Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

'Head Talk'
by Chrissy710

Hello Chrissy,

I have Head Talk too and I know how you feel. For me is hard to quiet my mind. I try meditation and that helps a little but most of the time I just ignore the Talk. Good job!

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015

Thank you Gypsy Blue Rose for your review and comments. I think I will just accept my head talk but it has been 'worse ' since I joined FS lol but not in a bad way. I have never written so much than in the last few months and having a ball. Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Exceptional

Hi, Christine...

_ Boy! You nailed it. (*>*)
_ You couldn't have picked a better piece of artwork, either. Liilia's work is such 'good stuff.'
_ Love your ending stanza. May as well get used to all that 'stuff' rattling up there 'cause it 'ain't going anywhere!
_ Great job of putting into words what we all have/do experience.

>> Incorrect version of: too/to
_ There are the times I listen [too](to) a wise word you may speak,

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015

Hi Jax .wow thanks for you great 6 and lovely comments. So glad you liked this and I will fix up the two (I alway have difficulty choosing which to too to use some need some editing and appreciate yours. Yes Liilia has great images and I thought this one matched my poem . Have a great day. I actually don't mind the head talk but it has been real busy lately since I joined FS lol
Cheers Christine😃

reply by Jacqueline M Franklin on 24-Aug-2015

Think of to/too in these terms...

:: to ::
to go / to see / to watch

:: too ::
Use too when something is:
too long / too funny / too big / too easy

Cheers.... (*<*)

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015

Thanks Jax I will practice getting it right ha ha Christine

Comment from Mark Valentine

Excellent

Another great post that touches upon a phenomenon with which almost everyone can relate. I've tried meditation, but the thoughts still come. I'm starting to realize that, in poems where the meter is important, the first line is especially critical for putting that meter in the reader's head. Your first line does that exceptionally well.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015

Hi Mark thanks for this review .I knew there were others out there lol and I appreciate your comment about the first line I hadn't though about it like this before but will keep that comment in mind for future poems . I have done medication also but not very good at it. So my Head Talk wins ha ha. cheers again Christine😀

Comment from quicksandyamurray

Excellent

Heh,Heh. I know this well. The quest for me from God is "Be still and know that I Am God." Not an easy feat for one with an active mindset. I have come to know that He is God long before I sensed this quest, but I have not come to a place where I am quieted enough to know His full power. So, He gave me to understand the analogy between my Parkinson's tremors and being still. If you do not practice and follow a certain prescription, the tremors continue and you cannot be still. So it is with the mind. You have to find the right prescription and implement it. Then use that regularly to become still. It could be meditation, or it could be medication, it is different for each person. Writers have a special calling to have an active mind, so embrace it. Not that you don't already know all this, but this is what your poem triggered. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015

Thank you so much quicksandyamurray for your review and comments and suggestions I have tried meditation and quite enjoy this. As you say writers have active minds and since joining FS my mind is in over times but I have embraced it so just need to keep it in check. Really appreciate your comments . nice to meet you Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

An overactive mind, maybe. I think a lot, especially when I am out, devising poems, but I do have some quiet moments, I guess. Well expressed thoughts and good use of rhyming to convey your message. The word coz is a slang word, to keep consistency with the rest of the language, better to say 'cause or because. Enjoyable read, faye

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 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015

Hi Faye, thanks for reading my poem and giving me a lovely review . I will change the Coz to cause I wasn't sure if cause would be acceptable As some people like because instead but sometimes for me that doesn't work. So glad I can use cause. I think lots of people have head talk and it is interesting to see when it come in and what it says. With Cheers Christine😀

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Great line structuring in spots, descriptive in conveyances and appealing in presentation these statements pounds writer talents but batter has lumps in my view for creamy smoothness -all in my view.

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 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015

Thanks TPAC for your review and comments for this poem . Yes we get battered a fair bit but I find it interesting to stop and listen at times at just what is going on in my head, and At least I can change the subject at times lol. Appreciate your time to read my work Cheers Christine😃