Act of Endurance
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Comment from Jean Lutz
Excellent consistency in using "I". I found it chilling -- like a soul who somehow missed the connection with it's source. Reminded me of the "I wills" of Lucifer recorded in Isaiah 14:11-16.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Excellent consistency in using "I". I found it chilling -- like a soul who somehow missed the connection with it's source. Reminded me of the "I wills" of Lucifer recorded in Isaiah 14:11-16.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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I must read this biblical verse you mention. Thanking you for your encouraging statements about this work. Appreciate generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from LeithAnne
I cannot fault a work like this. I want to read and read and find the true meaning. I don't even begin to imagine how someone can write like this. Definietly thoughts for the mind and consideration
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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I cannot fault a work like this. I want to read and read and find the true meaning. I don't even begin to imagine how someone can write like this. Definietly thoughts for the mind and consideration
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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That bad in expression in proper presentation, lost from normality of common thinking, artistic nonsense bubbling in ones mouth, or me having fun: thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
Comment from Stephanie Kastner
I could feel your torment. And you left me pondering. How well do I know myself? To make one think, you have done well. Congratulations!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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I could feel your torment. And you left me pondering. How well do I know myself? To make one think, you have done well. Congratulations!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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Isn't any good conveyance a work which makes one think, not only consider that spoken but place themselves inside events, they call it reading: thanking you for generous rate and warm conveyances.
Comment from Joyce Long
This is a very strange development of ideas. I notice that you study science and God. However, in your poem you seem to be trying to escape from hell. It seems that the study of either one would show you a way to escape hell. God said: " I am the Way, the Truth, and the Life." I certainly hope you can find that in your studies as a way of life.
Well done.
Joyce 11-15-15
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2015
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This is a very strange development of ideas. I notice that you study science and God. However, in your poem you seem to be trying to escape from hell. It seems that the study of either one would show you a way to escape hell. God said: " I am the Way, the Truth, and the Life." I certainly hope you can find that in your studies as a way of life.
Well done.
Joyce 11-15-15
Comment Written 15-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2015
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I do know these aspect of faith but even Jesus walked the shadow's of death, I am not above this in my fleshly state. Thanking you for generous rate and inspiring thoughts about this write. God nor Jesus are my problem but those contained, as I, in the make believe realities of hell. Big fan of them.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Well, this is certainly something different. I had to slow down and read this poem a couple of times to grasp the meaning of it. I'm not sure I get it yet, but I gave it my best shot. Good work
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Well, this is certainly something different. I had to slow down and read this poem a couple of times to grasp the meaning of it. I'm not sure I get it yet, but I gave it my best shot. Good work
Comment Written 15-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Revisions have been undertaken, not that this would change anything bring parts together better conceived flow. Glad it was different although confusing. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements disclosing this work.
Comment from ericawrites
This is a very long, rather rambling biographical poem
Some typos to be edited.
I in my confusion to(o) soon realised, - add "o"
I did in them believe(d). - remove "d"
with my life making them anger: - change anger to angry
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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This is a very long, rather rambling biographical poem
Some typos to be edited.
I in my confusion to(o) soon realised, - add "o"
I did in them believe(d). - remove "d"
with my life making them anger: - change anger to angry
Comment Written 10-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Yet full of pits but at least hopefully interesting in its conveyance. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed insights.
Comment from robina1978
Excellent artwork that complements this chapter perfectly. I found some rhyme. You wrote about you, bills and many other things. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Excellent artwork that complements this chapter perfectly. I found some rhyme. You wrote about you, bills and many other things. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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The project "Endurance" tries to capture its title through twenty-three poems go to my area and see how close I came: I wish I could visit some others more. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from TallySally
Wow! Would not feed I, raging Beast
Really poignant concepts:
Trying in earnest intentions, I to earn being, obtaining plus more than others believed
I in confusion realised, sadden in learning, honoring were all worthless death schemes
I found to be, a fool, a single cell amoeba: confused in knowing and must be taught
The whole 'humbled by low living' verse
The whole 'past ancestors anger ratings' verse
The last verse.
Tpac - I really like the concepts you develop. The form is consistent and rhymes all work. There were parts that really spoke to me (noted above) and others that I think I got after reading a couple of times. Some of it tugged at my mind but I couldn't quite understand. NOW THERE'S A LOT I DON'T UNDERSTAND. I just wanted to let you know it was frustrating to not be able to stay with you. It's selfish. Of me, but I would like to see you throw the need to rhyme or to fit a form out the window .. and just let'er rip.
I'm going to develop a split personality to augment being bipolar - a 4 star rating is a travesty - especially when it's because I couldn't keep up with YOU.
Best to you. And more, please.
Relda
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Wow! Would not feed I, raging Beast
Really poignant concepts:
Trying in earnest intentions, I to earn being, obtaining plus more than others believed
I in confusion realised, sadden in learning, honoring were all worthless death schemes
I found to be, a fool, a single cell amoeba: confused in knowing and must be taught
The whole 'humbled by low living' verse
The whole 'past ancestors anger ratings' verse
The last verse.
Tpac - I really like the concepts you develop. The form is consistent and rhymes all work. There were parts that really spoke to me (noted above) and others that I think I got after reading a couple of times. Some of it tugged at my mind but I couldn't quite understand. NOW THERE'S A LOT I DON'T UNDERSTAND. I just wanted to let you know it was frustrating to not be able to stay with you. It's selfish. Of me, but I would like to see you throw the need to rhyme or to fit a form out the window .. and just let'er rip.
I'm going to develop a split personality to augment being bipolar - a 4 star rating is a travesty - especially when it's because I couldn't keep up with YOU.
