2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "5/7/5 ( Our Mother Nature )"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from TAB_that's me
This has good imagery in it and the syllable count is fine. I think it would be stronger if you didn't use the word Mother twice in such a short poem.
teresa
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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This has good imagery in it and the syllable count is fine. I think it would be stronger if you didn't use the word Mother twice in such a short poem.
teresa
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you Teresa. You are the second writer to mentioned that so I changed the last line to 'don't mess with our mom'.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, mystery writer, an excellent reminder of the job we have to keep nature preserved, I only question the use of mother twice in such a short poem. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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this is an excellent write, mystery writer, an excellent reminder of the job we have to keep nature preserved, I only question the use of mother twice in such a short poem. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you sweetwoodjax. I appreciate your feedback, I will take a look.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Poet,
This is a very nice little poem that is written very well. I certainly enjoyed the read. The music of the birds and other things was also fun to listen to.
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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Hi Poet,
This is a very nice little poem that is written very well. I certainly enjoyed the read. The music of the birds and other things was also fun to listen to.
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Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you MizKat :)
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Once those biological treasures are gone they are lost forever. Should never play with Mother Nature. She has things to offer we can not afford to lose. A well written poem, with a crystal clear message, that should also be a good contest entry. Well done.
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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Once those biological treasures are gone they are lost forever. Should never play with Mother Nature. She has things to offer we can not afford to lose. A well written poem, with a crystal clear message, that should also be a good contest entry. Well done.
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Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much Brett, I really appreciate your review.