Comment from TheFlamingo

Excellent

If I were to turn back the hands of time
I'd I'd be a pubescent boy
No some poor spotty girl
With an ample behind.

Am not a poet. Can you tell? I felt for you though. Great poem.
TheFLamingo

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015

Thank you

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Congrats on your contest win, Lancellot. This is a delightful story of that tumultuous time during growing up that boys undergo before becoming men. I always though those hormonal rushes caused what some would consider pretty embarrassing moments. Ah, for the good old days.

One small nit:
He gave me a shot and said, "Relax, son, its (Son, it's) only puberty." Ha! Only is a bit of an understatement.

Most entertaining,

Gloria

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015

Thank you, Gloria

Comment from sandragee

Excellent

A very clever story of a big brother having a one-sided conversation with his little brother on the topic of puberty. The 'awkward' talk is laced with humor and the rhyming is great. Good writing!

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015

Thank you

Comment from Megalips

Excellent

Congrats on your win, Lance! A poem in a story...or is that a story in a poem. Whichever, it's neat and you handled that topic well with all the fine details, but not too graphic (cause folks on here have a tough time with graphic stuff as we know)...LOL It's a smart idea and well presented!

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015

Thank you. I have a more adult story, Im just going through the final edits.

reply by Megalips on 18-Jul-2015

I usually get an alert when you publish but have not seen one recently...what happened with you 'explicit' story on the stripper? I have not been back to see if I reviewed all your chapters...let me know

Comment from Debbie Noland

Excellent

A fun story and an original take on the contest prompt. Congratulations on your contest win. I especially like the ending. Puberty involves enough confusing changes, let alone the realization that you suddenly talk in rhyme.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015

Thank you, Debbie

Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

I love the rhyming story about puberty. You did a great job and I didn't find a single issue concerning spam. Have a blessed day. Shirley

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2015

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

HAHAHAHAHA - oh my goodness, if this isn't the cutest story ever! I see how it won the contest, lancelot - congratulations on a well-earned win (and some really wonderful rhyme)! *grinning big-time* (No sixes or you'd sure have one for this great tale.) ***************************!!!

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2015

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Just brilliant and so clever, Lance.

It drew me in right away and kept me
reading - why am I not surprised it's
a winner!!! Congratulations.


Margaret

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2015

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Yes, i sure do. Glad you won the contest. Must share the laugh as I was thinking about what the DR. said. It all happens and then some. Well done.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2015

Comment from Showboat

Excellent

Excellent, Lance, and I'm thrilled everyone else agreed. Congratulations on this awesome ode, my friend. Very enjoyable to say the least.

Hugs,
Gayle

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2015