Best to you. And more, please.
Relda
Comment Written 05-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Don't worry about the stars your.statement is what I need and a good one, lots of pits to smooth in my work. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from A.A.A.EXHILARATING RIDE
Hi TPAC, I can only hope I caught the essence of your poem for I believe in a Creator or Mind connecting all we as maturing humanity are given to move from its beginning in physical sense and consciousness as God's Word, given to our Adamic Minds to label and communicate. But, Eve and our evolving Earth story is the story of hearts; and an increasing maturity of Life's Ever Extending, photosynthesising Tree of Knowledge and Life experience.
In this light, it appears to me you have worked valiantly and academically to sit as caterpillar at the tip of a summer's bloom, and now must give way and fall - not into the hellish labels of men, but heart of God's eternity. And, I hope, find Words of your soul, as physics and facts metamorphose into your `I': that eternal unique spiritual being, the flower on this regenerating Tree, or butterfly pumping up its fragile new wings to fly. As brave, I feel, I not knowing if our minds connect in fact.
But I value the stirring, and I thank you for the effort to gift in poetry your view from high on life's Tree. Blessings, Maureen*&*
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2015
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Hi TPAC, I can only hope I caught the essence of your poem for I believe in a Creator or Mind connecting all we as maturing humanity are given to move from its beginning in physical sense and consciousness as God's Word, given to our Adamic Minds to label and communicate. But, Eve and our evolving Earth story is the story of hearts; and an increasing maturity of Life's Ever Extending, photosynthesising Tree of Knowledge and Life experience.
In this light, it appears to me you have worked valiantly and academically to sit as caterpillar at the tip of a summer's bloom, and now must give way and fall - not into the hellish labels of men, but heart of God's eternity. And, I hope, find Words of your soul, as physics and facts metamorphose into your `I': that eternal unique spiritual being, the flower on this regenerating Tree, or butterfly pumping up its fragile new wings to fly. As brave, I feel, I not knowing if our minds connect in fact.
But I value the stirring, and I thank you for the effort to gift in poetry your view from high on life's Tree. Blessings, Maureen*&*
Comment Written 04-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2015
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Glad this work erupted within you all these delightful conveyances, you really tapped into the core and I like that. Thanking you for thoughtful encouragement and generous rate.
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My pleasure TPAC, blessings for your journey. Maureen*&*
Comment from chocoletdrop052
You a being consist of three parts. The heart that houses the spirit, the flesh that covers the body, and the soul that covers the inner and outward portions of what makes you one. Science dissects each part to find what is beneath all things. However, with GOD, it is impossible to dissect or even realize the make up his total being. Death is an example which He is, because although it is administer through mortal man. He is eternal of this. For this reason no one has ever saw Him or ever heard His voice. However, the Son of Man, is the image of GOD. He is the living example to all. He also is GOD in the flesh of Man, being that He is also the Eternal, meaning His existence is not from the birth of the surrogate, but His being was always before us. As a Christian, we know of two deaths, One which is from the flesh and the other that is the spirit. The inheritance we have is from the first Adam, whom lived 930 yrs. Then also Noah, whom lived 930 yrs. But to mankind now, it would be a mystery, since we age at many stages of life. So the examination of I: It is written: Listen to another parable: There was a landowner who planted a vineyard. He put a wall around it, dug a winepress in it and built a watchtower. Then he rented the vineyard to some farmers and moved to another place. When the harvest time approached, he sent his servants to the tenants to collect his fruit. The tenants seized his servants; they beat one, killed another, and stoned a third.Then he sent other servants to them, more than the first time, and the tenants treated them the same way.Last of all, he sent his son to them. 'They will respect my son,' he said.But when the tenants saw the son, they said to each other, 'This is the heir. Come, let's kill him and take his inheritance.'
So they took him and threw him out of the vineyard and killed him. Matthew 21
So there is no I, but there is One.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2015
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You a being consist of three parts. The heart that houses the spirit, the flesh that covers the body, and the soul that covers the inner and outward portions of what makes you one. Science dissects each part to find what is beneath all things. However, with GOD, it is impossible to dissect or even realize the make up his total being. Death is an example which He is, because although it is administer through mortal man. He is eternal of this. For this reason no one has ever saw Him or ever heard His voice. However, the Son of Man, is the image of GOD. He is the living example to all. He also is GOD in the flesh of Man, being that He is also the Eternal, meaning His existence is not from the birth of the surrogate, but His being was always before us. As a Christian, we know of two deaths, One which is from the flesh and the other that is the spirit. The inheritance we have is from the first Adam, whom lived 930 yrs. Then also Noah, whom lived 930 yrs. But to mankind now, it would be a mystery, since we age at many stages of life. So the examination of I: It is written: Listen to another parable: There was a landowner who planted a vineyard. He put a wall around it, dug a winepress in it and built a watchtower. Then he rented the vineyard to some farmers and moved to another place. When the harvest time approached, he sent his servants to the tenants to collect his fruit. The tenants seized his servants; they beat one, killed another, and stoned a third.Then he sent other servants to them, more than the first time, and the tenants treated them the same way.Last of all, he sent his son to them. 'They will respect my son,' he said.But when the tenants saw the son, they said to each other, 'This is the heir. Come, let's kill him and take his inheritance.'
So they took him and threw him out of the vineyard and killed him. Matthew 21
So there is no I, but there is One.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2015
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I feel your truthful statements, I'm fogged about Jesus existence outside of flesh coming, so my thought are I. Great review something I too must strive in my accomplishments. Thanking you for your treasured insights being myself a studier of the Holy Text. Appreciate generous rate and welcomed encouragement.