Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This has to be the best abecedarian that I have read. It is so natural that I honestly did not realise what it was until I read the note, after reading the poem. Mostly with these way out forms it is the form that strikes one first and the content struggles along clumsily to fit the form, but you have produced a beautiful celebration of your little boy's birth and then, and only then, I realise that you have followed a set form that is in itself quite challenging.

Good job he had a grandad called Xavier though, wasn't it!

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015

Thanks you Pantygynt for your great comments for my First time abecerdarian. I thought I would try one of these and due to the challenge I thought Of Xavier and this is what was created so I do appreciate your encouraging review . He is a lovely baby too Cheers

Comment from robyn corum

Exceptional

Wow. As I read this poem I thought to myself how sweet it was, although for a free-style poem it was a tiiiiinnnyy bit awkward in just a few places. (But that's in my humble -unlearn-ed opinion!) THEN I reached the name, Xavier Francis, and it hit me that this was an ABCDenarian Poem!

OMS, blind artist!

NOBODY, but nobody, can pull one off that long!

Actually, as I'm sitting here writing this, it occurs to me that you deserve a higher rating than the one I was planning! I'm just so blooming selfish with my sixes! But you're wrangling this one from me -- is the poem perfect? No, probably not -- but for this form, on this site, it's pretty darn close! *smile*

Great job!!!

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Wow robyn corum I am blown away by your review and thank you so much for you lovely comments and your Six Star rating . When writing this I wasn't sure how it would go but kept going and hoped it would sound Ok and meet the contest requirement as well so I am so pleased you thought it close to the mark . So do appreciate your feedback smile back Cheers

reply by robyn corum on 28-Aug-2015

My friend, if I could have given you EIGHT STARS I probably would have~! I am never EVER surprised. (Well, practically never.) You did BIG.

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thank you so much so thrilled

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

I thought this was a great free verse poem and never even realized it was in alphabetical order until I got to the bottom and saw the Xavier, You, and Zip. Nice.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thank you Bill for your time to read my Poem for this contest and for your review and rating . It was an interesting challenge but the subject for me hopefully conveyed the message intended .appreciate your time Cheers

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi mystery author, This is a really good entry for this particular competition, A wonderful and very clever free verse entry on the recent birth of your baby, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Hi Eric1 I am so so pleased you liked my poem and thought it a clever free verse . The baby is lovely and is a long awaited one of a friends daughter and to see the happiness on their faces was inspirational and allowed me to write this. So thanks for your best of luck wishes too Cheers

reply by Eric1 on 29-Aug-2015

It was a pleasure to review my friend.

reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015

Thanks so much

Comment from Tessa Kay

Excellent

This is sooo cute, and it flows effortlessly. Was wondering what you would do with the X. Well done.
One little thing: Mothers promise to you - Mother's promise to you.
Very much enjoyed this poem. All the best in the contest :)

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks you Tessa for your review and comments I will fix up mothers so thanks for that. Appreciate your time to read this with thanks Cheers

Comment from AnnieDawn

Exceptional

I loved the excellent way you have so easily carried this theme through the free verse alphabet poem. I had to keep checking to see that you were actually following a poetry form. That is how easily your poem flowed. You deserve six stars on this creation. Great job.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Wow AnnieDawn I am so thrilled you liked this so much. Once I begun this it just seemed to flow out so I am so pleased you thought it worthy of a 6 Star rating. You have made my night. With many thanks again Cheers +++

Comment from JaC4evr

Excellent

Great use of the contest requirements to weave a delightful poem. I can feel your excitement as you told us about your new born boy, your friends in this case. Best of luck to you and to them. JRS

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 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much JRS for your lovely review I wasn't sure how this would read or if it would meet the requirement so your comments have given me confidence so I really appreciate this. So thanks again Cheers