Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Good interconnected lines with great imagery. good satori also with imagery. Your haiku is very good form.
~~teresa~~

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015

Thank you Teresa :)

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

I would list haiku as nature, and this one fits well into that category. It paints a strong image aa haiku should. Your satori line is appropriate. Take care, my friend~Debbie

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 Comment Written 10-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015

Thank you Debbie :)

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Read your author notes and that helped me to understand what you exactly meant. Even without the notes it creates an elusive picture in mind. Love the ending line. Wonderfully written. Les

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 Comment Written 10-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015

Thank you Les :)