing wrong.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Thanks bro. I had forgotten about this important part of my life. The first time staying with my father after all the years he was away. Getting ready for the big REVIVE Certificate review of the entire book. Hope I don't find any new chapters to add in the meant time.
Comment from CR Delport
Luckily I see I didn't miss too much of this, and will try and catch up over the weekend. As always, it is an interesting read. Good job.
Take care.
Christelle.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Luckily I see I didn't miss too much of this, and will try and catch up over the weekend. As always, it is an interesting read. Good job.
Take care.
Christelle.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Hi Christelle if you like there are a couple of chapters after this you might be interested in as alterations have been made and more pictures are being added through out. The BIG REVIVE Certificate complete book review is coming real soon. thanks for coming by.
Comment from royowen
It would have been uncomfortable spending time with your dad who left you when you were eight years old, particularly sicnr he was living defacto. Your introduction to gambling worked out well for, perhaps you should have been a full time gambler! Amazed you spent 8 years with your father before you went home to your mum. Fascinating episode Geoff, blessings, Roy.
Typo : Joyce could manage(d) ten at a time.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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It would have been uncomfortable spending time with your dad who left you when you were eight years old, particularly sicnr he was living defacto. Your introduction to gambling worked out well for, perhaps you should have been a full time gambler! Amazed you spent 8 years with your father before you went home to your mum. Fascinating episode Geoff, blessings, Roy.
Typo : Joyce could manage(d) ten at a time.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Sorry Bro did I give that impression about 8 years. I must correct that. Only spent a couple of weeks with him. It was 8 years between the time he left us and when we first saw him again when I was 15 I think. Thanks for coming by. I will clear that up. Stick around the big REVIVE Certificate review is coming real soon. With more pictures and more dialogue.
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I ereally appreciate you bringing the 8 year thing to my attention. I have now clarified and added a little more in there if you would like to read it again. Thanks Bro Lord Bless.
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Well done, I thought it a long time well done, Roy.
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Ok
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That's put it right well done
Comment from Bryana
I'm sorry I haven't read other chapters. This one was
excellent. Upon reading about your father reminded
me about mine who I didn't see for many years, didn't
help my mother with a penny to raise me. I had no
feelings for him whatsoever.
You are a very good writer, I enjoyed reading this
chapter.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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I'm sorry I haven't read other chapters. This one was
excellent. Upon reading about your father reminded
me about mine who I didn't see for many years, didn't
help my mother with a penny to raise me. I had no
feelings for him whatsoever.
You are a very good writer, I enjoyed reading this
chapter.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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hi Bryana, can't remember if we met before. Stick around the big REVIVE Certificate review is coming on the entire book real soon. Just fixing up some more pictures and more dialogue I have been asked for on the rest of it. There is more on the subject you mentioned about no support from Dad for Mum either. but I won't spoil it.Thanks again.
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hi Bryana, can't remember if we met before. Stick around the big REVIVE Certificate review is coming on the entire book real soon. Just fixing up some more pictures and more dialogue I have been asked for on the rest of it. There is more on the subject you mentioned about no support from Dad for Mum either. but I won't spoil it.Thanks again.
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We haven' met, that's why I'm so glad I read your work today. I write more poetry than prose, not very good at it.
Good luck with your writing.
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just had another review from an old friend he got the impression I stayed with dad for eight years. have to go back and clarify it was only a couple of weeks I stayed with him.
Comment from c_lucas
The only thing constant in this world is change. Your post is very well written with a smooth Flow of words making for a good read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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The only thing constant in this world is change. Your post is very well written with a smooth Flow of words making for a good read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Thanks Bro hope I don't think of anymore chapters to add before the big REVIVE Certificate review coming soon with more pics and more dialogue.
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Thanks Bro hope I don't think of anymore chapters to add before the big REVIVE Certificate review coming soon with more pics and more dialogue.
Comment from Jay Squires
Wow, Geoff, this is some really good stuff! It was very revealing about your relationship with your father as a young child compared to when you were 18 and your dad apparently wanted to mend fences.
I didn't quite know what "housie night meant, but I gathered it was a kind of gambling situation where you got kind of lucky.
Anyway, Geoff, it's like coming home to a good friend reading your post again.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Wow, Geoff, this is some really good stuff! It was very revealing about your relationship with your father as a young child compared to when you were 18 and your dad apparently wanted to mend fences.
I didn't quite know what "housie night meant, but I gathered it was a kind of gambling situation where you got kind of lucky.
Anyway, Geoff, it's like coming home to a good friend reading your post again.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Thanks mate promise to get back to your stuff. Been going thorugh all the old chapters getting ready for the big REVIVE Certificate review of the whole thing and realizing this had to be included PLUS PICTURES...and as you requested we are working on the dialogue, promise. Stick around.
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Thanks mate promise to get back to your stuff. Been going thorugh all the old chapters getting ready for the big REVIVE Certificate review of the whole thing and realizing this had to be included PLUS PICTURES...and as you requested we are working on the dialogue, promise. Stick around.
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Will do, my friend.
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Thanks mate. Yeah Bingo is like Housie slightly different I think. I have decided to put one more new chapter up so you will see that later today. Hopefully no more additions before I do the big REVIVE Certificate Review in a week or two for the whole enchaladas as I think you guys say.
Comment from vapros
Chapter 9 should certainly have earned a place in this story you are telling. Without wasting words you described an early holiday and an account of the domestic situation in your father's house. Well done.
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Chapter 9 should certainly have earned a place in this story you are telling. Without wasting words you described an early holiday and an account of the domestic situation in your father's house. Well done.
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Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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thanks new friend. I think we have met before but not sure. Stick around for the big REVIVE Certificate review of the complete book coming real soon. This book has kind of grown like Topsy. I first put it all up all over the place. Then I re-did it more sequentially as things occurred. Now I am adding pictures or more of, and dialogue as much as I can as I have been requested.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Geoff
_ I definitely need to catch up on your dad, so I'll have to go back and check it out soon.
_ Nice details, and you always have good pix too.
_ Nice chapter.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*;*)
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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Hi, Geoff
_ I definitely need to catch up on your dad, so I'll have to go back and check it out soon.
_ Nice details, and you always have good pix too.
_ Nice chapter.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*;*)
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Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Thanks mate. First cab off the rank. hang about till the big revive Certificate thing gets up. I hope I don't have too many more new chapters to add, Sigh! :(
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I'll be watching for them. (*<*)