A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Love in the Moonlight"Assorted poems of love
17 total reviews
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Missy
I don't know about anyone else, but I am a lover of moonlit nights and making love this way seems so right. You caught the mood with the artwork and the delicious font
Bear
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2015
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Hey there Missy
I don't know about anyone else, but I am a lover of moonlit nights and making love this way seems so right. You caught the mood with the artwork and the delicious font
Bear
Comment Written 11-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2015
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Hi there you :)
Thanks for the lovely review and the confidence booster of the 6. Know that I am smiling!!!
Always,
Missy
Comment from Jay Squires
You go girl! You'll get that guy yet. Or is this another one?
Your poetry pulses with young, enduring, passionate love.
I appreciated the line: "raw emotions held in check by a thread," and the breaking of that thread can be a blessing or a curse.
I may have teased you a tad, Missy, but your love poetry has a special place in my heart.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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You go girl! You'll get that guy yet. Or is this another one?
Your poetry pulses with young, enduring, passionate love.
I appreciated the line: "raw emotions held in check by a thread," and the breaking of that thread can be a blessing or a curse.
I may have teased you a tad, Missy, but your love poetry has a special place in my heart.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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I have a smile on my face that Ajax won't take off!!! You have been such a big part of my growth here in FanStory. I have come to see you as a dear, dear friend, Jay.
It pleases me when you tease
Each word enriches beyond measure
Smiles of the heart that you give with such ease
Every single one, please know that I treasure
Always your biggest fan,
Missy
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Ohhhhhh, I love having a poem written for me. Thanks, dear Missy.
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I was being VERY reserved...lol
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, justafan, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the love that excelled from a tender touch to a sweet embrace to a passionate encounter. I enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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this is an excellent write, justafan, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the love that excelled from a tender touch to a sweet embrace to a passionate encounter. I enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 10-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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Hi Jax, thank you so much, my friend. I learn something every day here from such fantastic writers as you :)
Thank you again for the review and being a friend :).
Always,
Missy
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is a well written poem. I could feel her anticipation. I enjoyed the word choices. The line where she sees him standing in the moonlight - might want to work on cutting that back a bit - it stands out visually in the poem because it is longer than the other lines. And syllable count too - hurts the flow a bit. But overall a wonderful poem. Great job.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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This is a well written poem. I could feel her anticipation. I enjoyed the word choices. The line where she sees him standing in the moonlight - might want to work on cutting that back a bit - it stands out visually in the poem because it is longer than the other lines. And syllable count too - hurts the flow a bit. But overall a wonderful poem. Great job.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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I will see what I can do Michael :) Thank you for this kind and informative review. I really appreciate the suggestion and will work on it.
Always,
Missy
Comment from TAB_that's me
Hi Missy, nice free verse love poem. I have a couple of suggestions:
It is better enjambment (flow) if you don't end a line in words like and, if, with, but. It reads better if you start the next line with them.
The blanket of our love is spread and
I stand before you beginning to shiver with
(The blanket of our love is spread
and I stand before yo beginning to shiver
with heart pounding....)
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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Hi Missy, nice free verse love poem. I have a couple of suggestions:
It is better enjambment (flow) if you don't end a line in words like and, if, with, but. It reads better if you start the next line with them.
The blanket of our love is spread and
I stand before you beginning to shiver with
(The blanket of our love is spread
and I stand before yo beginning to shiver
with heart pounding....)
Comment Written 10-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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T, I will see about changes when I get home... Helping daughter pack.
Thanks for this great review hon and the helpful suggestions :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from Neonewman
Another well crafted piece you have delivered young lady! Either you are really awesome in the romance department craft or you are truly in love. Either way, it makes for great reading material.
God bless!
Steve
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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Another well crafted piece you have delivered young lady! Either you are really awesome in the romance department craft or you are truly in love. Either way, it makes for great reading material.
God bless!
Steve
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Comment Written 10-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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Lol, Steve. I dream ALOT!!! I am delighted to no end that you see my work as you do :)
Always,
Missy
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Dreams make for great inspiration young lady!
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Dreams make for great inspiration young lady!
Comment from anabellapongasi
Great imagery in this sweet romantic love poem. The setting described is so perfect for love and passion. This is very well written in a free-flowing free verse.
Blessings,
Anabella
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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Great imagery in this sweet romantic love poem. The setting described is so perfect for love and passion. This is very well written in a free-flowing free verse.
Blessings,
Anabella
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Comment Written 10-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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Hi Anabelle, thanks for the lovely feedback :)
Always
Missy
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you're welcome:)
Anabella