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Comment from barbara.wilkey
We go to San Antonio often, but probably not for the same reason. LOL We always have fun there. The last time we watched a Spurs game. I enjoyed reading your post and am waiting for the next installment, February 6, 1962.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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We go to San Antonio often, but probably not for the same reason. LOL We always have fun there. The last time we watched a Spurs game. I enjoyed reading your post and am waiting for the next installment, February 6, 1962.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Thanks, Barbara. Glad it resonated with you. The adventures continue soon.
Comment from Sis Cat
Caught my eye and my imagination just by your mention of Joyce as I am reading and rereading his "Dubliners" now. I also read "The Three Musketeers" for the first time last year. It pays to be well read because it not only improves my writing but because I can understand and appreciate your writing more.
The twists and turns that memory take is baffling as you show here. We remember some things but not others. Your r like ins and journal entries riveted me. I may want to do something with my own journals.
Thank you for staring this engaging post.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Caught my eye and my imagination just by your mention of Joyce as I am reading and rereading his "Dubliners" now. I also read "The Three Musketeers" for the first time last year. It pays to be well read because it not only improves my writing but because I can understand and appreciate your writing more.
The twists and turns that memory take is baffling as you show here. We remember some things but not others. Your r like ins and journal entries riveted me. I may want to do something with my own journals.
Thank you for staring this engaging post.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Andre, my posting is not complete without a Sis Cat rendering. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I just found out how to imbed pictures, so I got carried away there.
Comment from Dawn Munro
"The whole idea of this retrospective was..." << did you know that your text size changes in this paragraph?
One other (very minor-?) thing: I had a reputable publishing house's editor take time to take the dreaded red pen through my manuscript for my novel, "Empty Cradle, Empty Arms" (which has since been revised, and will STILL be polished). The single biggest criticism was my overuse of exclamation marks. She said they should only be used for very short and emphatic sentences, like "Stop!" or "Watch out!" Just food for thought...?
I guess I don't follow instructions well about how to give a "sandwich" review, but I like to get the suggestions down as I go - the flowery stuff is less important when it's a writer you know has the skill - and man, do you have the skill! *smile*
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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"The whole idea of this retrospective was..." << did you know that your text size changes in this paragraph?
One other (very minor-?) thing: I had a reputable publishing house's editor take time to take the dreaded red pen through my manuscript for my novel, "Empty Cradle, Empty Arms" (which has since been revised, and will STILL be polished). The single biggest criticism was my overuse of exclamation marks. She said they should only be used for very short and emphatic sentences, like "Stop!" or "Watch out!" Just food for thought...?
I guess I don't follow instructions well about how to give a "sandwich" review, but I like to get the suggestions down as I go - the flowery stuff is less important when it's a writer you know has the skill - and man, do you have the skill! *smile*
Comment Written 05-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much, Dawn! I appreciate your passing on what your Editor told you. The three things I tend to overdo are !, ..., & --. But there are many more to add to the list. It's what I'm here for.
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Me too, except the & - now hyphens...(LOL)
Comment from Naxsc
My God, couldn't help but laugh out loud. The Prof. O'Dwyer's novel in the closet, three musketeers and the aptitude tests and the retrospective on why you left in the first place. Charming piece of work.
I am eager to know what happened to Betty though. Do give me a heads-up if you are going to be writing on Betty. (hilarious)
Keep writing more!
All the best!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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My God, couldn't help but laugh out loud. The Prof. O'Dwyer's novel in the closet, three musketeers and the aptitude tests and the retrospective on why you left in the first place. Charming piece of work.
I am eager to know what happened to Betty though. Do give me a heads-up if you are going to be writing on Betty. (hilarious)
Keep writing more!
All the best!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Thank you for reading and for enjoying. That means a lot to me. Betty is a minor player in the post. Not to Marty. He went on to marry her and did the dishes for the first 20 or so years of their marriage since she was allergic to dish soap. I have another post on page one, if you're interested.
Comment from kiwijenny
I don't know what you wanted to tell us .
Is it that memory circulates and is circular?
Is it not to trust that memory completely?
So you started a creative writing class and pooled your money to do it
Thanks
God bless
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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I don't know what you wanted to tell us .
Is it that memory circulates and is circular?
Is it not to trust that memory completely?
