Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

this is such a tragic tale that i did quite hate to read it. it has such a powerful impact that i don't know how you have come up with this. very well executed.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015

Thank you for the great review. It was not from personal experience.

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Hmm, interesting.

notes

I prayed Daddy wouldn't(') hit you again.
- delete

I even told him that {daddies} shouldn't(') hit mommies.

- consistent with the mommies

Let's go down (-)stairs and play that pretend game again.

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 Comment Written 16-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015

Thanks for the sharp eye. shouldn't be writing when I am tired. lol