So you started a creative writing class and pooled your money to do it
Thanks
God bless
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Hey, Jenny, thanks. The retrospective comes from the fact that the entry he made in his journal was from San Antonio. He is remembering back to how it all began, first of all in the creative writing class which was just before they went to San Antonio. Where the confusion may have arisen was I started with the confusion over whose idea it was to pool their money. Then there was a flashback to Marty and my joining the Air Force. which jogged my memory as to whose idea it had been. Now I'm confused! Thanks for reading, Jenny. Next chapter will be more straightforward.
Comment from ravenblack
Memory is a funny thing. If I had to remember the names of "brushes with greatness" or recall exactly how I wound-up where, I'd be hard-pressed to do it. Your paragraph about thinking ourselves immortal- so true. We all thought ourselves little Keroacs. And why do I get the feeling that Betty is your wife? Looking forward to more!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Memory is a funny thing. If I had to remember the names of "brushes with greatness" or recall exactly how I wound-up where, I'd be hard-pressed to do it. Your paragraph about thinking ourselves immortal- so true. We all thought ourselves little Keroacs. And why do I get the feeling that Betty is your wife? Looking forward to more!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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No, Betty ended up being Marty's wife. They're still married. Thanks Ed for reading. Glad you picked up on the one part that had any philosophical significance to it. The rest was just memory hurl.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting post that the author has created with this piece of work. I did a creative writing course too, but it was with an inline college. I am studying for a degree now. I was interested to hear about your Irish tutor because I am Irish too and I have been away from home for twenty years now. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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This is yet another interesting post that the author has created with this piece of work. I did a creative writing course too, but it was with an inline college. I am studying for a degree now. I was interested to hear about your Irish tutor because I am Irish too and I have been away from home for twenty years now. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Actually my Irish teacher was very inspiring. It's a shame that what we picked up as effeminacy kept us from getting to know someone who was quite lonely. And it was never proven that he was gay.
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Very interesting
Comment from Christof McTarnahan
I liked where you are going with this, The dialogue was crisp, and the characters have a unique personality. I am going to go back and read more chapters to get a better feel of the situation. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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I liked where you are going with this, The dialogue was crisp, and the characters have a unique personality. I am going to go back and read more chapters to get a better feel of the situation. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Well, Christof, this IS the first chapter, so what feel you wanted you may not have got. Try the next one, though. I think you'll enjoy it as well. Meanwhile, thanks, friend.
Comment from His Grayness
So far soooo good, at least six worth! The story is gripping and keeps the reader trolling for the next pink fish so you have to give this a true thumbs up! This is a writer that is clearly gifted and offers genuine "capture" in his delivery. I just does not get any better than that for an author! Great job Jay! His Grayness: Vance
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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So far soooo good, at least six worth! The story is gripping and keeps the reader trolling for the next pink fish so you have to give this a true thumbs up! This is a writer that is clearly gifted and offers genuine "capture" in his delivery. I just does not get any better than that for an author! Great job Jay! His Grayness: Vance
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Vance, you are SOOOOOOO kind with your words. Your words were the equivalent of a seven. And to get six stars as well, and this late in the week. Mine were gone by Tuesday.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Why did I like reading your blog about you and your 2 pals
You called the Three Musketeers.
Yes reminded me of Stan and his 2 friends how they stuck together like glue until each went their own separate ways
The part of your blog that really got me was like Stan
in his case was only his Mother-
the reason why we left the well-cushioned security of our respective moms' and dads' homes in the first place and launched out into the unknown where no one knew, cared or even believed that we were immortal, and only our parents knew it.
We were to discover it, in our own singular souls, as all of us, singularly, must.
sorry I used up my reserved 6 ratings.
Gert
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Why did I like reading your blog about you and your 2 pals
You called the Three Musketeers.
Yes reminded me of Stan and his 2 friends how they stuck together like glue until each went their own separate ways
The part of your blog that really got me was like Stan
in his case was only his Mother-
the reason why we left the well-cushioned security of our respective moms' and dads' homes in the first place and launched out into the unknown where no one knew, cared or even believed that we were immortal, and only our parents knew it.
We were to discover it, in our own singular souls, as all of us, singularly, must.
sorry I used up my reserved 6 ratings.
Gert
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Gert, I know I answered this, but thanks again. And, don't worry about the six stars. How anyone keeps them past Tuesday is a mystery to me. Thanks again for reading.
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Good so I won't worry when I cannot give you a 6
Now the same goes for me ( I won't fret) .
Gert
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Deal!